<Deleted User> (13947)
Fri 10th Jul 2015 00:06
Thank you for your kind comment Mr. Coopey on Bitter Wish.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
You can find more of my poetry on line including some videos simply by searching on SUBACCHI POET.
Comment is about MY FATHER'S WATCH (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
You are rightly elevated to the salubrious level of Melvyn Bragg and Steven Fry for your wordsmithery
Comment is about MONOGAMOUS WORDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (13947)
Thu 9th Jul 2015 23:49
Thank you Mr. Elder for your wonderful comment on Bitter Wish. It is much appreciated and so very kind.
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
yes! i have a willow tree in my front garden and was just thinking how sad it would be if it got throttled. then i saw it as an allusion for suffocation love. it grew from there. if you pardon the pun.
Comment is about virginia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Great imagery and a lovely flowing pace . I can imagine the ride. I find that Northern rail provides a good stimuli for poems.
Comment is about Paper Dreams (blog)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
Very topical Nigel and very Nigel. A good piece of poetry. I look forward to seeing you next week.
Comment is about Camp At Butch Farm (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Thanks Cynthia and Andy,
The poem took me about 20 years of thinking upon the subject :) It was actually written very quickly and edited over a couple of reads, which, as Cynthia points out is why it is not perfectly spelt or 'grammatized' I like the imperfections. To be honest i get so on top of my work I wouldn't see its mistakes. sometimes it is a rush with my self to get it out which takes precedence..not for the reader but the creative process for me involves getting it out. i seem only to be motivated with the spelling etc once its already online. I have to say though i do use 'creative spelling' often as a mechanism for idea. I.e. Afrika's. and i find writing changes, grows and develops with every read..as if a poem could become a book, a chapter etc i think its learning where to draw your limits with editing. i can write new poetry from the edit of an original..but some poetry i like to keep it as close to its original to avoid labouring it. its a delicate balance.
i take your compliments however as praise for the words and that is wonderful x thanks again. if you've any time to highlight my errors i would be grateful for you to point them out only i am likely to invent a list of artistic purpose for why they are included or omitted :) it is hard to be creative AND place importance on correct english format..and here i go, this poem is about perfection/imperfection and other extreme opposites.I would like to see it written perfectly but other peoples ideas of perfect english are not necessarily set to a standard.
Andy, I am always writing. i don't write solely for this website or for performance poetry 'club' I have always written in one form or another and always will while I am able :) a writer/artist has to have something to write/create about. for a writer there is no vacation x
I am Welsh and Irish/Manx (scouse) by blood. why dyou ask?
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
<Deleted User> (13947)
Thu 9th Jul 2015 22:37
Thank you for your flattering comment on Bitter Wish. It has me beaming for the better part of an hour. :)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
An excellent contribution for both heart and head. And a finely felt memorial.
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I like the deep idea behind this, the expression of a thinking mind.
Comment is about Just-in-time (blog)
Original item by Juhi Gupte
And this poem moves upon the face of the waters, and upon the heart, with insightful power. Very creative.
Are you Celtic? Well, more so than us all, at least?
Rachel, I know great writing has nothing to do with grammar and punctuation; but since you are so prominent in talent and set such a high standard in subject matter and expression, also check your 'page' presentation for the bare minimum of spelling. Or get someone to proofread for you. Famous writers always do that - pass the mundane stuff to a secretary.
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
I hope to get to Wigan again some time; not been since the Tudor closed. Please make yourself known if you're ever at Sale Waterside.
And congrats on your personal achievements.
Comment is about Eva Elizabeth (poet profile)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
Many fine images here with well-selected details, and a good pace with much internal motion and rhyme, quite in sync with your topic. How do 'wind' and 'birdsong etc.' play a part in this scenario? Inside a train? The two lines sound good, but are they appropriate for this particular position of the writer? It's a sincere question. What am I missing?
'Paper Dreams' is a super title for a great idea.
Comment is about Paper Dreams (blog)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
Is this a play on Virginia Creeper? In whatever language?
Comment is about virginia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thank you Andy, really appreciate your feedback
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Who knows, but time waits for no-one...!
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Thank you Harry, hope it "got to you" in a positive way! Katy
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
white ribbon of time made me shiver.
excellent stuff x
Comment is about Iron Lung (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
<Deleted User> (13947)
Thu 9th Jul 2015 16:50
phew. wow.. excellent, rach. didn't know you were still writing.
this must have took ages to write.
impressive.
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
great ending there, eva. really enjoyed this.
like in particular notebook of paper dreams and Coughing, wheezing, sniffling, sneezing but a lot of good lines here.
excellent x
Comment is about Paper Dreams (blog)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
thanks everyone, really glad you enjoyed this one. as i mentioned before, this took 3 hours of my time, which for me is a lifetime. worth it though!
Comment is about voices (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Travis Brow
Thu 9th Jul 2015 12:55
Stu, 'Rorschach leaves' - beautiful phrase. I'm lucky enough to have trees to look at through my window and I'm endlessly seeing telling images in the leaves.
Comment is about claret (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Travis Brow
Thu 9th Jul 2015 12:51
Susan,
Sorry I missed your latest addition Beck (Stanza Stones) when you first posted it.
I like the concept of water and its cycle, providing growth and life before returning to its source, but I have to pick you up on a couple of things:
If water were 'common' currency, as opposed to rare, the grass would not be parched. Perhaps valued currency would be more apt unless the common you refer to is the land itself.
Salty bullets and pearl necklaces conjure up images I'm not sure you intended and will have some people sniggering!
Please take my comments in the way of constructive criticism as I enjoy your words immensely.
Comment is about Susan Darlington (poet profile)
Original item by Susan Darlington
<Deleted User> (13947)
Wed 8th Jul 2015 22:52
I was browsing through profiles and am so glad I stumbled upon this wonderfully written piece. Simple yet beautiful. Very well done.
R
Comment is about Lips (blog)
Original item by Michael W. Lankford
i will steve black. i have been checking books about em in waterstones..sure i saw a japanese book?? will have another look. i want some good illustrations x
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
I certainly understand the concept of poetry as an evolving
art form - with the caveat that it should be within the
range of all and not selective by special interest material.
If words are to be employed under the term "poetry" then
let them be for the comprehension of all and not the few.
We should not need dictionaries to translate - as if from
a foreign language - what we are offered to read...
with the exception, perhaps, of nonsense from the likes
of Edward Lear.
Comment is about Armitage ready to investigate the role of rap in modern poetry (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Can I make a suggestion mollie to the last verse?
flying slow flying low,
seeking stars that glow,
over swaying meadows
then going home.
Comment is about Humming bird (blog)
Original item by mollie learmonth
sure sir, i will try to translate it
Comment is about Storm inside a man (blog)
Original item by GAURAV JAIN
Oh dear, we are getting down and dirty with the yoof aren't we?
Trying to get establishment to understand (even have a go at) rap or hip hop is like trying to juggle tripe (no pun intended). As soon as there is a whiff of acceptance the genre will morph again.
Sooner or later our language (I know language is an ever evolving thing) will be so denigrated that Oxbridge, if it doesn't already, will be offering a chair for texting and rapping.
What a shame poetry isn't to be seen as a wonderful vehicle for improving the English language and the vocabulary of the aspiring young writers of the future.
As a postscript, a clearer prompt for the future of Ms CAD could not be made. Perhaps a job-swap Simon?
Comment is about Armitage ready to investigate the role of rap in modern poetry (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Excellent observance,Graham. I see the fine point involved. Thanks, Huw. Thought you might.
Comment is about A Poet's View (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 8th Jul 2015 10:52
Fantastically brutal. Love it x
Comment is about bar prayer 1 (07/08/2015) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
u r very right sir @huw thomas
Comment is about Storm inside a man (blog)
Original item by GAURAV JAIN
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 8th Jul 2015 08:28
thank you Rose x
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
A wonderfully clever premise Stu! A Mr Ben of poetry no less.
well done,
Graham
Comment is about voices (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Imagery and Essence. Is it filtered or distilled I wonder?
Comment is about A Poet's View (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Chaos and hope, beginnings and endings, just the right balance Greg!
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
The sort of polemic I like Ray.
As I get older, I'm glad my father and his father aren't still around to see what they fought for.
Comment is about LONELY LABOURERS OF THE MEAN STREETS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 7th Jul 2015 22:54
Hi Racheal.This is superb.A really deep and soulful piece.
Thank you.
Rose.
x
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Lynn Hamilton
Tue 7th Jul 2015 21:54
"Is full of people but devoid of life" is my favourite line out of this piece. I enjoyed reading the whole from start to finish
Comment is about beach (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Nicely presented Greg. From the heart and a very reasoned attitude. It reminds me that in wartime, many different nationalities pulled together, and conversely how divisions in societies can seem insoluble.
Could there a touch of Betjeman here, a fondness maybe for the gentle?
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Juhi Gupte
Fri 10th Jul 2015 03:23
Thanks Cynthia Buell Thomas!!
Faith in Almighty is the central thought.
Comment is about Just-in-time (blog)
Original item by Juhi Gupte