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Escape

Come now,
Our love is in the past,
so let me slip off to an Opera in Venice
without finding your face in the crowd.
Or walk down Saint Adams St. in the rain
and not smell your lilac perfume.
No mirror is safe for my hollow eyes.
they just serve to remind me that
tears from the heart stain pale cheeks
as surely as red wine stained your dress
at our wedding.

Let this be the end...
or the beginning of it,
all colors of the rainbow
that was our love are bent
and distorted out of their proper shape,
which was built to be a thing of beauty.

Please, no more haunting footsteps
out side the window
when I meet some other lovely thing
and bring her home for the night.
I'm just a man,
nothing more,
I could no more turn down
the temptation of a pretty face
than I could cure the cancer
that took you from me years ago.

So now, while I have life to live,
give me freedom from your memory,
let it end.

In the end,
or the beginning of,
in the end all colors of
this black rainbow are bent and distorted
out of it's proper shape
which was built a thing of beauty.

Escape

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Isobel

Sun 5th Jun 2011 12:19

I'd disagree with Cynthia - I think the 3rd verse lifts the poem up from being your run of the mill love lost poem. I think that loss could have been expressed less baldly though - the hint that her loss is to the world, to everything, to everyone - allowing readers to imagine.

A very touching poem - memories can indeed be painful. x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 12th May 2011 15:14

This is strongly emotive. I would have been smashed even more if you used stanzas 1,2 and 4 to be the entire poem. Stanza 3 is so personal it narrows the universality of the lament, applicable by readers to any situation of loss, divorce even, whatever - LOVE LOST. I had a hard time myself with extricating explicit references in my poetry, and was lambasted by a literate friend. 'Suggestion!', he said. 'Invite the reader in to share, not to show.' I'm not always successful, but I try to take his good point.

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Sat 7th May 2011 10:28

I loved the repeat that wasn't a repeat of the rainbow lines. Nicely done.

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