<Deleted User> (8158)
Tue 18th May 2010 06:14
Thanks for this - there is still some rhyming humour in the world! Mary G
Comment is about Neck (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th May 2010 22:28
Good evening Lynn-thanks very much for kind comments on'night walk' I better be respectful and have good read of your work-forgive my bad manners-cheers-Stefan.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hello Ann
Just got your comment on my page about abandoning ship.
Please don't.
I haven't followed all the thread I commented on as I've had two problems. Firstly, I was in Scarborough on holiwags so I could only respond by mobile text and secondly, I've got worms computer virus kinds) so I haven't been able to log on when I got back home.
Anyway, I don't know all the thread, the heat etc. All I'd say is you seem a nice person and the site would be poorer without you.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
LOL
Such the imagination!
Where do you come up with this stuff?!
Comment is about Glitter in an Afro (blog)
Original item by Mia Darlone
Hello Mia. Some wonderfully daft lines, e.g.
Your charisma melts away my guard
My priority is not just to make you hard
I want to embrace balls lovingly
Like Frankie Lampard. and
If you were a coat I’d wear you in summer
Morph myself into a guitar if you were a strummer
And happily have a sex change
If you were a bummer.
You could easily finish there, I think,the next 4 lines aren't so good but lots of nice stuff, on the whole.
Comment is about Glitter in an Afro (blog)
Original item by Mia Darlone
Hi Larisa, must say how much I enjoyed "Wreck of Hopes".
Thank you for your kind comments on my work too.
Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Thanks K. I welcome your comments. I was deliberately confusing 'economic' prostitutes and 'intellectual' ones.
:o)
Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Kealan Coady
<Deleted User> (8243)
Mon 17th May 2010 20:30
Firstly, thank you for your comments on my poems. I enjoyed them very much and I really like the interaction this site provides, especially towards a new member like me.
This is my first exposure to your work and I almost done myself a mischief after the first verse! Mama Mia! After that you really get the sense of anti climax, disappointment and awkwardness. The final verse just tails off just as many of these encounters tend to.... or so I'm told.
Comment is about Bedroom Games (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (8243)
Mon 17th May 2010 19:54
Thanks for your comment. It is nice to be made to feel welcome as a new comer to the site.
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Thanks, Ray. And I intended to check for two 'l's'. Thought of it as I dropped off to sleep. Had stupid dreams too...maybe connected. Isn't that sad? LOL.
Comment is about Morning on the Mall (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Excellent. Couldn't think of any others though it did occur that removing the 'd' from drainpipe makes very little difference.
Comment is about If Ds died (blog)
Original item by Rod Whitworth
This is lovely Dave, tender and gentle... very touching.
Cate xx
Comment is about To a friend (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
absolutely brilliant, clever, original and funny.
Comment is about If Ds died (blog)
Original item by Rod Whitworth
Hello Greg. Ta for the comments. I'm a fan of Camus.That Claret and Blue poem I posted a while back was originally called All That I Know Most Surely.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Cate, thanks so much for your comments on Gloria.
Comment is about Cate (poet profile)
Original item by Cate
Anthony, thanks for comments on Gloria. I've done the odd homage to JCC, saw him perform a couple of weeks ago and he was brilliantly funny. On the other hand, saw him at The Big Chill last year and he was poor.
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
It's actually 4 separate poems stuck together - does that make it quadriliteral?
Comment is about Fear Nowt (blog)
Original item by Jon Ridgeway
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th May 2010 13:07
OH! get you!poshnobs! creme brulee! was is that Kath? or should I say Mrs Bouquet? haha! does it come in plastic tubs to pour water on? gizzuz some! also-where do you leave time for all the fancy men(like me-NOT!)just having a jest in me 'owd string vest.keep happy,chick-Stefan-x
Comment is about Free time (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Thankyou Cynthia Bluebell! much appreciated x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
lot going on here cynthia.. although it is a poem (and a piece with lots of dialogue which i particularly love!), this could be expanded certainly into a short play or story indeed..
good stuff either way.. really enjoyed it!
Comment is about Morning on the Mall (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Beauitful, Dave..
To be honest, I would changed the last line to read
'Your caring,
a kiss'
this will it makes the point more at the end at it.
Otherwise, i love this.. it's a heart breaker in a nice way! lol
Comment is about To a friend (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Close to a bit of prose or a diary entry this, kath but i like the way it develops and i am sure we can all agree it on the last line! lol
Comment is about Free time (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Dave I have read several of your posts re Liverpool and kensington and commend you for your positive outlook in what is the most deprived area of the UK (HMG reports)and things change at the speed of decades! My reference to prostitutes (which I do not ridicule) and 'poetic prostitutes' of which I do. The first is a matter of fact: after a 'clean'-up' of the formally notorious area around Faulkner square and Anglican cathedral, Prostitution was 'moved' to Sheil Road and a 'blind-eye' taken by authorities. As I say I am not criticising women for this. The 'poetic prostitutes' and the verse in which it contains is one as you say written in 'poetic' language...tourists as commonly understood are not involved (lol). I will leave you to gather its meaning. ;0) I have lived in Kensington in various locations: Connaught road, Shiel road, Huntly road, Boaler st, West Derby road, and 4 other areas very close to Kensington most of my life in the Shiel road area. My ears prick up when Liverpudlians and pity are mentioned in the same phrase. A contemptible term invented by the media and repeated ad-nauseum. I hope any rereading of the poem is enhanced by the above post. Thank you for your time and comments. ps The area is being demolished, some decent houses and facilities may come of it.
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hi Tommy
As you know I lived on the patch for 24 years and yes the girls on the game are part of the reality. But tourists? What part do you live in, I never saw any. Maybe it's poetic licence in what is a powerful poem.
There's another side to Kensington - positive stuff happening. It's a right old mix
Comment is about Kensington (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Lovely sentiments Dave : )
p.s. If someone texted me those words - I think my heart would melt.
Comment is about To a friend (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
I agree with what has already been said...
Fabulous lines and references!
'she taught me French and schizophrenia
when I only desired to be between her.'
'a gun in my hand and a dying arab,
the farewell note when I wake from sleep,'
"Parce que, tu es un stereotype."
Comment is about Gloria (blog)
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sun 16th May 2010 20:25
Hmph! - I've come over all decaffeinated now....
Comment is about Tosspot! (blog)
Original item by Cate
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 16th May 2010 20:23
Good evening Lynn-many thanks for commenting on 'Liquid observance' Good luck with your desire to become published.Also I like your varied taste in poetry.I think it requires that variation without doubt-my gratitude to you-Stefan.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Ray, this made me smile with pleasure. I too liked the lines: "she was three years my senior,/ she taught me French and schizophrenia" but also, rather to my surprise, "in this life it's shit or be shat on", which has a wonderful, forceful rhythm to it. I also enjoyed the references to Patti Smith and Camus, who, I'm sure you know, was also a goalkeeper. I used to possess a treasured Philosophy Football sweatshirt with the words 'All that I know most surely about morality and obligations I owe to football,” emblazoned on it. Sadly I no longer fit it.
Comment is about Gloria (blog)
<Deleted User> (8251)
Sun 16th May 2010 19:30
I'm not sure you ever had it Banksy - twas but a storm in a teacup...
Comment is about Tosspot! (blog)
Original item by Cate
Cynthia, please don't call me Mr Miller. It brings back so many unpleasant courtroom memories.I read on a thread last week a few folks bemoaning the absence of "constructive criticism". I'm trying to give some - whether you like it or not!!
So, would a child go from this: Jeez, Dad,” says the kid. “It’s a homo
In woman’s stuff! Is he crazy!”
to this:
But, Jeez, Dad,” says the boy,
“What if he doesn’t want to play anymore?
What if he doesn’t care who knows?
What if he has to be a woman?”
Myself, I think it unlikely, implausible. But I like the poem, I especially like the poetry of the first verse. It's hoi polloi, by the way.
Best Wishes, Ray
Comment is about Morning on the Mall (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sun 16th May 2010 17:21
Superb story telling a very clever
structured play...
wonderful wonderful
Gus xx
Comment is about Morning on the Mall (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I love this, Marianne. I've been a while getting back to it. So many expressions, images, devices are just plain inspiring and satisfying. 'the weather between the pestle and mortar' is fab, like so many others. You are a leader.
Comment is about THE VINDICTIVE VOWEL (or the deflated self). (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
This is actually quite funny, and a great social comment. It seems to have run away with the writer like a stagecoach jolting off the road behind horses on 'uppers', completely uncontrollable by the driver. I think if this were tightened up a lot, keeping really good bits and jettisoning unnecessary stuff, it would be half as long and really super.
Comment is about Super Size Super Skinny (blog)
Original item by Kate Tym
Spontaneous knock-out upper cut. Who cares about finesse! The champ is floored.
Comment is about Tosspot! (blog)
Original item by Cate
Thank you all for reading such a long posting and still commenting as well. I maintain that children are often far more aware of current issues than adults are. They are all ears and eyes from the telly hours, the adults' 'private' conversations, and the 'schoolyard discussions'. My extended family has three homosexual members, all open now, one previously married with two children. His partner also has a family. Children talk freely and pointedly without shame; adults circumnavigate their conversations for many reasons.
Mr Miller, the opening verse was a deliberate 'poetical' setting of the scene, intoducing with high tone the 'hoi polloi' who make up the opinions of the general world, to contrast with the reality of the individual situation. Later these same 'people' become the reactive 'voice' of the public.
Comment is about Morning on the Mall (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Yes... I agree with TC.
You have expressed such sweet and touching sentiments here...
'But there seemed to be this one...
I admire how she wrote to me everyday...
Commitment not seen in any relationship...
She always seemed to come back and forgave...
Strong enough to see past my flaws'
Comment is about Devotion is the Motion (blog)
Original item by Josh Coates
What can I say? LOL
I love your style and wit Cate : )
Comment is about Tosspot! (blog)
Original item by Cate
<Deleted User> (7073)
Sun 16th May 2010 14:38
Love your fluffy bunny TC XX
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
<Deleted User> (7073)
Sun 16th May 2010 14:29
I like this Josh, it is very positive in nature, and yes there are beautiful wise constant individuals out there. TC
Comment is about Devotion is the Motion (blog)
Original item by Josh Coates
<Deleted User> (7073)
Sun 16th May 2010 13:12
Heh heh you should have dedicated it to the obsessive wankers of WOL they seem to be growing in number, or maybe the periodicity of their bilious wankery ha ha TC
Comment is about Tosspot! (blog)
Original item by Cate
<Deleted User> (3103)
Sun 16th May 2010 12:32
Thank you for your comments Ann, I'm glad you like it. Really like the ruins poem, brings back memories of childhood and the way you see the world
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Fran Isherwood
Tue 18th May 2010 13:58
Thank you, Susan. Hope to bump into you soon at another gig.
Comment is about Fran Isherwood (poet profile)
Original item by Fran Isherwood