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Rowing Across Herring Gut in a Purple Boat

wrapped in the mantle of scarlet sun my skiff

and I drifted through the crayola buoys

      bobbing in the dusky harbour

      a strange lavender lily

      with a thinking pistil

watching  the lobster boats thrum slowly up the

      golden-throated river

      single file

like purring birds their bellies full of greeny

      briny bonded claws and

      cannibal eyes

      chugging

back to the grey plank docks cooling their legs

      in the black salt shadows

back to the grey shingle houses where the

      deft-handed bait packer

has left her reticule of herring to make

      a party

      of steak and beer

      for the fisherpeople



                                                                        Cynthia Buell Thomas      

        


◄ the perfect word

Sunset ►

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pauline sewards

Sat 14th May 2011 11:03

love this 'their bodies full of greeny briny bonded claws and cannibal eyes' and the whole poem is brilliantly evocative,
Picking up on the comment of Winston I always feel it is better to cut down on the non essential adjectives so the others stand out, but on the other hand I like the complete picture this builds up
In general I love the 'painterly' effect of the poems of yours I've read. it's a delight to come across these and I shall be folowiing your work
pauline x

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winston plowes

Tue 10th May 2011 10:23

Cynthia, I can't see for colours! This is so richly painted and full of vivid skillfull descriptions. Is it possible to have too many such passages. Would it be more successful if there were some plain sections in between. In an old city cram packed with amazing architecture none of it is noticed. I may of course be totally wrong! just thinking aloud. Win x

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Isobel

Mon 4th Apr 2011 21:55

Wow indeed! You're back with a bang Cynthia. Very impressive use of language and imagery here. I love the down to earth feel of the ending also - it complements the rich imagery that precedes really well - takes it back to basics. A super poem. x

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Elaine Booth

Mon 4th Apr 2011 21:21

Wow - great poem, Cynthia. All the colour & wonderful language: "golden-throated river" & "reticule of herring" - fantastic. Really painterly use of words. x

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Ray Miller

Mon 4th Apr 2011 20:16

Enjoyed this, Cynthia, verging on Lewis Carroll then ebbing back again. The thinking pistil is great. I thought slowly thrum would sound better than thrum slowly.

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Cate Greenlees

Mon 4th Apr 2011 16:44

Beautiful imagery here Cynthia, economical yet vivid language, like an artist sweeping brilliant blocks of colour over a canvas. Lovely!
Cate xx

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Greg Freeman

Mon 4th Apr 2011 14:00

This is such a fine poem, Cynthia. Takes the breath away

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Dave Bradley

Mon 4th Apr 2011 12:40

Some lovely images in this, Cynthia - language to relish.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 4th Apr 2011 11:45

Herring Gut is the original, local name for Port Clyde, Maine.

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