<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 4th Mar 2011 00:04
very heartfelt,lovely poem Dave.Thanks for sharing.Best regards to you from Stef and Pat Wilde.xx
Comment is about I Miss You (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
I haven't listened yet, but I can imagine this coming across as more humorous performed. For me, on the page it reads as bitter and sad.
The line 'regret pressed to every empty seam' says it all.
I like the ending too from 'Consider...' on.
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
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Anthony, just spent the last 1/2 hr reading all about the Neil Moss tragedy (inc your links). What an amazing and of course tragic story and fitting poem. Thx Win
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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Your comment about my comment reminds me of an old joke my dad used to tell. It all hung round the interpretation of these words.
'What do you think - I'll shave you for nothing and buy you a drink?'
Depending on the intonation and whether you left a pause after What, it could reflect astonishment that anyone could be so stupid, or a genuine offer of something for nothing.
Humour used to be a lot more simple back in his day... or maybe it's got more so.
Yep - all the scraps on here can be amusing or upsetting depending on what mood you are in. How deeply you get involved depends on where you are yourself also. In my early days I got right in there and very fired up. Not so much nowadays - I tend to find I've said and done it all before - it is just a little bit of history repeating - just to echo some Shirley Bassey lyrics I know...
Sorry I've no great revelations to show you... you'd probably be disappointed anyway! x
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Thank you, dear Stefan! Love and hugs, Odessa girl.
Comment is about LIFE (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 3rd Mar 2011 20:31
enjoyed this poem lovely Odessa girl-thank you!xx
Comment is about LIFE (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Disregard that last message - I totally misread yours. Brain a little worse for wee . . I mean wear tonight. You wrote - "See what happens when you come back!" Which I took to mean "Find out what happens on your return" - meaning later today. I thought it was some revelatory offering. Silly me.
I guess these days I might be more inclined to sit back and smile at it all. I'm not sure it's worth it. (Pretty boring too!) I don't think anyone with any degree of a sense of humour can rail at the world - convincingly at least, for any great length of time.
But you have to admit it's funny to watch though!
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Oh come on! You can't leave it hanging in the air like that! (Reminder to self - "Yes she can, she's a woman.")
Do tell!
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Yes - nothing much has changed on here - except recently it has...
See what happens when you come back LOL - Apocalypse Now! x
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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Thanks for the comments all.
Yes, I thought it was a bit sad too, Dave, which worried me cos I wanted to do a funny performance piece. I've performed it once though and the humour seems to come across more than the pathos.
Greg - you would love my Big Spender - Shirley Bassey has nothing on it!
I doubt I'll ever know how to cartwheel - could never manage it as a child. Those attending the Tudor next week may be in for another treat though :))
Ray you may be right about the second verse. It was a meant to be a lighthearted piece - not serious poetry. It went down well in Middleton - I think because it was easy to grasp and something anyone could identify with. That's the kind of thing I like to write about. x
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Very good. I like this.
Also read some of your other poems. Very enjoyable.
Best wishes.
Dave
Comment is about REASONABLE BEHAVIOUR (blog)
Very good. Quite sad too.
See you at the Tudor then.
Perhaps you could learn to cartwheel by then.
Dave
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
Original item by Isobel
"Little pink houses for you and me" - John Mellencamp
Definitely not Claret and Blue!
I didn't see any chickens there. Want some?
Also liked your Clown poem.
Dave
Comment is about How To Make Yourself Crackers (blog)
is it because 'them up north' are outsiders?
Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)
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Thanks Greg, Isobel, Win. My wife doesn't realise how lucky she is, now you come to mention it.
Comment is about Clown (blog)
Good poem, Isobel, I liked the dust reign/rain Miss Haversham style and the Big Spender references - maybe you could make more of that.2nd verse rhymes trying too hard perhaps?Compressed, flattened - that's very good too.
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
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Hi Isobel,
Hope all is well with you & yours.
I just saw the comment you left on Rachel's "em." I have heard of Marshall Mathers actually - I even possess some of his music! I thought "Stan" was a great track the first time I heard it - still do in fact.
Nothing changes much around here, does it?
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Gulp! Scarily good (in a good way!)
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
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Powerful, defiant, triumphant. Would have liked to have heard your full version of Big Spender!
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
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Top-notch, Ray. Life-affirming
Comment is about Clown (blog)
<Deleted User> (7212)
Wed 2nd Mar 2011 21:58
not really a poem - but very well written. It's a pity we can't all get along a bit better given that we're only here such a short time.B
Comment is about A Sure Sign of Fair Weather (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Thank you - first time I've won anything with a poem, really rather chuffed.
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 2nd Mar 2011 21:09
ta for your kindness re 'Keef'-I shall never call you Nana again.On one condition....you drop by specsavers(only jesting)x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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I love it! You restore my faith in humanity. A passionate husband who goes the full distance, is tolerant of chaos AND has a sense of humour... does your wife realise how lucky she is? I'm guessing she is very special lady also.
Don't ask me to critique it - I couldn't. x
Comment is about Clown (blog)
Hi Elaine,
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on
'All that you want...'
It is always interesting to me how someone interprets... x
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
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Interesting how you have incorporated the words here Cynthia. Many of these lines are reasons I moved out of Manchester! Win x
Comment is about zone (blog)
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Hi Cynthia, thank you for your comments on belt, glad you liked it. Win
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Hi isobel, Thankyou for commenting on Belt. yes there is a shift between the emotional and the descriptive which seemed to happen by itself! Win
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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refreshing rhyming scheme with this on Ray, good story to carry the reader along too. Win
Comment is about Clown (blog)
This is so full of emotion and images that paints both a sad yet heart-warming tale.
Oh how I LOVE red flowers!... It is enough to brighten anyone's day!
xxx
Comment is about A Sure Sign of Fair Weather (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
all i was trying to say was there is only life or death, and you can choose to keep living or to die at any point, to commit suicide or not, to keep on living a little bit longer.
this is what my days are like lately: heads or tails...
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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all i was trying to say was there is only life or death, and you can choose to keep living or to die at any point, to commit suicide or not, to keep on living a little bit longer.
this is what my days are like lately: heads or tails...
Comment is about Life Bores Us All To Death (blog)
Original item by David Mac
Can I just add my congratulations.
That is a very powerful poem and you are indeed a worthy winner. I am sorry that you have had to go through such experiences to write it though. Your grit and determination not to be beaten does you proud. x
Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)
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This is interesting. In stanza 4, the theme seems to be inevitability. Even if 'death' is 'Boredom', then I think the idea still gets a bit 'iffy' putting 'death/life' into the simplistic, unarguable category such as the odds of heads/tails. Assuming the work pokes hard at choosing not to live Life at its fullest, to deliberately curry pessimism and personal put-downs, I feel the two ideas of mathematical certainty and choice do not join well in one poem.
Comment is about Life Bores Us All To Death (blog)
Original item by David Mac
Hi Alison,
Well done on your much deserved POTM.
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)
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Hi Steven, looking at your poems, this one came out. http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=19680
Comment is about Steven Waling (poet profile)
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like the loop in this piece, Steven.. I think you work really well in bringing the piece full circle.. Well done..
Comment is about The Little Things (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
loved 'lifelines' going to give a copy to my mum, shell like it. she sits and knits all sorts of wonderful things xx
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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thanks for comments on em..nice to connect with another fan, there is some snobbery surrounding eminem's poetic genius...but with lyrics like "shove a gerbil up your ass..through a tube" Ive no idea why ;)
Truly yours, his biggest fan, 'i killed stan',
X
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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This was a pleasure to read, Jane.
Comment is about Fed and Mavis On Their Travels (blog)
Original item by jane wilcock
This is stunning. "Where suicidal thoughts seep between the bricks and mortar / And knives on skin is just one of those daily things" and "And I’m proper fucking rude to him / ‘Cause he challenges everything I know about me" are fantastic lines. There is no question - this is a lived experience. I recognise it but this is so strong that even if the reader didn't have personal experience it would still be a very potent poem.
Comment is about Latest Mental Health Poem: In Therapy (blog)
Original item by Gemma Lees
Hi Elaine,
Nice to hear this again.This haiku has a cosy atmospheric feel to it. The words sound fascinating when said slowly. Thanks for your comments also on "It's So Touching".
Comment is about Candle (blog)
Original item by Elaine
Thanks for your comments on the haiku. xxx
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks for your comment on the haiku. It was good fun to do! x
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Andy, would love to read that rude limerick of yours sometime. And who was the famous co-author? Thanks for commenting on our haiku! x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
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Thanks for your comment on the haiku. Tried writing one with 4 of us last week - good fun to see what turns up! x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Isobel
Fri 4th Mar 2011 06:57
Thanks for your comment Francine. I would prefer to go with Greg's defiant. Bitter isn't a pleasant word, for me - it tends to go with twisted - which I don't think I am. I would agree with sad though. x
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
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