I would rarely disagree with Cynthia, but I must say...
'pressed' as in flattened, and 'Heat' and 'warmth' are varying degrees - as in passion and friendliness... and 'threaded to' goes with sown - beautifully.

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Original item by Isobel

This is very interesting. I like the format even if it is not any 'shape' I recognize; it's a pleasant flow of undulating eye. The ideas are very sensual with some lovely images, like the whole of the final four lines: 'the year which winds before her day/is pregnant in her womb.....becomes my tendril tomb'. Maybe the metaphors get a bit confusing, but the overall 'feeling' is very intrusive if carefully read.

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Original item by Alan Morrison

I like this, Isobel, the idea and the diction. But here goes: IMO, I would take out what I consider to be unnecessary words, making the poem even more forceful. eg. 'paper aeroplanes' are automatically 'pressed', so the idea is inherent and doesn't need the triple 'p' alliteration. Leaving it out actually makes the 'paper aeroplanes' more effective, not less. 'Heat' and 'warmth' are repetitious; 'threaded to' doesn't really add anything and detracts from 'words that can't be worn' which is gorgeous. The concluding five lines are superb. I must be feeling my cheerios...I'm done.

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Original item by Isobel

Reading a lot of Wilde, Kealan? Keep reading.

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Original item by Kealan Coady

haha - a veritable smorgasbord of silliness - where DO you get those drugs ??

People neglect to count their legs regularly

Comment is about A Corpse Is Not A Sandwhich And Other Ramblings. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I really liked this powerfully evocative poem.

Comment is about Memento (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Greg and Julian. Thanks for your comments!

Comment is about SimonW (poet profile)

Original item by SimonW

A lovely poem, with a sense of longing...

My favourite lines:

'Heat, warmth, promise
dried to seed and sown in barren land
threaded to words that can’t be worn'

Comment is about Memento (blog)

Original item by Isobel

What a beautiful and passionate love story, Anthony.

You know how to draw in, from the title to 'How could they know?'...
as they infer a darker side, and yet, it is not at all what was expected.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I was actually looking forward to this wedding - not too ashamed of being a monarchist myself having taken the Queen's shilling for many a year (I see Prince Wm - is now Hon. Colonel of my old regiment - regretfully was in a southbound coach from the north for all of 12 hours so missed the real time viewing though much enjoyed later at my daughter's house. Take a pat on the back Ann for posting your very apposite poem on WOL and giving us all an opportunity to comment. Didn't you just love the 3 year old in the corner with the hacked off look - priceless - someone must write a poem about the world through her eyes x

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Liked this very much, Isobel. Those opening two lines sounds like messages written on flimsy forces notepaper during the war. I've certainly found correspondence like that recently that has moved me to tears, partly because it was written by a relative - a grandmother - that I never knew

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Original item by Isobel

yes, eugenie looked a bit of a twit with her antlers, but one or two duffers out of thousands ain't bad.
I was saying to the missus how nick clegg's wife looks a proper sight - like a flamenco dancer - then it turns out she's spanish! - better keep my detailed opinions on couture to myself I reckon.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Well turned out? Eugenie looked like she was wearing a pair of Antlers and Beatrice looked like a pantomime dame. I think the average woman in the street could have dressed herself in Oxfam and turned up looking better. That makes me sound awfully bitchy LOL! I'm only saying it cos they are so far removed that it can't hurt. The point I am trying to make is that wealth can't buy you class, deportment or taste. Can it buy you happiness? Perhaps up to a point but it takes other things as well.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hehehe! Cool poem. I believe you. A lot of tongue-in-cheek there. "And yet tears roll down - I don’t know why". Please forgive me when I say it but I think I do know why. It's because in your heart of hearts you are a true Romantic (me too). However, much of romanticism comes from childhood when (one believed that) people lived happily ever after, princes came someday, kisses made princes out of frogs and awoke beautiful princesses from decades of slumber and knights on white chargers carried ladyes off to castles in neverneverland. That event yesterday was a childhood fantasy played out before our eyes (coal miner's [Sloane Ranger] great granddaughter marries prince) by people who have the money to do it well. "they all looked so well turned-out & happy" because they were all very very wealthy, which helps in looking well turned-out and happy (I say "looking", which doesn't mean that they really are :o). These events are skilful works of social engineering designed to beguile us (in the face of everything to the contrary) into having Hope and diverting our attention from the things which really matter. But it's a good thing that communities had street parties and that even hardened cynics shed cathartic tears. ;o)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Having just returned from a week's coach tour -thank you for commenting on Three Reflections Andy and glad you enjoyed them

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Original item by Andy N

Most people on here are some kind of late starter in poetry, so you are in good company.
Your writing is superb, atmospheric, Simon. Parakeets invites you to read and re-read; perhaps an appropriate double-take on this exotic offering.

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Original item by SimonW

The sense of place and atmosphere in 'Kemptown' is almost palpable. The repeated use of prepositions makes reading the extract like being led on a journey - and I'd like to know where it goes next. Great stuff.

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Original item by Andy N

Very good, Ann, enjoyed your poem, I love the line on Camilla too! (In principle I would say I'm not a royalist, but then I do appreciate them at the same time, so as normal, I'm mixed up!) And yes, I shed a few tears too.... xx

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

if I could read my lines half as well with 2 billion watching, I'd be well chuffed.
I'm no royalist, but just "well done" to the happy couple in particular & to everyone really - they all looked so well turned-out & happy.
(yeah, I walk like Camilla as well)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Like the chipped champagne flute, Ann. As a fervent anti-monarchist I had a funny old day ... spent most of it helping out at a street party's in my mother-in-law's road, and enjoyed being there. They had stuck pictures up on the fence of the last time they had a party, for Charles and Di ... and some of the kids in those pictures were back there now, with their own kids.

Comment is about royal wedding day (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Simon, good to see you on Write Out Loud at last! You know I admire Parakeets and Noir. Thanks for your comments on Touch Wood: don't think I've ever read that one out. Greg

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Original item by SimonW

And I wonder just how many egg yolk yellow coats the queen owns... she could have worn any of them and we wouldn't have known the difference...

I thought it was very bad that they left out two ex prime ministers - just bad form and petty - whether you like what they did or not, they both aged dreadfully whilst doing that job.

Comment is about royal wedding day (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Blimey, you were quick Ann!

I did think that locking them all in at Westminster Abbey would have been a good way to start 'la revolucion', but I did watch some of it with my granddaughter and was struck by the thought that it is a part of British history in the making and that there was a sense in which Diana helped to change the monarchy a little. Must be getting soft in my old age.
Harry seems more like his father...
well done Ann. the zeitgeist.

Comment is about royal wedding day (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Fitting! I love it.

'Camilla walks like me – carefully!' -my fav!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Tongue in cheek here - honest! :)

Comment is about royal wedding day (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Simon, welcome to Write Out Loud. Winston

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Original item by SimonW

Hi Lynn - why why why I don't know - I don't give a stuff about William & Kate - but I've been in floods of tears all morning. I suppose it's memories of other times and other weddings, of hopes and just that something that brings us all together. (Still don't care much for the royal family though!)xx

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Ann, thank you for your lovely comments on "Not for us". Fortunately, I only had to work 7 till 9, but yes poetry can be quite therapeutic, can't it?
xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks Ann and Dave. Must admit I got let off lightly as I only had to work from 7 till 9. (Still had to get up at 5.30 on a bank holiday though!) So this poem was more written on principle and for my lovely colleagues really...
Just been enjoying the wedding. Lynn xx

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Hey! I thought you were supposed to be hard at work today! Glad that you have some time off!!!!xx

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Love the poem, Ann. Well written, and also a good chuckle at your last comment to Isobel! xxx

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Nah! She should have had fairy wings - to go with the forest theme! If I ever get married again (!?!?!???) I'm going to get married in a forest and wear fairy wings and jump over a broomstick and dance naked round a bonfire!

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

The nicest royal wedding dress I can remember - very Grace Kelly - she got it right and will probably put an end to all these backless numbers. But what did Beatrice and Eugenie look like? Something out of a pantomime springs to mind...

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Great poem, Ann. Nice to be thinking about other weddings, instead of the one none of us seems able to escape.

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ha - the kids are all watching it - I will take a peek at the important bit when the bride arrives - just to see if she gets the dress right. Am not really interested in what Posh Spice is wearing or Elton John for that matter. :)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Not watching it on't telly then Izzie? Hope you have a good day off!xx

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Original item by Isobel

Perhaps that's because you can just turn up and let your hair down. If you are close to the couple, you get tied up with all the pre wedding stress and hassle. Who to invite/who not to invite and all the argument that can cause. You also have to be nice and socialise with people you hardly know instead of just getting pissed.

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

In my experience weddings are more enjoyable the less close you are to the person getting married! But that don't seem right somehow - should be the other way round!

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

What a great take on a theme! I love weddings - where else can you get to eat for nothing and have a good dance to naff music? I like looking forward to seeing the dress - then always being disappointed by it. Absolutely hate all these big bare backs that are fashionable at the moment. Hated all the big meringue nests that were fashionable in my day...

I can think of lots of really funny weddings I've been to - one in Wales where, on a hot day, there was no wine, water or juice on the tables and we were all gasping. One in Cheshire where my own marriage broke down completely... Everyone makes fools of themselves and real life is played out - hot and sweating in clothes that aren't comfy...

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Can't say I enjoy weddings very much!

Comment is about four weddings (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Tis true - I spend most of my time alone, and I love it. But, sometimes I suddenly feel ALONE and that it totally different, a very cold and empty feeling. I find the scientific take on the subject very interesting in your poem, about atoms and energy etc., making it sound as if we are all alien from each other and even maybe from ourselves.

Comment is about Aloneness (blog)

Original item by Alan Morrison

Hello Lynn. Thanks for your comments on The Continuing Story of John the Hat

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hello Val. Thanks for your comments on The Continuing Story of john the Hat

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

I love your thought processes Alan - though life might be easier for you and many other poets if you didn't have them. I occasionally wonder whether intelligence is a curse - being able to really think about your condition rather than just get on with satisfying your basic needs...

You describe disconnectedness/ disconnection (neither sound great) very well and your poem made me think, which I like to do :)

Comment is about Aloneness (blog)

Original item by Alan Morrison

I'm not sure about the 'technical worth' of the poem, Thom, but the subject matter is intriguing. What is real? How do we go about ascertaining/processing what is 'real'. Etcetera - no end to it

Comment is about This Solipsism (blog)

Original item by Tom

Sympathy. She won't be getting a Christmas card will she.

Comment is about Not For Us (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I hope you are enjoying not being a question mark! I find using the photo option very liberating and imagination-pleasing! I am liking being a chough! Sometimes I like being a mud-maid - sometimes I like being me. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Oh Lynn - that's so MEAN! Stick her doughnuts where the sun don't shine!! Hope writing this poem (which I think is jolly good) helped to get some of your anger out and made you feel better. xx

Comment is about Not For Us (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Very enjoyable, John, love your work. X

Comment is about The Continuing Story of John the Hat (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

How true John. Enjoyed the poem.X

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Original item by John Coopey