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M.C. Newberry

Thu 28th May 2015 23:24

I feel far too young to comment! In any event, I was
excused unwanted participation in the Scouts (before
later years in another uniform) when my mother heard the
scoutmaster liked a drink!
:-)

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Chloe Marina

Thu 28th May 2015 23:13

Very vivid and lucid I love it!

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 28th May 2015 22:46

Ken,
Just to cheer you up.

Last Saturday in the Legion we heaved our octogenarian limbs on to the deserted dance floor to do a jazzy little kind of a two step, Only for Cyril (90) and Betty (circa 90) to get up an execute a nifty jive (talk about being bested!)

We staggered back to our wheely-zimmer friends trying to look like a pair of sports,but got something from the evening when another couple of circa 90 year olds told us where we could get some reasonable geriatric travel insurance.

No wonder the Pope said that Europe was now `elderly` and haggard`.(mind, he`s no chicken himself!)

Enjoyed your lead soldier, happy Christmas, vicar spying boys brigade boyhood...That must have been a lousy dance if those soldiers would rather go back and fight.

A wartime destroyer-sailor told me that once -when they were bravely leaving the Mersey to face the u boats - the captain broadcast that they would have to return because of engine trouble...He said that they all gave the captain a loud, hearty cheer.


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raypool

Thu 28th May 2015 22:36

Hi Cynthia. I just read Hurricane and was bowled over by the sheer impact and word wizardry - almost Dhaliesque if I may say! It reminds me of a poem by Ted Hughes about wind - different style but yours makes a great treat of imagery. Ray

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ken eaton-dykes

Thu 28th May 2015 18:38

Thanks John. Words of wisdom indeed. Keep looking on the bright side, while we're still top side of the geraniums

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Greg Freeman

Thu 28th May 2015 17:09

Thanks for looking at 'Murder mile', John. Yes, these two nearby events were the first things I came across when we pitched up at our apartment.

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John Coopey

Thu 28th May 2015 14:23

Ken - you should delete your 'history' as you go. It will save the embarrassment when you shake a six. "Every six fucking weeks" - too right, soldier. Too right.
I look at the blossom in Spring and the dead leaves in Autumn and think, "how many of these fuckers have I got left to see". It's scarcely worth planting the geraniums!

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Travis Brow

Thu 28th May 2015 06:47

Cheers Colin. I changed his name, but otherwise it's true. There but for the grace of god, and all that..

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Isobel

Thu 28th May 2015 00:05

Beautifully written poem, Jane. People such as Alan deserve to be remembered and I found it deeply moving.

xx


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John Coopey

Wed 27th May 2015 23:32

Let it pour, indeed, Shirley.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 27th May 2015 23:30

Portsmouth certainly seems to be a very vibrant place for poetry, Helen. I don't think I'm lined up as a guest poet at Guildford, but Maggie did enlist me to perform at a gig at the Rifle Club in Portsmouth in March. And I certainly hope to look in at Tongues & Grooves at some time in the future.

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John Coopey

Wed 27th May 2015 23:23

Striking parallel, Greg.

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John Coopey

Wed 27th May 2015 23:13

"Hill" - such a little word for such a big ego.
(He is on the right lines about "accessibility", though; personally, I have always thought it should be banned except in connection with wheelchair ramps and crotchless panties).

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Wed 27th May 2015 23:12

'Boots?'...tee hee.xx

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Russ Litten

Wed 27th May 2015 23:11

Thank you for the kind words. Colin, it literally was an early morning wake up poem, wrote it straight onto my phone at 4.30am pretty much how it's presented here. The dream was exactly how it happened in the poem. Lucky, really, like catching a vivid silver fish from the murky depths of sleep

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 27th May 2015 20:49

Cynthia 50 shades of water :)

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 27th May 2015 20:47

CBT indeed - 50 shades of water :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 17:20

If breasts are naturally bare, there is no shame about them. What creates 'shame' is the deliberate and provocative peep-show. As for the nipple business - pure idiocy! I have always thought the real allure of sensationalised female breasts is the male's desire to suckle - like a baby - with little thought to the erotic arousal of the female sex urge.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 17:08

I, too, really like this. It requires more than one whip-through - with vocabulary and images that are challenging but very well-chosen both for meaning and music.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:35

I shall try to catch up on some more of your work. I was not very active on-line in April.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:33

Totally engaging from start to finish. And it leaves the reader to fill in any scenario desired - very good 'poet-ing'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:27

Dark times = dark water?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:24

Welcome to WOL. I'm sure you will enjoy this site. The management staff is excellent, and ready to help you.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:20

This is a very strong poem, and by no means simple.

I see it is the same one on your profile, but appearing there in a more poetic form of broken lines. Did you have difficulty posting this here, in this format?

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Wed 27th May 2015 14:23

nice one Travis. Shifty, yes.
x

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John F Keane

Wed 27th May 2015 13:07

Who is that ugly devil scribbling on the left?

Oh, its me...

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 26th May 2015 11:47

Thanks Tommy. That's spot on! Bloody technology.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 26th May 2015 11:41

You can read one of the best, certainly one of the longest, and possibly the most enjoyable article I've seen about Simon Armitage in the Guardian here http://www.theguardian.com/books/2015/may/26/simon-armitage-making-poetry-pay. You'll note that the interview was done in and around Marsden, Julian - poetry centre of the universe!

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 26th May 2015 11:10

I beg to differ, M.C. There is humour aplenty among open-mic/open-floor poets, in most of the many events I have attended in the past few years. I would agree that there is a tendency amongst some modern poets to eschew humour but the best deliver their serious messages in a deceptively humorous package. I love this from Billy Collins:

Introduction to poetry

I ask them to take a poem
and hold it up to the light
like a color slide
or press an ear against its hive.

I say drop a mouse into a poem
and watch him probe his way out,
or walk inside the poem's room
and feel the walls for a light switch.

I want them to waterski
across the surface of a poem
waving at the author's name on the shore.

But all they want to do
is tie the poem to a chair with rope
and torture a confession out of it.

They begin beating it with a hose
to find out what it really means.

As I mention in my review of Armitage's gig in Washington, we would all have been proud of his dry humour interspersing the serious messages within some of his poetry.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th May 2015 09:34

I'm a thief who steals the truth from your words


Well crafted Chloe!

Graham

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 26th May 2015 09:30

Correct Graham, this is a re-edit. :)

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th May 2015 09:29

This is hard to read for me Lynn.
I think there are some good words swallowed up in here.

The laugh he threw back Hit my face.

Graham

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th May 2015 09:26

Tommy I think I must have missed this first time around (that's if you posted before).
There are some good words here.

We snatched the time

to make our marks

with sweat

and firm commitments.

and the last two lines are brilliant.

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Richard

Tue 26th May 2015 08:18

Wow I really like your poem! It is well thought out and always on point of the subject. I look forward to seeing more from you.

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Tue 26th May 2015 07:38

Hey, I like this one, has the feel of an early-morning-waking-up-dream. x

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 26th May 2015 00:00

Preeti,

I'm not qualified to say what works but I really enjoy reading your written words.

Please stick with your instincts. Xx

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Lynn Hamilton

Mon 25th May 2015 23:34

In reply to your comment on 'My God' Mr TC, no need to think too hard. The soul destroying experience of internet dating, the isolation of technology and being subjected, as a child, to a host of spaghetti westerns where 'hey blondie' was god.

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Mon 25th May 2015 22:45

Brilliant.Deep,as most of your work is Paul,but this one is at a very enjoyable depth.x

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Helen Elliott

Mon 25th May 2015 22:17

Yes, I think it is a great venue and it was a very special night indeed. I think Maggie's response to your review is the most important and she was moved by it.
I performed at the recent Mayfly Festival of Arts at the Square Tower, it was on the last May bank holiday and there was a great atmosphere. I think the owners are very willing to support the arts here in Portsmouth and it was great to have artists, musicians and poets sharing a platform.
I hear that you are a featured poet at the next Guildford event? That should be good. Have you ever been to a Tongues and Grooves open mic night?

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Helen Elliott

Mon 25th May 2015 22:06

Harry, this is lovely. I agree with Travis, the rhythm is spot on. Perhaps if you'd have substituted 'mummy' for 'daddy' in that last verse, the element of surprise would have worked in your favour. Enjoyed!

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Greg Freeman

Mon 25th May 2015 21:07

Hi Helen, thanks for your kind words about Maggie's book launch write-up. It was quite an occasion that night, and a privilege to be there. Glad you felt that the words did the job. There was a sense that a whole community was involved, and felt that it had played its part. I'd never been to the Old Square Tower before; it's a wonderful venue. And outside you can watch all the ferries coming in and out. Greg

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 25th May 2015 21:03

Shame on the magazine say I, they should have recognized real talent! I raised my 3 kids after their mum died so I know all too well how frenetic that life can be... Best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 25th May 2015 20:48

Thanks for commenting on 'The Family' Harry, much appreciated. :)

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David R Mellor

Mon 25th May 2015 15:05

thanks i"I am Lost" for words thanks

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 25th May 2015 10:00

First two lines were spot on Preeti. Persevere!

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I am lost

Sun 24th May 2015 22:22

Raypool, thanks.

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Steve Smith

Sun 24th May 2015 21:33

Thank you Harry, I appreciate your opinion a lot -I really enjoyed your poems too!Hope to see you in June!
Steve Smith

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raypool

Sun 24th May 2015 20:46

Thanks for these comments David. I suppose it is corporate theft and usuary made respectable - so yes we do have to put faith in these people. They are just pawns in the bigger game after all and are to be pitied.
And, yes it is autobiographical, but I am old enough not to worry about it any more.!!

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raypool

Sun 24th May 2015 20:37

Though you call yourself "I am lost," you have nothing to lose by expressing any personal thoughts, and that is a great thing in itself. Treat your mind like a blank canvas and dot some I's and cross T's and you will surely find a format that suits you, and I'm sure people will accept that as a unique effort. Nobody can have all the answers, but I think inspiration is very close to desperation and there may be a clue there somewhere!
Happy writing!!

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