Nice Janet. Love the last two lines.

John

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Like this one... Pupils that express themselves were always seen as spawns of Satan, particularly in Grammar Schools :-)

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Original item by Dave Dunn

thanks Tony :)

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Aww, i love the dog. x

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This is great. Very typical of the human race.

Janet :-)

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Original item by JEFF.W

Just enjoyed your "Windows", Winston...I wonder if Nathan is leaning Left?!
David

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

nice one, 'The Wood'... The last line is a killer!

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Original item by JEFF.W

Dear Gus

Just to say thanks for your well-considered comments on my poem. I'm delighted that it appealed to you. My memories of 'I Got You Babe' are slightly hazy. I was only three months old when it came out. I must remind myself of its finer details.

With best regards from New Malden

Rachel P

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Hello Steve,
thank you for your comment on Aurora. I really like 'A Poetess Worth Words'. Beautiful and haunting... like your country. Deb : )

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Original item by stephen smith

Beautiful, precise ,colours and movement.
Steve Smith

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Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

I took a little time, to think it over.
It took a little time, to work it out.
Promises promises turn to dust.

Well did ya or didn't ya?
Ah, the Beautiful South!

Love this poem Rachel. Pity the sound went off before the end though.
Janet.x

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Hi John - cheers for commenting on Tramp Stamp. I haven't read it before but am going to at the next Freed Up - it fits the theme I think!

I LOVE work is shit - made me laugh out loud and especially 'listening to fat anne' - god it's boring to hear people drone about calories while stuffing their faces!

Ax

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Original item by John Darwin

Hi Winston, thanks for your comment on 'old man at bar'. It seems a tenuous link to 'English Bond' but it was the starting point for me. Hope I can make it to Hebden next month.
John

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Original item by Winston Plowes

Many thanks for your message Cynthia x I love moon month!

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This infantile humour was never meant to be taken too seriously. Women look and smell beautiful. My joke was that blame is only acceptable if a man's the victim!

Comment is about Broken Wind (blog)

Original item by Jon Ridgeway

Hi Janet, This one has an interesting flow to it. Took me a while to find my way through but it has a lot to give. More than on first reading. I am reminded of the Metaphysical poems of Vaughan. loved this. Win x

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Belinda, you paid the highest compliment i could ever have wished for and i thank you.
I can't tell you just how much it means to me for many reasons.

Thankyou
Janet.x.

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Original item by Belinda

When I read this poem, it reminded me of the sunrise and the sunset and all the colours that light up the sky, the brilliant light of the sky from dawn til dusk.

It also reminded me of Dylan ' Do not go gentle into that good night'

Rage, rage against the dying of the light'

It's well written and has a alot of depth

Best Wishes

Belinda x

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Hi Janet,

Thank you for taking the time to comment. All comments are always welcomed and greatly appreciated. I've not posted anything for a while, and I really do mean to getting around to commenting on other peoples work as well as posting my own.

I will have a think about this poem over the next week or so, as I feel it needs playing around with.

Best Wishes

Belinda x

Comment is about Shoes - Draft 1 (blog)

Original item by Belinda

...but since you asked so nicely, I have added two more poems to my profile.

Rachel

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Original item by Winston Plowes

My comment was not meant to increase female denial it was meant to be ironic. A twist on the fact that it is hard for women to be natural without being derided. Of course we, as women, can be, are, accountable for our smells. When men do it, more often than not, it's ha ha, what a bloke, if we do it, we are either deemed to be totally disgusting or not real women or ‘ladies’ or whatever.
So many things women have to cover up and pretend we don't do, so many feelings we have as well that are deemed not acceptable, in the name of being 'nice women.'
There is still much, very much, to be sorted in the male/female divide but there are reasons in this instance, as in most of the misunderstandings in this debate.
So much of our lives as women involves controlling our bodies in one form or another. Have you seen the sanitary products they try to sell us to make us smell of manufactured perfume instead of our own natural odours? The message is loud and clear, women stink and we want you to cover it up and smell nice all the time.
Are men accountable for the pain we put ourselves through to be hairless for one thing? Do you think women just get that way naturally? Do you think if we lived without men that we'd bother?
We'd probably all go around in sloppy jeans, farting and burping and maybe even laughing about it. So why do we deny the 'nasty' things we do? Could it be to 'appear' nicer when men are around?
To avert the feelings of self-disgust that we have no place for. Nobody will laugh or slap us on the back for it, they might be revolted and reject us in one way or another. So, maybe it is for men, that we hide our real selves and publically deny our natural bodily functions. If ‘you’ the world, the media, men, can’t accept our hairy arms and legs, natural monthly odours, how well is a really stinky smell going to be received?

Comment is about Broken Wind (blog)

Original item by Jon Ridgeway

hi dave, first of all thanks for your ditty about my writing style! I love it! I think give generously is brilliant. If you need a lost poets face to front your wonderful campaign, I can fully offer my services.... For a small fee of course!

Cheers dave for making me smile

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Original item by Dave Morgan

This very much reminds me of an occasion in cold January when I saw an injured pigeon while walking the dog. I couldn't really do anything as I had the dog with me, and just felt best let nature take its course. The next day I found it dead - and I cried! I felt terribly guilty that *I* had left to die in the cold.

I can totally relate to the sentiment behind this Cynthia - it is hard to be human.

Thanks also for commenting on Tramp Stamp and Fireflies x

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This made me smile though there is another underlying theme running through this.
A bad smell is a bad spirit though not necessarily a dead one. Even farts can smell sweet which creates laughter in a cringy sort of way. :-)
We just need to lighten up a bit.
Janet.x

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Original item by Jon Ridgeway

I also believe that god or good and the devil or evil lives within each of us now and the choice is ours which one we live by.
I also agree that Mary was no virgin.

As you say, a lot of things get twisted along the way according to what you believe or want to believe about what others tell you is true.

Makes sense to me anyway.

Janet.x

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Original item by Jon Ridgeway

I think this has so much hidden depth it is difficult to fathom and that is what this poem is about.
The fighter in life who battles on regardless but comes to a standstill to meet itself coming back. I hesitate to day 'her' because it can happen to anyone.
I like the reference to 'Dorothy' and the russian doll. The dream still being sought and the rage deep within needing escape.

Of course i could be completely wrong but that's what this poem says to me. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Blue Angel (blog)

Original item by John G.Hall

I've read this a few times and i do like it, especially the reference to the tiger's eye at the end. I can relate to the properties of a tiger eye banded crystal.

Janet.x

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Original item by John G.Hall

I like this too. It has so much variation in colour which adds a pleasing element to the emptiness.

Nice poem Emily.
Janet.x

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Hi Belinda,
i'm certainly no expert and i think this poem does have a strong image.
A bit of juggling around might make it stronger but as you say it is a first draft.
I do love to read your work, it always has strong imagery for me.

Janet.x

Comment is about Shoes - Draft 1 (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Mr Hall, I've really tried, but I'm lost. Could you help me out a bit so that I can appreciate what you're doing? The metaphors are confounding me.

Comment is about Blue Angel (blog)

Original item by John G.Hall

Emily, I am greatly enjoying all your poems, the succinctness of them with their weighted words. I may not comment on each, but I do read them all.

Comment is about knitwear vista (blog)

To me, it is better to have an engaging poem, without meaning than a meaningful (or even 'nice') poem, without being engaging. This is very definitely engaging! Not that it is without meaning, that's not what I'm saying - but you could have been talking about nothing at all with this and I'd have read to the end, because of how it engaged.

Do you think there are people in between the two extremes you write about though?

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Much fun!

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Win - thanks for your comments regarding Fireflies (and your help working on it!). With regard to your other comments:

To the Tardis I tried to run
Strange glow around my head
Single blast of Ray Gun
The Daleks shot me dead

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

I wrote this poem as part of a workshop exercise.

We had to focus all of our energy on a particular object, an object that conjured up alot of images and feelings for you personally.

I wrote about my dad's shoes, as I think they say alot about him.

Best Wishes

Belinda

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Original item by Belinda

could it be that
'handle long green stems
by the corner of the road'
would be better to ease into the 'by' and 'and' repeat. win ?

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liked this but not sure why?
Liked the by... by and the and...and I tink and the let down at the end. Win x

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You didn't tell me enough about this story.

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There is some sumptuous imagery here. I liked the juxtaposition between decay and the fresh, the dormancy and the life.

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Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

very neat Scott but you do go on a bit, a little too loquacious for my liking daddyo

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Indeed I was, small world, must get back to it, everything's half finished, haven't got time to pass a decent sized poem let alone a 30 minute script, I'll look out for your offering, cheers.

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Original item by Emma Roy- Williams

Jon oh Jon how wrong thou art,
women toot but never fart.
terrible vapours? nasal offenses?
is it not bad enough we suffer our menses?
and if our vapours should reach your nose
they're only the ones
which smell like the rose.
signed
the long suffering partner of a man of Irish descent who has more wind than the plains of Kentucky and still giggles with childish mirth at such antics.oh woah is me.

Comment is about Broken Wind (blog)

Original item by Jon Ridgeway

Hi Cynthia. Thanksfor your comments on the Haikus. I have written quite a few now although none are on here. I do like the form. Re Mutton dressed as lamb. Yes this is a well worn phrase as is fish out of water in the first stanza. Tosome it may also be to cliche. I liked the idea of each haiku ending with a common phrase, The second however admitedly does not. Guess It could be 'another spare part'. As to it been cruel, yes perhaps but that doesn't worry me here. Life is all shades. Rough / rude / awkward / sad and cruel. One idea I had was to expand this poem to one where the next 3 'sad' subjects are men (just for balance). Winston

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Win,
thank you for commenting on Turn Away. Kind of is children lost but as adults struggling to do what needs to be done and a sinister element intruding. Hope life is good in Heb, Deb xx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi CAte, thanks for commenting on Turn Away. No, they're not children of the future, although I like your take. more they are children of the past, adults of the future,children raised by grandmothers, becoming drowned in things they can't quite handle.thanks again Cate for taking the time to read and comment, Deb xx

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Original item by Cate

Hi AE,
ta for commenting on my last entry.
"suffer from subconscious comparison." what the barley or the sinister element? hmm. i think you have tied me up in knots slightly.not hard to do. yes, it means a sinister element. I know Sting sang about fileds of the same grain but i live among fields of various stuff and barley was the one i felt lost in in this case. There's quite a lot of it about and it's very tall and green. Easy for the children i was writing of to get lost in.I kinda wishedthey'd got lost in fields of oilseed rape instead to avoid the comparison but it was barley i meant so I'll have to ride this one out.ta. Deb

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hello Winston
Gosh, blogging. I'm not entirely sure I'd know how to do that. But thankyou for the interest. I like the look of your barge, by the way.
Best regards
Rachel P

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi there. No blog entries? Is this an one poem personal ad? Can we see some blog entries so we can comment? Winston

Comment is about Rachel Pantechnicon (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel Pantechnicon

I appreciate the conceit and the direction of this poem,but in my opinion it's not pointed enough to damage the target. The images are good but the Charity Pimps deserve more discomfort.
Steve Smith.

Comment is about Lady of Shalott Day (article)

Hard times... or the beginning of the end...

'The winding road we celebrate
we reached this far
the splintering path of love'

You capture well the truth and emotion of
'the imminent'

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