Here in My Childhood

Saturday 8th January 2011 1:55 pm

Here in my childhood

wearing robes my mother chose for me

I play; I grow; I learn how to please

Here in my childhood

wearing robes my teachers chose for me

I grow and play, learn how to appease

Here in my childhood

wearing robes I earned and chose for me

I travel the world with a 'hold-all'

Here in my childhood

we walk; my love, my life beside me

My wordly goods floating on a veil

behind me

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winston plowes

Thu 3rd Feb 2011 21:46

a clever style to take the reader on a journey, enjoyed. Win x

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 3rd Feb 2011 11:10

Janet, I enjoy the thrill of the philosophical which throbs through these recent works. Your present experiences must be a comprehensive learning curve.

Dave Carr

Tue 25th Jan 2011 21:41

Great theme.

<Deleted User> (7164)

Mon 10th Jan 2011 15:20

Thanks for comments which are very much appreciated.

Isobel - I think each verse is about after-life in a sense. Life after the various stages in life where i believe we are all as children in a new experience :-)

Steve - I don't think it actually meets the criteria for a ghazal, though it did occur to me that with a bit of tweaking and more work it could become one. I'm working on a different project at present and this one as Isobel says was pulled out the bag :-)

Thanks to Bernie, Andy and Laura :-)

Laura Taylor

Mon 10th Jan 2011 11:33

Love this Janet - like how you play with repetition and subtly change meaning

Andy N

Mon 10th Jan 2011 08:20

has a song like quality that i like here, janet.. top banana! x

Andy N

Mon 10th Jan 2011 08:20

has a song like quality that i like here, janet.. top banana! x

<Deleted User> (8753)

Sat 8th Jan 2011 21:31

excellent

Isobel

Sat 8th Jan 2011 19:55

Well done you for pulling one out of the bag so quickly!

I like the way you manage to convey that life is a journey and the fact that none of us really 'grow up' - just move on.

I'm assuming the last verse is about after-life where we finally become connected to what is important and leave all the materialism behind.

I like it Janet! x

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