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Season

 

In the spring, the parts of them,

the soft, paper thin made up faces,

littered the alleys and the folds of a park -

 a throb of alcohol ladening everything.

Safety pinned and tilted,

they had the world at the tip of their cigarette.

 

In the summer, they went east -

their hair full of incense and the calculations

the heart presented

over coffee, pot and each other’s limbs.

Mind over matter,

they lost their clothes,

following the sun into the sea.

 

In the autumn, they put their honey in their apron,

with gold leaf glued to the nursery walls.

They settled for everything second hand,

learning more,

the precious tunes they sang,

skipping around them with muddy faces

and revolutions.

 

In winter, they toasted fires,

berry-sweet, their bellies full and warm.

He would pull the blanket around her,

wrinkling and smiling - their eyes, the sound of running feet,

following the sun into the sea.

 

 

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Comments

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 2nd Nov 2011 21:45

...gave me shivers - marvellous !!

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 2nd Nov 2011 05:40

Safety pinned and tilted,
they had the world at the tip of their cigarette.

One of many fab bits!

I think I'd leave out the first "their" in the honey and apron line. (Love your stuff!)

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Ray Miller

Tue 1st Nov 2011 21:08

A wonderful poem, I thought, especially the 2nd verse. All the better for being a little less obscure and labyrinthine than some of your stuff. Brilliant. Except for the commas.

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Elaine Booth

Tue 1st Nov 2011 20:24

Although I love everything about this poem the first stanza seems to me to be particularly perfect. The repeated line, "following the ...." is a good touch, very loaded. It's a pleasure to read your work, Marianne. XX

Philipos

Tue 1st Nov 2011 17:19

A refreshing peep back to the sepia years and protests of another type within a different strata of a back then society.

Seasons regulated the social life of the privileged few while others starved. Yet you let the readers decide this for themselves.

Well crafted poem.

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