that's lovely hun
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Thanks Melanie, welcome to WOL! :)
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Hi Melanie Thanks for your comment on the Wolf Man. He's a great favourite of mine!
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Philipos
Sun 30th Jan 2011 19:02
Hi Cynthia - thanks forgetting in touch re; Crows - I always appreciate your comments x
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Philipos
Sun 30th Jan 2011 18:58
Hi Kealan re: Crows - sorry to hear about your sexual disappointment - that can sometimes happen with a small bird - but thanks for getting in touch with your amusing comment
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Hello Cate
Thanks for your thoughts on Dead Men's Shoes. I really do have shoes ranging from size 9 to 11 (not quite 8s to 12s).
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lol stefan u shud def go red..why the hell not?!!lol thank u sooo much 4 ur kind comment hun
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hun u shud def put up more,i read this one 3 times&still laughed out loud its brilliantly clever!!
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aw clarissa thank u so much hnstly dt means alot,it is a sore subject alryt bt i had 2 write it as it festers inside me constantly, hey we can only get betr from here on in hun shur ive only 1 up too,watch us we'll destroy wol wit our beautiful minds soon lol
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 30th Jan 2011 18:15
Welcome and thanks Mel re 'me dads'poem..in your bio you say you are not a poet..! you could have fooled me-your sample is brill! very inspiring-as is your brill hair colour-do you think I should try it? lol! ta again Melanie.xx
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All I can say is WOW, very deep thinking here, I enjoyed it. Much to be said on this topic, Long ago I wrote one on the same topic, very stinging, not near as good as yours. great stuff xx and thanks for reading my one poem, that I have been able to write in this last some 2 years.
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aw wow i really got sucked into ur sample
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def go to open mic night hun..jesus th 1st poem sent shivers dwn me,really well done hun
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Thanks for your considered comments Ray.
I definitely meant 'right school'. Verse 1 and 2 are exploring the shame of difference and social exclusion - something we feel more acutely as children. Two different scenarios, one with heaps more money. But the first child may feel just as ahamed as the second child because they have been placed in a school where they cannot possibly keep up with their peers. 'The right school' is therefore used ironically.
Squalor is quite liveable with, if all your peers also live in it. Being different is something most children find very hard - whatever the reason.
I don't like your version of the end so I will stick with my own. I appreciate that it isn't the way we would naturally speak though.
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aw thank you rachel im nervous about finaly leaving others see my poems never mind critique them lol so thank you
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Actually, I think Poor Is would be a better title, more grounded somehow.Can't work out why you've got "the right school" rather than wrong.2nd verse is my favourite by far. Didn't like the "bankrupt are we" construction. Maybe "we face bankruptcy/ we with no grasp/ of relativity".
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hi melanie, thanks for your comments on my poems.
i read eight neglected wonders...the foestus in the plegmatic bucket is a very strong image...turning the stomach. i would say that you are a poet, looking forward to reading more x
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Another good one, Kath. I like the way you aptly encapsulate major themes. From a reflective point of view on this poem, perhaps the 'problem' lies in looking for/expecting rewards.
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thanks c at least u get it
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omg i love this one hun
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na its really great honestly i loved it from start to finish xx
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aaagh thank you hun i really spent all day tweakin th fucker bt hv to say quite proud of it..im rly after getn stuck in&u wer ryt bro once u start it rly does flow to u
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This is brillliant girl, i always knew you had it in ya, i cant wait to hear more. i know wat its like to be a mother and u really got it
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aw i really like that,i felt sad reading it lol
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You are very funny, Kealan, handling some kind of fierce inner angst by pitching scornful words and stultifying ideas on to the screen like a scythe through corn stalks. I take it that life looks unendingly grim right now. And what is reality, except your own definition?
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Good one, Ray. Always a challenge to end a line with the word "infrastructure"! Wondered if you might end the sculpture line with the word "longer" instead of "more". But is that still grammatical? I should know. Great final line, too
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couldnt have put it better,i really like it
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A very refreshing change of mood, if may say so. And as I write the sun is shining outside in King's Cross.
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By the time I was sixteen I had been singing for ten years, in very extensive genres. Folk melodies and simple folk poetry of 'the Old Country' delighted me with their 'a-cummin's and 'a-goin's'. Repetitions in such songs were very common. I wrote this in class one day, Physics, I think, just for a moment's escape from debilitating anxiety. I know it's only a silly, but a nice silly.
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Sun 30th Jan 2011 13:32
I think those type of memories last Lynn, lol could almost see you there!
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Hi Lynn,thanks for your comment on Under The Stairs. Much appreciated.
Cate xx
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Hi Dave,thanks for your comment on Under The Stairs. I see the format has changed for the better on here, so I might come on it a bit more often now!!
Cate xx
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Hi John,thanks for your comment on Under The Stairs.
Cate xx
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Hi Elaine, thanks for your comment on Under The Stairs.
Cate xx
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Emotion is good....its what makes us "take up arms in a sea of troubles" by connecting us to things that matter to us. Feeling deeply about something gives us courage to speak out when we feel injustice is being done and connects us to the rest of the human race.
Nice one Dave.
Cate xx
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Good poem.... amusing and touching. The best sort!
Cate xx
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melanie coady
Sun 30th Jan 2011 19:34
aw thats truly beautiful hun
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