Interesting, especially the last stanza...
Love madness : )

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I agree with Darren... Very mystical... Lovely photo as well.

Carole is on a roll...

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

Awww...
Even if his little finger knows it - He better say 'Awww' too ; )

p.s. You are Friday's child for sure...
You never told me - Cannot explain it - I just know these things ; )

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Original item by Isobel

Thanks for all these comments (and jokes)
In answer to your question Larisa how about
A groundhog walked into a bar and said "Same again"?
But that would ruin the beautiful iambic pentameter.
How about a haiku....(joku)

Girl walks into bar
Barman gimme a double
So he gave her one.

Not an original joke, I know but probably never as a haiku.

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Original item by Dave Carr

Hi Cynthia - thanks for wondering if I was swimming round my cottage! Where we are we are very lucky, no probs at all. And what did you mean by "How do you get on 'voice' for reading?" I don't understand! :)

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

"Hehe - no such thing as too much.
That's what a 27 year habit'll do for yer ;)" aarrgh ! man's worst nightmare !!

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Heyho Carole....

Got me with this... wonderful wonderful... kissable piece....as indeed you are .... and what is more it's time for muh big coat to come out....

Well done superb.

Gus xx

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

Hi Isobel
Thanks for your comment. As you know I love having a go but often the ideas and inspiration are hard to come by. I am on a bit of a roll at the moment.
Love Yolande

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Original item by Isobel

Hallelujah! God save the Queen, long live the Queen!
(Benefit claimants begging on street corners)

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Original item by Rod Whitworth

This presents such honesty and truth about people, Yolande.
Your poems are often like fables... well written and engaging.

Comment is about Masks (blog)

Original item by Yolande

WOL is part of the World Wide Web - almost synonymous - a cyber community...small wonder that is the conclusion we came to.

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Welcome back! So glad to see you writing again. I love the thought that has gone into this. The faces we project to the world - a fascinating topic. We all wear them - and I would say that masks increase/decrease regionally also - though I appreciate your poem is taking a more personal view.

xx

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Original item by Yolande

Thanks, Greg. If you were a dirty old man you'd be in the sauna with the Catalans.

Thanks, Laura. Glad you liked it. That cigarette has done summat to your face.

Thank you so much, Darren. Had to look up phonology.

Cynthia, you're too kind. Actually, several people told me to ditch or radically alter the first verse. But I was stubborn and I'm glad it's appreciated.

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thanks for the comment on space ,
solar plexus , i was pleased when i realised i could call the chakra that :)

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

la fee verte . thanks for the comments on my poem space ... do you think , do you think , do you think , hop hop hop i might win :)

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Love it. It's Autumn y'know - you might turn orange and gold

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Original item by Laura Taylor

You don't mention snow, but I feel it in the fields. There is warmth here amid the sorrow. The title makes me think of Robert Frost

Comment is about ONE MORE FROST (blog)

Why thank you ;D

It's actually a Lush one - Mask of Magnaminty. Extremely WHOOF! Powerful stuff hehe. A scrub AND a facemask in one *cool*

You listened to Neutral Milk yet then? Would be interested to hear what you make of it :)

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Original item by Winston Plowes

Why thank you both ;D

It's actually a Lush one - Mask of Magnaminty. Extremely WHOOF! Powerful stuff hehe. A scrub AND a facemask in one *cool*

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Jenet... I'm going for Avacado suprise!

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Original item by Laura Taylor

That's a beautiful shade of green on your face here. Is it a jade healing face mask? :-)

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Original item by Laura Taylor

It's lovely, Carole. I like the play on 'solar', very clever thought.

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

This is fabulous. The opening question is a real hook that just swallows the readers in, and then your following lines make them lick lips with sheer pleasure. In addition to the fine comments already here, the run-over from stanza to stanza gives the poem forward energy too. IMO, this is top class.

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Thankou for your comment Cate. I knew you would get it and empathise. LOve Yolande.

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Original item by Cate

oooh dear... are you ok? look a bit green round the gills! Win ;-)

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Thankou for your comment Cate. I knew you would get it and empathise. LOve Yolande.

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Original item by Yolande

Hi, Ann. I truly meant to contact you yesterday, but I got caught up in my oldest grandson's sixteenth birthday preparations - it IS a milestone! I don't know exactly where you live in Cornwall. I was thinking of you especially just in case you were in the flood zone.

How do you get on 'voice' for reading?

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Once again Ray a choice of language that appears deliberate with its smooth sounding phonology and that's before you get to the sentiment and meaning contained within each stanza. Good stuff, indeed.

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Very clever Dave. You`ve missed out a rather notorious "w" which would have gone rather well with your first line. lol
Cate xx

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Original item by Dave Bradley

No, afraid Susan Wicks is no relation even though she has grey hair.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

A very thoughtful piece of writing Yolande. Your`re so right that we all wear masks and sometimes when we think we can see behind someone`s who is close to us, there is another one firmly in place and we are not seeing the truth.
It`s a very special person indeed that we reveal our inner self to!!
Cate xx

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Original item by Yolande

Yes, I see why, and I am officially a complete berk, as I totally missed it first time around! DESPITE having done the same bloody thing with my own pome! Jesus I can be reet thick sometimes :D

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Good morning Elaine-very appreciative of your comments on 'Trials of..'and agree with your views.Sincerly hope you are in better health now than the opposite being mentioned in your earlier biography-thank you-Stefan.

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Original item by Elaine

Blissful...mmm. Another insomniac here...agree with Darren, this could almost be used as a sleep aide!

Lovely :)

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

Wow. Hugely evocative - I could almost feel the heat in the air. I found that second verse/stanza/thing really sensual and erotic - as it is supposed to be really. Really like the story-like quality to it. Sad note to end on.

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The more I read this the more I find myself relaxing. It has a 'meditational' feel and quality about it. :^)

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

Really enjoyed this poem, Ray, and its Rabelaisian glow. I hope it doesn't mark me down as a dirty old man to say the lines I liked best were "How at night we poured /ourselves into each other / to the rhythm of crickets."

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Hi Anne
Thanks for your comment on my poem. I too am returning to the poetry scene after a period of absence and am catching up again.
Regards Yolande

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thankyou for your comment Dave. We do all have masked front in place and you have gone straight to the heart of the matter in that only certain people i.e extensions of trust, are allowed behind the mask.
Regards Yolande

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Thankyou for your comment Dave. We do all have masked front in place and you have gone straight to the heart of the matter in that only certain people i.e extensions of trust, are allowed behind the mask.
Regards Yolande

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Original item by Yolande

Beautiful poem.

Comment is about ONE MORE FROST (blog)

Hey! I just spotted this cos I was reading your latest poem, I wasn't on WOL when this one appeared. I think it's utterly fab! And I agree it would be great as a performance piece too. x

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Original item by Yolande

Thanks for commenting on my space poem. Very much appreciated.x

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Original item by Elaine

Thanks Andy for commenting on my space effort. Much appreciated.x

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Original item by Andy N

Thanks for commenting on my space poem. If I added another line it would have to begin with the letter S or D. Otherwise my capital letters at the beginning of each wouldn't spell 'space' :-)
Get it? xx

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for commenting on my Space poem. Very much appreciated.x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for comments everyone :-)

Laura - if I added a sixth line it would have to begin with either the letter S or the letter D to keep within the theme. Can you see why now? :-)

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Lovely, Ann. Like Janet, I too would love to have the words also to savour and enjoy in a different way. x

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

No worries Elaine. What I'd have said was you do seem to be good at picking up on obscure things in other people's poems. Thanks again

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Original item by Elaine

I think perhaps "still" at the start of the final line of verse 1, when read out, gives emphasis to the sense of stillness. It is a deeply sad poem but so very, well, yes, as Cynthia says, haunting. I also like the line "the march of long men".

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