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The Original Oak

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I drank in the Original Oak today,

reflecting on how a lifetime slips away,

along with a bowling green, a hall of residence

and Jack Fulltons

(the cheapest frozen food stall in the whole of Leeds).

 

The pub was empty,

but in my mind I saw a crowd,

the bold and the beautiful,

strutting their stuff,

whilst I watched on,

the younger me,

all acne and disbelief,

blending to background

with lager and black,

not knowing then

what I know now.

 

The pub was empty

but in my mind

I saw us both,

you with your friends,

I with mine,

two worlds not colliding

on different tracks

and half a life time away

the knowledge that life sucks.

 

My son sat beside me,

pondering his options,

all fresh faced and hopeful,

but also scared,

the future spread before him,

like fractured glass

a billion life lines,

with just one path;

each lost in separate thought,

the old and the young,

silently supping beer

in the Original Oak.

chance choices nestolgia memories

◄ Under Pressure (a frivolous piece)

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Elaine Booth

Mon 8th Nov 2010 21:12

Actually I didn't mind the "life sucks" as it seems to express what you felt - I can see you there, sort of huddled over your pint, thinking of what might have been with the two worlds that presumably didn't ever collide. Had a similar moment myself this year so this struck a chord with me.

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Stephen Pass

Thu 4th Nov 2010 09:58

Hi Isobel,Really liked this, how you brought the pub to life and also you and your son, different generations sat there thinking. I also have a pub poem spurned on from the past - it was called the Peel in Bradford which we used to go in all the time 20 years ago but when I went to my mate's recording studio last year I saw it had been demolished. Becky (my girlfriend)and Bernie (my best mate) mentioned in the poem have since died, hence the Roman loves at the end. Hope you like itxx
I’m stood by the remnants of the Peel pub
A few bricks now
Demolished to make way
For a grander scheme
I remember the good times in there
Wednesday nights
Spin the Wheel
Me, Becky, Bernie and Bradshaw
Getting pissed
Singing karaoke
Also Bernie’s 21st
A bright, sunny day
Sat around in the beer garden
All of us young
Full of hope
But the Peel’s erased now
Gone for good
Just two piles of saved bricks for another building
And some broken bricks in the ground
My memories are with those bricks and I wonder whose else’s are in there too?
Dig three feet down, they’ll be Saxon pottery
Further still, Roman loves

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Isobel

Sun 31st Oct 2010 15:30

I did think of spaghetti junction funnily enough - but it didn't sound too good. Maybe fractured glass would work better? Under fractured there was a picture on google that looked less crumbly than the one I used.
Thanks for your comment Cynthia, Bernie, Winston, all. I'm off to put my witches costume on now. Don't think I'll need the nose...

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 31st Oct 2010 14:57

A really good work, Isobel. Your unerring grasp of detail which then whorls out into thoughtful reflections is always a real delight to follow. You make the simple deep, and the deep simple. I do admire that. 'The Original Oak' has connotations flooding out of it, especially here in England, far more than just the name of a pub.

BTW, 'cracked' glass is veiny; ''splinters' are shards everywhere. How about the Ring Road around London? Couldn't get much more 'webby' than that; well, maybe Paris or...or...or! Do the English 'sup beer' as though it is the entire intake of sustenance?

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Fri 29th Oct 2010 19:24

excellent piece of work Isobel, nowt else to say.

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winston plowes

Fri 29th Oct 2010 16:39

great stuff, enjoyed. Win x

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Isobel

Fri 29th Oct 2010 16:39

Bloomin eck John - it is indeed a small world! Did you know the bowling green had gone? I don't even remember the damn thing. The bar man told me about it. I don't suppose I was in to bowling much back then. Something I'll get into in the next decade perhaps...
x

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Isobel

Fri 29th Oct 2010 16:35

Thank you all. You may be right with the glass Janet. I was looking for something that would reflect with the myriad of choices we have in life - I wanted a splintered effect but was a bit disappointed with what google had to offer. In my minds eye I could see lots of veins opening up - hard to express that poetically though.
Dave - you aren't the first to tick me off for the 'life sucks' line. I'm normally a very positive person - yesterday was a strange day for me. I went back to visit my past when I took my son to look round Leeds University. So many changes but many things still the same. It led me to reflect on my life and some of the duff decisions I made. I think the mood was also affected by me later reading Val Cook's 'Invisible' poem to do with the effects of aging.
I'm fighting fit today though - just got my hair done and life definitely doesn't suck. :))

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John Darwin

Fri 29th Oct 2010 16:25

The very pub where I learned to drink too much. 1983-88 were my peak years, you wouldn't have wanted to know me then. I like the poem very much and not just for sentimental reasons.

thanks
John

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Fri 29th Oct 2010 12:25

I enjoyed reading this one too. It's very reflective.
If i'm honest i thought the image was a cobweb at first glance and would suit the image of old oak pub and memories as well as a cobweb of halls and possibilities ahead. The splintered glass doesn't do it for me but i hope you don't think of that as a criticism. It's merely expressing my thoughts.

I do love the poem Isobel.x

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Antony Owen

Fri 29th Oct 2010 11:46

i like the underlying and self effacing humour in this poem

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Dave Carr

Fri 29th Oct 2010 11:07

Hi Isobel.
I like the way you brought the pub to life with memories. I have done some of this option pondering too with our kids. Thankfully that's all finished. The only thing I didn't like was the term 'life sucks'. I think it's an ugly expression and I don't think it belongs in an English Pub called the Original Oak.
Dave

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Greg Freeman

Fri 29th Oct 2010 10:22

A rite-of-passage moment, Isobel, sharp and poignant. And a wonderful name for a pub. Just one quibble: it should be "older", rather than "old", surely?!

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