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watering mother

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Too frail for a flannel now

she stands beneath a peal of rain.

Her daughter wields the watering can.

 

The water has to be just right -

elbow-measured. In this way

the tables turn, mother becomes child.

 

There’s a delicacy, feeling safe,

now privacy has gone. She’d thought

that seeing mother naked

would be wrong.

 

But, carers are dismissed

and as the water kisses grey

and sunken flesh it’s a last rite,

an honour for the daughter,

who is watering her mother.

 

A naked mother turning

lifts her face up like a flower.

Nearing the end, come to a time

when even water hurts.



love

◄ cable laying

on lundy ►

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Isobel

Wed 18th May 2011 20:50

Read this a while back and liked it Ann but didn't have time to comment properly - my life a bit busy at the moment.

I like the delicate plant imagery in here. I find it touching and sad - I like poetry that moves me in some way - don't give me nature - give me emotions! You've obviously hit the mark for many. We are are all somewhere in this life chain - marching towards the inevitable - a touching reminder of that - let's hope we all have those kind hands when push comes to shove. xx

<Deleted User> (8730)

Wed 11th May 2011 12:15

obviously well liked

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 10th May 2011 21:28

Thanks so much, this poem has been bubbling away in my head for the last fifteen years, since I heard about my friend's friend and her mother. The third verse may not fit Ray, you are right, as it is the one bit that echoes my own feelings about my mother whose body was very private to her.

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Simon Wright

Tue 10th May 2011 20:09

This is a very powerful and moving poem with it's bittersweet central idea of watering that combines echoes of holy water and flowers. I really liked this.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 10th May 2011 12:00

Have to agree with the other comments Ann. Well done - this is so sensitive, delicate and beautifully put.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 10th May 2011 10:06

Ray's right, Ann, you've come upon an original, affirmative take on a subject many of us find ourselves writing about. There's subtle music in this, too: delicacy and privacy, gone and wrong, dismissed and kisses. Too often people focus on the question of decay in these situations; you've found the beauty of it.

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Elaine Booth

Mon 9th May 2011 23:33

This is so bitter-sweet to read - all the sadness and beauty of life. It's not the technical brilliance of a poem that moves the reader but the spirit of the poet that shines through. And you certainly got me with this one, Ann! XXX

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 9th May 2011 23:08

Thanks Ray, you were right about the right that wasn't right and should have been rite! Spelling not my greatest gift!!

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John Coopey

Mon 9th May 2011 22:48

Excellent Foxy.
Very vivid.
We start life being pushed in a pram by our parents and end up being pushed in a wheelchair by our kids.

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Ray Miller

Mon 9th May 2011 21:11

Inspired is right, I think. Wonderful metaphor, the mother being being watered like a flower/child.I'm not sure the 3rd verse is adding a great deal but I loved the last 2 verses. Do you mean last right or rite?

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Mon 9th May 2011 19:56

It seems that it comes to this for far too many
parents and their children. Age gets us all eloquently expressed and touching - David

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 9th May 2011 19:04

Inspired by a friend of a friend, whose aged mother was so frail she found the touch of a flannel and even being washed in a shower too painful.

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