You are a very good writer. IMO, you have a sharp command of vocabulary for a situation, and for the movement of action in a story. Plus, you have a 'main theme' to work through, with internal variations. Simple words are always the most dynamic. You are never boring.
Comment is about Blind Alley (blog)
You are too young surely to have a teenager; but, Oh! how this makes me think of having a 'chameleon' teen sitting at a 'breakfast debacle', and the need to survive each day somehow. However, I know I'm way off course, because 'subdued with ennui' would never be the case.
Perhaps later, you might share a few ideas that motivated this poem? I have enjoyed it.
Comment is about Present (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
This is strongly emotive. I would have been smashed even more if you used stanzas 1,2 and 4 to be the entire poem. Stanza 3 is so personal it narrows the universality of the lament, applicable by readers to any situation of loss, divorce even, whatever - LOVE LOST. I had a hard time myself with extricating explicit references in my poetry, and was lambasted by a literate friend. 'Suggestion!', he said. 'Invite the reader in to share, not to show.' I'm not always successful, but I try to take his good point.
Comment is about Escape (blog)
maybe I am a mannequin staring out - with a flash of reality...ha, thanks Cynthia.
Comment is about Escape (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
A very good one, Kath. Isobel has expressed it so well; I do like the almost clownish switch to couplets like a sing-song nightmare, after the wafting quality of stanza 1.
Comment is about Amnesia haze (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Are you staring at a mannequin in a shop window - with a flash of memory, or fantasy? Your relationship of ideas never ceases to enthrall me.
Comment is about Escape (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Wonderful rhyming of Mogadishu with the Big Issue, John. Wouldn't fancy his chances out there, though. Although come to think of it, he might sell more there than in Selby!
Comment is about The Big Issue (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Very oriental in its poetic appeal and filled with meaning within each line.
Comment is about My Flower (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
I loved this. Almost sermon like tone at the beginning with a vicious rant in the middle turning back to sermon. Awesome.
Comment is about Escape (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
john thank u so much for reading my stuff...xxx
Comment is about Pathetic (blog)
Original item by Melanie Coady
Hi Melissa, just want to let you know, that most of the time these days I scroll through the blogs until one catches my eye. This one did! And I have to say, well worth the read. I can really identify with it. As for my own experiences I should be crying like the Niagara Falls. Fantastic work Melissa, just brilliant.
Be well, stay safe and take care.
Love and respect.
Michael
xxx
Comment is about Blind Alley (blog)
Philipos
Wed 11th May 2011 19:28
Thank you for your comments on Newlands Corner Win - much appreciated.
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Philipos
Wed 11th May 2011 19:27
Thank you for the comment on Newlands Corner Dave - appreciated.
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Philipos
Wed 11th May 2011 19:26
Many thanks for your comments on Woking Junction Greg - not the first poem I've written about Woking's train system though - and having been in the military at Pirbright as a youngster I can personally vouch for some of the romantic goings on with squaddie types plus the harsh approach of the redcaps based at Inkerman throwing their weight about - monochrome days perhaps but I'm sure there were hands reaching out from windows of departing trains which never quite reached the loved one on the station before the steam and smoke obliterated the view.
Thank you for the comment on Newlands Corner Greg - appreciated.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Philipos
Wed 11th May 2011 19:25
Hi Ann - many thanks for your recent comments on 'Searching for Agatha' and 'Newland's Corner' much apreciated - BTW I couldn't manage a courtsey myself not with a dodgy knee. x
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Wed 11th May 2011 12:18
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Wed 11th May 2011 12:15
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Wed 11th May 2011 12:14
I have written a poem of the same name
Comment is about The Big Issue (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
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Wed 11th May 2011 12:11
I always enjoy reading your poems. Just catching up. I like the subtle references here and I too have looked up info on Huxley. I see that Island was the title of his last novel. Very clever stuff.
Comment is about Island (blog)
Good poem Lynn. I can relate to this. I have a void (just a few seconds missing ) best not to think about. I like the concept that the body knows best.
Comment is about Escape (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks so much, this poem has been bubbling away in my head for the last fifteen years, since I heard about my friend's friend and her mother. The third verse may not fit Ray, you are right, as it is the one bit that echoes my own feelings about my mother whose body was very private to her.
Comment is about watering mother (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
This is a very powerful and moving poem with it's bittersweet central idea of watering that combines echoes of holy water and flowers. I really liked this.
Comment is about watering mother (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Thanks for your kind comments on my poems, Ann!
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
many thanks as always Cynthia xx
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
hi chuck,
thought you'de not been about lately, hope you're well.
thank you for your words re deep rooted, much appreciated as always x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Hi Alan,
Many thanks for your very generous words re Deep rooted. Much appreciated x
Comment is about Alan Morrison (poet profile)
Original item by Alan Morrison
Hi,
Thank you,albeit belatedly, for reading and commenting on amnesia haze. x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Thanks for your comment on Escape Cynthia - I really wasn't sure about it but you've made me feel better! I think I posted soon after Rachel Bond's and felt woefully inadequate - though deeply disturbing, the poetry in hers was remarkable - my winner so far, without a doubt.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks for commenting on my latest Andy - I'm glad you liked. Looking forward to reading your Escape poem. I thought the theme was too close to Freedom when Dave told me about it - it seems to be taking off though. See youz around xx
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Thanks for your comment on my poem Elaine - it's about the departure of a friend, which saddened me. It probably comes over as more serious than it was actually intended - I was aiming for detached regret underpinned by an empathy with that person.
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
Original item by Elaine
lovely rach.. you tell a lot i think in a few short stanzas.. wonderful! x
Comment is about Just for now (blog)
Hey Elaine
Thankyouthankyouthankyou for all of your lovely and insightful and interesting comments - so many!! What a splurge :D
I will see you again very soon I hope, and in the meantime, enjoy that room of one's own ;)
Mahoosive hugs xxx
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
Original item by Elaine
Thanks Andy re Escape, much appreciated
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
thanks andy , i am not fantastically thrilled with my poem. It does however sum up the idea of an escape for me. albeit a spiritual one .
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Have to agree with the other comments Ann. Well done - this is so sensitive, delicate and beautifully put.
Comment is about watering mother (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Hi Alison, Escape! sums it all up. very nice. Win x
Comment is about Escape (blog)
Original item by Alison Smiles
Hi Elaine, thanks for youre comments on 1971. and P.S. I could not agree with your biog statement more. Win x
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
Original item by Elaine
Cynthia, I can't see for colours! This is so richly painted and full of vivid skillfull descriptions. Is it possible to have too many such passages. Would it be more successful if there were some plain sections in between. In an old city cram packed with amazing architecture none of it is noticed. I may of course be totally wrong! just thinking aloud. Win x
Comment is about Rowing Across Herring Gut in a Purple Boat (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hi Andy, an interesting one this. liked the penultimate section.(an hill?)Win x
Comment is about Lost Shadows (blog)
Original item by Andy N
I like this Andy. You choose some unusual images, I esp like the first verse (where can those horses be going?) :)
Comment is about Lost Shadows (blog)
Original item by Andy N
I thought Parakeets was great! I'm always amazed when I see (and hear) them when I visit London. Welcome to WOL!
Comment is about SimonW (poet profile)
Original item by SimonW
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Tue 10th May 2011 10:10
Hi Andy, thanks for the comments on 1971 (It was an odd year) Nothing wrong with a bit of mystery I say. Win x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Ray's right, Ann, you've come upon an original, affirmative take on a subject many of us find ourselves writing about. There's subtle music in this, too: delicacy and privacy, gone and wrong, dismissed and kisses. Too often people focus on the question of decay in these situations; you've found the beauty of it.
Comment is about watering mother (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
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Tue 10th May 2011 09:56
Hi Sophia, welcome to the site. Liked 'The Photograph' Winston
Comment is about Sophia Dimmock (poet profile)
Original item by Sophia Dimmock
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 12th May 2011 16:25
We have a vendor, a Roma lady. And, we never pass her by without a weekly purchase. It's basically a good little magazine, and a pleasure to purchase it from her.
Comment is about The Big Issue (blog)
Original item by John Coopey