Somewhere during the car journey
I lost my love for you.
I’m sure I had it with me
when I left.
M1, M25, M4,
it’s on one of them, I’m sure,
but I lost it on the way.
And when I turn into your street
and I spot you waving,
I drive my car fast,
straight, headlong,
into your smile.
For myself, I like the idea of the poem ending on the line
"but I lost it on the way."
Makes it more enigmatic, which I like. Car journies can be so stressfull!! I am the world's worst navigator - or so my partner always told me!!!
very good
Cx
<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 29th Oct 2010 20:18
Love the build up to the last line-excellent! best regards-Stefan.
<Deleted User> (8753)
Fri 29th Oct 2010 15:15
a intersting write, enjoyed
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David Mac
Mon 1st Nov 2010 16:50
fanx for the comments, everyone