Lack of DIY skills? If you say so. I share those shortcomings, mate. But literature? I won't have it! This is a work of art, John, just as your daughters are.

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Original item by John Coopey

Lovely. You're in a rich vein of form at the moment, John. Interesting structure - has it got a name (I'm very ignorant in these matters)?

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Original item by John Coopey

Thanks, All. Would you believe I was reading Chaucer's 'Prologue' (modern English) just yesterday, and found the same idea within the first twenty lines! I can't wait to dip into the Middle English again to see the original words, but - got to find my copy first.

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Elaine Thank you for your observations. Glad you liked 'Belt' The line with the long Johns was cut and paste from another part of the poem during the editing process and hes therefore become a bit disconnected from its neighbours. I will have a look at it again. Thanks for pointing it out. Win x

Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)

Original item by Elaine

cheers Elaine, and don't worry I will continue to write. these old words are my illness and i'm too far gone to ever be cured.

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Original item by Elaine

Thanks Elaine x

Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)

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Thanks Lynn, always nice to see you on here. x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Greg - I've changed the title a little bit! x

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Ann, I know you've turned off comments for In Ealing, but I just had to say that the last stanza is one of the most powerful things you've written, and the poem as a whole is very effective and moving. "Angry with angels" is arresting ... might be a good alternative title.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I am sure that what I tend to read into people's work has a lot to do with the extensive critiquing I had to do in all of my literature classes... ; )

Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)

Original item by Elaine

Thanks, Dave. I've just finished reading the last of the 6 garden poems. Just love them. So enjoyable. Also liked the poem in praise of baths! Especially after a hike in the hills!

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

This is inspirational, Dave. I fully agree with Laura (again!) including the lines about the leaf and the angel. For me the possibility of redemption hinted at in the end is very touching. So many great themes.

Comment is about Beyond the Garden #6 (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Would love to hear this one performed. I like the rhythm.

Comment is about Separation (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hi Dave, thank your for your kind comments on my latest. xx

Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Carr

Thank you Elaine :-)

Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)

Original item by Elaine

I liked the punch of this poem: "But this life / Has us both hard beaten" are wonderful lines.

Comment is about in another life (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Hi Cynthia, thank you so much for your very kind comments on "Knowing when to Surrender". xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

A very touching poem, Ann. Very effective. xx

Comment is about Holding the hand of the model maker (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

This is wonderful, Ann. So glad I am trawling the Feb blogs otherwise I would have missed this gem. xxx

Comment is about museum diary (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

A very elegant poem, Kath. As Ann says, delicate with very precise, spare language.

Comment is about driftwood (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Looking forward to this live, Isobel. Fantastic poem - perfect performance poetry! xxx

Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Ah Greg (Seedy Side of Town)- thought you might identify with this title - thanks for reading and commenting on it

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

'Moaned relief through parted teeth' yup sense the irritation here and wondered from the refrain if your wife is named 'Kathy' after the famous song but liked the flow of this throughout

Comment is about Clown (blog)

Bird singing through the night?
Very probably a robin - they do.
Birds have only got 3 songs though -
"Cripes! I'm outta here" (alarm)
"O sole mio" (courtship)
"You're gonna get your f*king head kicked in" (territory).

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

A wonderful narrative - well done!
"Marooned harmony" doesn't work though "harmonise with those silent screams" ...maybe.
Any way it's a wonderful sinewy rope of visions.
sTEVE smITH

Comment is about New poem: Workers of the World... Fragment... (blog)

Very wry and knowing with such sly humour. "One day there'll be grandchildren whose names will be forgotten;" is such an excellent line: my in-laws constantly call their grandchildren by their children's names! "if I'd shot you when I met you by now I'd be out of prison / and I know how much you'd like me to go down." is very witty. An very amusing read with great sturcture.

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There is a change in tone in the poem but basically what you are saying is quite clear-cut I found: between birth and death we fill up life with the clutter of living, all the while, somewhere in the background, we know it is keeping the boredom of life at bay - what else would we be doing other than the busy, busy, busy of actually doing nothing at all. David, I hope you chose to keep writing - it can keep you the right side of it all and perhaps communication is the best of all we can do. BTW I very much agree with Steve's comment on those lines - excellent.

Comment is about Life Bores Us All To Death (blog)

Original item by David Mac

I really do like a poem that stretches the mind from the title to the last letter - some wonderful metaphores here

Comment is about Cerebratorium (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Good one Lynn.
This made me laugh.
Dave

Comment is about Knowing When To Surrender (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks for comments everyone.
Well spotted Ray. Have corrected the spelling. Interesting concept having more than one funeral.
Yes it is my imagination - otherwise - never mind the tabloids - my wife would have something to say.
Dave
PS. This came about from a writing exercise to use the words
Sunset, Lettuce and Diabolical.

Comment is about Natasha (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Might have been a night jar but that's only a stab in the dark - liked this and learned a new word 'snit' - great thoughts come in the quiet hours for me too xx

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

An Interesting read, Dave - Intriguing personality!

Comment is about Natasha (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

I have to agree with most comments...
I like the idea of 'rooms'... compartments.
Your words impress upon the reader an interesting series of feelings and thoughts!


Especially liked:

'waltzing in nausea'
'bent from lack of sun'
'Tulip tourettes - and everything comes undone'

Comment is about Cerebratorium (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

we don't get many birds singing at night - I'd have suggested maybe a nightingale - but I don't think it's the right time of year ?

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

thanks for the very kind comments Cyn - but I think you're in a minority of one there ! xx
(stand-up)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

very chirpy poem Cynthia :-)

my cat would have a field day in that holly tree.
I felt the poem came to an end a bit abruptly but love the imagery with the jumping back into bed.x

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Laura, thanks for comment on my hair poem and for pointing out the typo - doh! :-)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Isobel, thanks for comment on my hair poem. I see your point on the title. Further explanation beneath poem if you care to see.xx
:-)

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Cynthia, thanks for comment on my hair poem :-)
you are not far out with your interpretation. Further explanation beneath poem if you care to read again.x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for comments :-)

Isobel - the title is meant to be flippant in the sense of the number of snips to shape a new style and is also the number of syllables in each line of the verses :-)

Julian - what are you up to?!

Cynthia - you're not far out at all in your interpretation except the bit about growing an inch of grey being devastating. My hair grows too quickly and false colours are expensive :-)

This is a much shortened version of an older poem i wrote about my marriage break up of 8 years.x

Comment is about Five, six, seven, eight... hair! (blog)

A very cheerful chirpy poem Cynthia - perfect for this time of year. The sun is streaming through my clean windows and it's sounding good! xx

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Winston - re: Scent of a Maiden - yes something in the air - influences of Betjeman still abound I guess - although not quite Joan Hunter-Dunn

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Lynn! You are so dear! Thank you very much for your correction.I will change it immediately. Love, hugs and warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Once Upon a Time In America (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Enjoyed this poem, Larisa.
(Hope you don't mind me saying, passers-by would sound better than passer-bys.)
But a really interesting story, well told.
Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about Once Upon a Time In America (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Bird song at night is so evocative. And thank you for the reminder to find something to appreciate, if possible, in what is initially irritating.

Comment is about Tiny Talk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you, dear Stefan! Love, hugs and warmest wishes, Larisa (Odessa girl)

Comment is about Once Upon a Time In America (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

what a very interesting poem Larisa.very different.Thank you.xx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska