Isobel, I like this very much although the shoes scare me just a little bit.

John

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Original item by Isobel

I like the humour at the end too Andy - life can throw a lot of shit at everyone but we must never lose that.
Isobel x

Comment is about REVENGE IS A DISH BEST SERVED COLD .. (blog)

Original item by Andy N

I guess I could work my way through to 'what she wears beneath..' but I might disappoint you all. LOL! No - I'm think I'm done with that one - it was just a brief moment in time where my confidence was shaken - so easily done - I've rallied now - for the next 10 years at least...
Isobel x

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Original item by Andy N

Cynthia and Janet - you both say 'were' - do you mean to say you don't still have them? And just when should a women give them up - that is the question..

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Original item by Isobel

ps. sorry, i'm in a rush but wanted to comment on your poem.
I did keep getting back up though, even though my cheeks were a bit red with embarrassment. Those shoes didn't get the better of me :-)

Janet.x

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Original item by Isobel

I didn't give too much thought to structure when I wrote this. I am grateful to Winston for taking the time to look at it. I like the more formal structure of his version but don't like the way ideas are chopped up. I think once poems are written it becomes hard to change the structure - you almost need to build your ideas round the structure whilst you are writing and not the other way round. You may disagree so I'll give you the benefit of both..
Thanks to all for reading - it is in the third person but as you all probably have guessed - a very personal poem.

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Original item by Isobel

Hi Isobel,
i can guess where the inspiration for this came from. Mine were 5 inch platforms with a few bits of string on top to grip my feet. :-)
I lost count of the number of times i slipped off and toppled over.

Janet.x
Janet.x

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Original item by Isobel

and there but for the grace of god go I...

some very sad and true words spoken here Dave. Unfortunately some of us give so much, we wear ourselves out and others seem quite happy to sit back, do and say as they please, expecting us to just take it, then have the nerve to call themselves a friend.
Equality and balance = friendship. (materially or otherwise) :-)


Thought provoking piece of prose.
Janet.x

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Original item by Dave Morgan

Nice one Andy.
I absolutely love the use of Charles Bukowski in this poem. It speaks volumes, and in keeping with Cynthia's comment, there's a wry kind of humour in the ending. I like that.

Janet.x

Comment is about REVENGE IS A DISH BEST SERVED COLD .. (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Like this a lot Pete...very clever ..full of nostalgic pathos

she stopped functioning, i left home
we grew up and they discarded her
she was never mine anyway
and that hurts

Well Done
CU soon
Gus

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Hi Dermot,

Classical poetic form meets "The Fast Show."
Higson and Whitehouse would be proud of you! Nice one.
Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Dermot Glennon

Isobel, mine were black suede with red satin linings - highly visible when I tipped my heels off and dangled the shoe from my toes... same idea. Good poem. Great capturing.

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Original item by Isobel

I enjoyed this outpouring of wit in good scansion, Dave. But I found the end, the self-appointed antithesis, very unkind, perhaps even arrogant. I actually felt a bit bad.

Comment is about Looking for more (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Tommy, it's terrific. You have the power of 'multum in parvo'. (I looked that up for the purpose ... much in little ...)

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

Good one, Andy. Very true, and therefore quite funny. I do think there is really more humour in life that any other true emotion.
I did get a teeny bit lost in your pronouns - the mix of singulars and plurals. You might clarify what you meant to keep the thought strong.

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Original item by Andy N

Right on Chris!!!....

LouD AnD CLeaR

Comment is about JaXOnoRY gorY storiEZ (blog)

Original item by Chris Jam

Thanks for your comment Andy - I would say definitely a page poem - my performance stuff is a lot punchier. Am agonising at the moment about whether to chop it all up and put better structure to it - but am glad you liked it.
Isobel x

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Original item by Andy N

Nice stuff, Isobel.. Have you tried reading this out yet? Would be interested in knowing how well it went down as I can't make up my mind whether it is performance based or more of a page piece! x

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Original item by Isobel

i don't get the last line, i must admit but i enjoyed most off this!

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

You have no email address Anthony - wanted to ask your opinion on something - any chance of emailing me - I promise not to stalk you in my red shoes!

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Dave,

May I be the first to offer myself up for adoption?

Something-something male poet (debatable), partly house-trained (non-neutered), needs regular attention, will perform tricks for food. Needs an all-female environment and complete restoration. A.O.C

Neat idea, but I'm not holding my breath!Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Dave Morgan

Hi Chris,
A timely reminder that the way the media and public appetites work these days makes every day "a good day to bury bad news."
Nice one.
Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about JaXOnoRY gorY storiEZ (blog)

Original item by Chris Jam

Hi Dave,
I find your ..gulp...poem to be funny and in some ways a very sad statement on humans.Let me go look around the house, Im sure I have some pain pills to donate, as I hate them. I guess I could adopt a poet for a time, pats on the back and some words of hope, I shall give for free.

Comment is about Give Generously (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Hi Isobel,
Red shoes - now there's an iconic image. Red is perhaps the most emotive of colours, the colour of blood and passion and power. I even used to wear red "Kickers" myself once. (And you might recall that I have a "thing" about scarlet stilettos.) Then there's "The Red Shoes" film (1948), and Dorothy's magical "ruby slippers" from The Wizard of Oz. I notice you are writing this in the third person - interesting. Was it a "dictaphone in the shower" moment? ;-) I think it's great that you can put someone in a situation, give the world a glimpse of their circumstances, character and ambitions, and tell a short story - all within a few lines; also leaving enough space for the reader to fill in with their own imagination. This is what writing is all about. Good stuff.
Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Isobel

Hi Cynthia,
Interesting mix of concern, fear, deduction, compassion, detachment and the illogical and random thoughts of the small hours. And all in five minutes? Impressive!
Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi dave,
I like list poems when done well and with a purpose. This was both.
Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Anthony, Loved this. some great ideas. nice end. Win

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Good stuff here Chris! Best wishes from a newbie

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Original item by Chris Jam

I never played with dolls but I did climb trees and make mud pies - still making them - what does that say about me? Thankfully ideas about what is gender 'appropriate' seem to be changing for the better. An interesting poem, even it isn't directly through your eagle eyes.

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Hehe - like it - there's a very slight overlap here with a poem I penned this morning 'Dusty Books'
Best wishes

Comment is about Please Do Not Put Me In a Rhyme (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Dave, An easy to read poem which keeps you engaged with its runaway rhythm, favourite stanza is -

Stamp collectors, meditaters,
Book readers, cat breeders,
Temple goers, seed sowers,
Fish catchers, plot hatchers,
TV watchers, DIY botchers,

good read. Winston

Comment is about Looking for more (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

A brilliant poem Dave - in structure, language and message - you have the whole package - very, very clever.

Comment is about Looking for more (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Chris. Your words and ideas and bizare combinations of images seemed clearer and easier to take in in this recording, still wanting text though?! Winston

Comment is about rinTin TinerneT wrayZ (blog)

Original item by Chris Jam

Which roughly translated means - you like the message but not necessarily the construction - tee hee - I must admit - I tend to write from the heart and don't give technique much thought - luckily I'm not after winning any competitions! Thanks for your comment Dave - I always value your opinion.

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Original item by Isobel

Loved this. Can't say anything technical about it - just liked it a lot!

Comment is about Red Shoes (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Well turned Anthony. Reminds me of home!
Steve Smith

Comment is about a curse - for the mildly irritating (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Really captures the way the brain works,this one! Beautifully written!

Comment is about A Five-minute Poem (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You have a heart Cynthia - yes being human is sometimes very hard - it would be so easy not to think - don't you think?

Comment is about A Five-minute Poem (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Dea Cynthia,
This is a fine piece of work and is universally resonant. I think of that day too.
Steve Smith.

Comment is about The Last Verse (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

:)) Cheers Daniel for your comment on 'Dusty Books' - it was actually spurred by a debate on another poetry forum, but I thought I would risk airing it here too, hehe.

Best wishes

Comment is about Daniel Hooks (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

I think this poem is brilliant!!!

Comment is about Dusty Books (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Isobel,
Maybe you should write a curse for use on "multiple-posters"? Now there's a thought. Alternatively feel free to make use of this one if you so wish.
Regards (and witch-like cackles),
A.E.

Comment is about a curse - for the mildly irritating (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Brilliant.

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

I enjoyed this poem. When my sons were small, there was a thought that boys should play with babydolls, that it helps them connect to their emotions. I got them both babydolls, and they did play with them a little.There is nothing wrong with children exploring. I remember once matthew wanted a vaccume and a microwave oven from santa. I got them for him, some in my family went nuts, said he would grow up gay. Was very funny, and hes not. He just wanted to be like Mom.brilliant poem!

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Oh Peter, give over. I bet there are quite a few toughies out there who played with baby dolls when they where little boys. They not only squeezed them, they would draw spectacles and mustachios on their faces .
Horrid boys.

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Hello Dave
I find that cat-motivation poems work especially well if you shake a box of Go-Cat (or similar) in time with the rhythm. I've noticed that they soon prick their ears up.
Best wishes
Rachel P

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

No - it was just a cunning ploy so he could get to the top of the blogs again - don't blink Anthony or you'll be submerged by ten tonnes, all from the same poet...

Comment is about a curse - for the mildly irritating (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Rachel - I must seek guidance from you on penning the purrfect cat motivational poem! ;) I confess my own cat scribes feature fur balls rather than address them, hehe. Best wishes

Dave

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Original item by Rachel Pantechnicon

Re-balloon. Oh no! You'll have to do much better than that! I want a rose with it too. :-)

My niece sends balloons up into the sky for each grandparent on anniversaries of their deaths. She did it at the funerals too. Much nicer than throwing soil in the ground. :-)

Janet.x

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

ps. is that a deliberate typo just for me?

south of ''your'' a**e.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson