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Lost Shadows

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Lost Shadows
 
Shadows were lost
like horses lost at
the end of a painting.
 
Shadows were lost
at the top of an hill
like a debt of honour.
 
Paradise lost.
 
Death soiled.
 
Unbroken.
 
Shadows were lost
across trenches
treasuring the sun
unbroken
without speaking its name.
 
Unbroken
without telling the full story
and unbroken
in it’s judgement
as the picture
looks at you again
without tying up loose ends
where shadows followed you
once like servants. 
 
 
 
(NB. Done at a workshop on 20/04/2011 at Olgas with Steve Garside and Rachel Bond also present. The title is from a poem by Anthony Owen of the same name which can be found in his book 'My father's eyes were blue' - My poem is somewhat different of course!) 

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Andy N

Sun 19th Jun 2011 21:24

thanks for the comment, katy lisa.. is a bit of a odd piece this one, must admit and i agree with you - it's certainly a spooky one x

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Sat 18th Jun 2011 00:55

very erie and spooky making the hairs on your back stand on end

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Andy N

Thu 9th Jun 2011 22:48

thanks to all for comments here... quite a straight forward poem for me to write, but has given me plenty to think about afterwards.. x

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Antony Owen

Tue 31st May 2011 12:11

Shadows were lost
across trenches
treasuring the sun

I love this part it conjures a beautiful image.

:)

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winston plowes

Tue 10th May 2011 10:21

Hi Andy, an interesting one this. liked the penultimate section.(an hill?)Win x

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 10th May 2011 10:18

I like this Andy. You choose some unusual images, I esp like the first verse (where can those horses be going?) :)

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Andy N

Tue 26th Apr 2011 19:55

Hi Cynthia - there was a typo on the last line where servants should have been said instead of the second shadows.. must have been more tired than i originally realised when i blogged it before.. oops... hope you are good x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 26th Apr 2011 11:42

Many, many fine images and whole lines here, Andy. Your opening stanza is a striking thought-catcher. IMO, I might leave off the last two lines, or perhaps rearrange them, leaving only two words 'like shadows' as the ending. I'm glad you acknowledged A W's poem.

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