hmm, inspired by sunday roast, me thinks. The answer may be herbal, perhaps thyme!

Comment is about Sage & Onion (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Tommy, re change a letter. I must brush up on my Arabic. Thankyou for your contribution (even thoughtI didn't understand it) please have another go and I will try and decypher it this time. Win X

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

This one caught my eye and further reading captured a memory amongst other things.
I'm a natural born analyser of anything and everything. I don't always come up with the right solutions but at least i make the effort and there is where most answers/solutions are found but rarely when all the analysing is one sided. ;-)

Comment is about Sage & Onion (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

totally and utterly stolen from the hymn. Since I discovered pastiche as an accepted form there's no holding me back!

Comment is about The Vow (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

I think this can be interpreted in two ways. It's appropriate to the Halloween theme... and the living dead, vampires etc..
but i can see the references within it could be relevant to insomnia too. Nice one Ann ;-)
A double whammy.x

Comment is about sleepless (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

When i read the first few lines of this the rhythm immediately reminded me of the hymn 'We plough the fields and scatter.'
Not entirely out of place in this instance. A very current, factual styled poem.x

Comment is about The Vow (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Hi Isobel and thanks for commenting on 'World.'
There isn't intentionally a lot running below the surface in it. Cynthia's comment is actually spot on but every single comment is appreciated and helps me to fix anything that might need some alteration for greater impact and understanding. Sometimes it's nice just to write about nature :-)
xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate your comments.























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Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hi Lynn and thanks for your lovely comment on my poem, 'World.'

I've just been reading your samples here and love 'Impossibility.' It asks all the questions associated with the topic. :-)

I see you seem to like writing about current affairs and government issues that affect lives. I'm afraid i'm a bit ignorant in that direction as i find such things, although part of our reality, so depressing i have a switch off button in my head.
I will continue to look out for your entries though with genuine interest.x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Ann, thanks for commenting on 'World.'
It is a kind of battle against the elements of nature, human as well as 'natural' disasters? not sure it is meant to be quite that strong so gentle is probably correct.
Cynthia has it spot on but your comment adds to it so thanks for your valued input.x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comment on my poem, 'World.'
You are spot on with your interpretation. I thank you also for your further comments because i originally intended to blog them as a mini series but was very uncertain about the strength/powr/impact of each one standing alone. I've been working on it for some weeks and had real difficulty with the very first stanza but got fed up so decided it was time to air it.xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you all very much, your comments are more than welcome :-)

Cynthia hit the nail on the head.
I thought about doing this as a mini series but was a little unsure of the strength of each one standing alone.
Buffeted is the perfect word to feel for my intention.
Loosely, it is meant to refer to being buffeted against the evils and elements of nature, human or natural. I hope that comes through. I really struggled with the first stanza.x

Comment is about World (blog)

Hi Ann
Thank you for taking the time to comment on my poems.It was good meeting up with you on the BW, its always a pleasure to spend time in the company of Poets.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Very powerful.
Cx

Comment is about Shadow on the Sun (blog)

Original item by sian howell

I can empathise with the insomnia, the ending is bleak, and I'm identifying there too. The line that intrigues - To sleep before the sun - that can be played with a bit more I think, I can see several ambiguities there anyway.
Interesting piece
Cx

Comment is about sleepless (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I did think of spaghetti junction funnily enough - but it didn't sound too good. Maybe fractured glass would work better? Under fractured there was a picture on google that looked less crumbly than the one I used.
Thanks for your comment Cynthia, Bernie, Winston, all. I'm off to put my witches costume on now. Don't think I'll need the nose...

Comment is about The Original Oak (blog)

Original item by Isobel

It seems to me that there is a gentle battle going on here, between two people or entities. Gentle . . . but serious! xx

Comment is about World (blog)

Excellent Val. I don't think I can add to the comments here, they've said it all already. And like several others here - I can identify so strongly with this.
Cx

Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

For myself, I like the idea of the poem ending on the line
"but I lost it on the way."
Makes it more enigmatic, which I like. Car journies can be so stressfull!! I am the world's worst navigator - or so my partner always told me!!!

Comment is about Crash (blog)

Original item by David Mac

very good
Cx

Comment is about Crash (blog)

Original item by David Mac

thank you Ann of Cornwall,that was lovely of you,you're very kind. I haven't been on here for a while but I'm glad to see you're still posting such a variety and quantity of your beautiful and interesting poetry,Happy Samhain, Deb xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Oh but I've been up since 5.15! Give me a break! And tell the cat!! ;-)

Comment is about dusk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Like this, but particularly the first three lines and 'The never to come or go again' - very poignant. Life's full of those moments where everything can change in an instant - washed out to sea, I guess
Cx

Comment is about Measuring The Moment ( Listening To The Seashell) (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Ann - always fall back, spring forward... works for the clocks too.
xx

Comment is about dusk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

A really good work, Isobel. Your unerring grasp of detail which then whorls out into thoughtful reflections is always a real delight to follow. You make the simple deep, and the deep simple. I do admire that. 'The Original Oak' has connotations flooding out of it, especially here in England, far more than just the name of a pub.

BTW, 'cracked' glass is veiny; ''splinters' are shards everywhere. How about the Ring Road around London? Couldn't get much more 'webby' than that; well, maybe Paris or...or...or! Do the English 'sup beer' as though it is the entire intake of sustenance?

Comment is about The Original Oak (blog)

Original item by Isobel

A brilliant sketch of a terrifying personality. 'as you destroy the room with your mood' is outstanding. Such persons do exist and manipulate whole families with their tyranny.

Comment is about Another Row (blog)

Original item by David Mac

Janet, this is very different. I find several poems in one. Have I said this before? IMO, following one distinct line of thought at a time is stronger; ideas can be contrasted, of course, for huge emphasis. But I found myself buffeted ... which may have been your intent.

Comment is about World (blog)

Can we have a poem one day please? xx

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

This is lovely, Gus, the speaking of it a pure music in the sound of its words and their syntax. The thought ebbs and flows too, until you grasp it like a piece of floating seaweed and hold it in your hand, and mind. I wonder why no one has commented; perhaps the layout is a bit too disjointed, or too large in font, to hold the thought together in our 'computer screen venue'?

Comment is about Measuring The Moment ( Listening To The Seashell) (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Lynn, a fabulous work, brilliantly topical and killingly haiku. You are an admirable talent, Girl.

Comment is about Mr. Cameron (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I like this a lot, Ann. I'm going to be bold enough to think you have posted this as brand new, still sorta percolating. IMO, it has loveliness in it, but could be drawn into a tighter, more impactive 'net'. Perhaps reordering some ideas such as beginning the poem with: 'A primitive time, twilight.'I find that statement a great hook to lure the reader on. From a structural view I got a bit lost when certain words weren't clearly nouns or verbs; it didn't spoil the poem, but it didn't enrich it either, eg. 'smells'. The poem does have character.

Comment is about dusk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Nice work Lynn and agree with sentiment, I work in benefits so have a good understanding of whats goin on.

Yes, people with no intention of working should be persuaded back into work, but to do it all at the same time as slashing 500000 jobs and get lone parents to now get work when their youngest is 7, when there are 2 million out of work already, the maths dont work!

Yes we know there is massive debt and something needs to be done, but theres nothing like getting carried away! Jeff X

Comment is about Mr. Cameron (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you so much :)

Comment is about Thanks Mum (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Cynthia: yes but this is a reworking and reads much better. :o)
ps: but I am uneasy as to the ambiguity of the recipient.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Just doing some catching up and have to say I really enjoyed reading this too, John. Nostalgic, atmospheric and with a really good flow.

Comment is about Tom Pudding (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Cheers 'big A'(for Ann-lol!...joke!)oh I would have loved to see those whales-you lucky girl! thank you for reading and valuation on me pooem'High wotsit' see thee soon-love as per-Mr Welsh-based Wilde-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Good evening Lynn-all nice and soggy in Rhondda tonight-just turned the heating up a few degrees too! 'ot baff'now-seeya on the morrow lovely girl-best wishes-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

'Evening Dave-re 'joint'poem removal-can,t believe your poem being removed-whichever forum should have been grateful-or the 'admin' on it had to be very small minded-ah well! never mind-onwards and...better not go any further with that-lol! best regards my friend-Stefan.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

again, very good visuals, drawing picture for us to be drawn into.

Anne, thanks for your comments

Comment is about dusk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Don't forget to put the clocks back! (Or is it forward?) ;-)

Comment is about dusk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lovely observation, giving the little leaf a character. But does he know what's coming next?

Comment is about the little leaf (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

always enjoyed your work Tommy, this is exception

Comment is about The Gallery #2 (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

David - Crash - for me, the first verse is complete on it's own - Superb! I can see where you're going with the second, but not sure that it adds anything much. Only my 2 cents. B

Comment is about David Mac (poet profile)

Original item by David Mac

Cynthia, how good to see you again, it as been to long (used to be maipenrai).

to the poem, very good observations and vidul content, enjoyed.
Bernie

Comment is about the little leaf (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

@steve: :o)@Winston: :o)@Cynthia: yes but this is a reworking and reads much better. :o)
ps: but I am uneasy as to the ambiguity of the recipient.

Comment is about The Gallery #2 (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I prefer itching cos it sounds more poetic - more classy.This is a good one Laura - it leaves it to the reader to interpret. I would see it as the anniversary of a break up - but I suppose it could be a death, a murder or anything.

If you messed around with it a bit you could turn it into a comic poem.

No celebration
of their anniversary
his scars are itching...

I prefer your version though - I just like clowning around! x

Comment is about Anniversary Haiku (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

There you go, we can never agree. Ain't it a great life! I liked ITCHY because it was so 'immediate', so likely to be 'said', and therefore, for me, so 'real' because it sounded 'honest'. Maybe it's a 'man thing' to want 'harshness' modified.

Comment is about Anniversary Haiku (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I remember this one! I'm sure I do. Great to have it reposted - I loved it.

Comment is about The Gallery #2 (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Yes, 'the little leaf' has come again, from August, when many persons then made comments which were much appreciated. I have revised the explicitness of the idea, which may resonate in greater harmony during this autumn season.

Comment is about the little leaf (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Lynn. I'm a bit slow on the uptake, but I've just noticed that all your verses are haiku, and your second and fourth work just as well as self-contained ones ... especially the last one!

Comment is about Mr. Cameron (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye