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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:04
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:04
<Deleted User> (8730)
Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:03
I have had this too. Please read my mental health poetry.
Comment is about Born Anyway (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:03
I have tried to kill myself many times. It is not worth it. I thought about the train driver and my daughter.
Comment is about Silly Girl (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:02
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:02
I wrote My Flower of Hope like this two years ago in Scotland.
Comment is about My Flower (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
<Deleted User> (8730)
Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:01
I have writtem poems like this lately
Comment is about Pathetic (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:00
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:00
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Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:00
Applies to me today. i am meeting my girl friend for the first time today, possibly!
Comment is about How Will I Feel Today? (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
<Deleted User> (8730)
Wed 9th Mar 2011 09:59
I cried at this, because I have lost access to my son for the last sixteen years.
Comment is about Goodbye Childhood (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
ah blast i didn't put the brackets around it at 1st then someone told me it would be stronger with them lol..thanks hun x
Comment is about One Day (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
ha ha ha i luv it hun
Comment is about CHARMING! (blog)
i like it hun x
Comment is about Poetry is like marriage (blog)
aw hun i actually cried at th start ive a lityle boy,lennon,so it hit me hard..lovely work hun x
Comment is about The Day My Heart Broke (blog)
Original item by Katie Sheila Haigh
lol i like it hun and i shall be watching this space!
Comment is about God Bless (or perhaps help) America (blog)
Original item by Trev the Road Poet
thanks andy hard writing it but c'est la vie and all that jazz lol
Comment is about Goodbye Childhood (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
Nice poem, John, you portray the soulless routine pretty well.
You drift into past tense here, I think:
but the hands,once so gentle,that held this mementoe,
were as cold,were as granite as stone
Think you need hold this mementoe, are as cold, are as granite.
Comment is about BY THE LIGHT OF THE LOCAL SPAR (blog)
Hi Melanie - glad you liked 'before the curtains open'... that's one of those kind of mood pieces if you know what i mean which i kinda surprised myself writing, but pleased you liked it x
Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Melanie Coady
excellent last line here, Melanie in particular but this is a lovely short piece.. x
Comment is about My Flower (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
I like this Melanie - however not sure if you need the brackets (that never happens!) as i think it's probably stronger without it.. enjoyed it however x
Comment is about One Day (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
Hi Katie - like this a lot... i think you may want to consider splitting it into a few stanzas just to change the pacing a little (It may improve it a little) but there's a lot of power in it... good stuff x
Comment is about The Day My Heart Broke (blog)
Original item by Katie Sheila Haigh
i think it's probably more of a short story / bit of prose, melanie but i do like it and think the last sentence 'i was seven' has a lot of power behind it. top one! x
Comment is about Goodbye Childhood (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
thanks melanie - glad you liked it.. means a lot to me that x
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
jesus i lived it i read it over and over hnstly..gonna read it again!
Comment is about Thinking In Image. (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
love it too hun...heart cramped and static..love it!
Comment is about Long Gone Crawling (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
brill kealan..anything to do with serial killers and im there lol
Comment is about Notes On Ed Gein (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
I think this is great. The last verse is not needed IMO, the images aren't so strong perhaps. I'd love to hear the poem read aloud.
Comment is about the quality of silence (blog)
thank you hun...i wasn't sure whethar to put it up
Comment is about Goodbye Childhood (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
hi laura just to say im not going to wigan thurs. i did not get out of hospital to hang round with people dressed up as doctors reciting surrealist poetry *shudder* be like trapped in a daliesque nightmare with john togher as the big man himself all curly mustached...Nah, i just have something else on but it would be great to catch up about kids stories, photoshoots and just what im going to do with those pics of my back alley! Have fun x maybe come over for WOL Bolton @ Butterflies?
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
An excellent, powerful, poignant update of Betjeman's Death In Leamington. The light of the local Spar is a great idea. Full of telling detail. I shall be doing the round of care homes in a couple of days, too
Comment is about BY THE LIGHT OF THE LOCAL SPAR (blog)
Hi Isobel,
Many thanks for your comments on my entry! Just read this,and have to agree with Francine;"regret pressed to every seam" sums it up,yet there's strength and defiance here too! Nice one!x
Comment is about Something Old, Something New (blog)
Original item by Isobel
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Tue 8th Mar 2011 22:14
a sad sad story,but very well written indeed.thanks for sharing.x
Comment is about Goodbye Childhood (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
Thanks for your comments Melanie! Nice to see another face on WOL!
Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Melanie Coady
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Tue 8th Mar 2011 22:05
evenin' Melanie-you are here again with your kind comments(bowing out)and I,m here again with my kind thanks.ta chuck.x
Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Melanie Coady
This is a cheery one John - unfortunately I think there's a lot of truth in it. My sister has just looked round lots of care homes for her mother in law and most do stink of piss - unless you can afford £500 + a week to stay there...grim, very, very grim. I'm hoping euthanasia is legalised by the time I get to that stage. x
Comment is about BY THE LIGHT OF THE LOCAL SPAR (blog)
i really really like this..quite sad hun
Comment is about BY THE LIGHT OF THE LOCAL SPAR (blog)
<Deleted User> (7212)
Tue 8th Mar 2011 20:45
Hey Laura & Cyn - don't mean to butt into your private meanderings - but have you ever had lucid dreaming - where you "wake-up" within your dream ? - I have about 6-7 times & it is amazing - like THE best ever high
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (7212)
Tue 8th Mar 2011 20:45
Hey Laura & Cyn - don't mean to butt into your private meanderings - but have you ever had lucid dreaming - where you "wake-up" within your dream ? - I have about 6-7 times & it is amazing - like THE best ever high
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
<Deleted User> (7212)
Tue 8th Mar 2011 20:42
I liked it, there are some nice turns of phrase, though I think you'd have a neater poem just first and last verse. This bit is great:
We could try and patch it up together
But That would be like wheeling out a skeleton
And hoping the sun would make skin grow
Comment is about the quality of silence (blog)
<Deleted User> (8730)
Wed 9th Mar 2011 10:04
Brilliant, please read Daisy - it is in my book.
Comment is about The Rant Of A Mind Deserted (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady