Keith,
If this poem is speaking to a romantic interest the book and movie 'The Notebook' come to mind when reading this. This also sounds a lot like the relationship I have with my sister who is 10 years older than me. Things were not available to her the way they were to me when I was born much later. Excellent writing. I've added you to my favorites.
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Keith,
Thank you so much for the feedback.
Comment is about For You (blog)
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Hi Harry
Thanks for the comment. I too went in the army 1948. so we both must have been serving together for a while. What a deterrent we two must have been to the forces of communism. For as soon as I was demobbed the Korean war started.
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Hello Terry, I am drawn to your biography, its openess and determination to pursue what life has to offer. I also enjoyed some of your poetry. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about terry l shuff (poet profile)
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A beautiful poem which conjures up all thoughts of emotions and feelings. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about For You (blog)
Original item by Lyrical Lexa
Ah those halcyon days which I remember well. Thank you Keith
Comment is about The college years (blog)
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I love your writing style and the way you rhyme. Especially, 'No Plans'. "Flames of grief anew are lit, rekindling fires of loneliness". Beautiful in the most sad kind of way. I have added you to my favorites.
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Terry,
Thank you so much for your feedback!
Comment is about Mona Lisa (blog)
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You put that very exactly Keith and expressed a truth there.
I can identify with owning favourite things, and get distraught if I lost one of them. I should man up really! Thanks.
Ray
Comment is about SHE LOVED THAT CARDIGAN (blog)
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Hi Keith.
Many thanks for your comment. It's much appreciated
Ken xx
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
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Ray, Thank you for this. It goes to show that the most insignificant of possessions can possess a profound significance to a person´s identity. Keith
Comment is about SHE LOVED THAT CARDIGAN (blog)
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Shaakiera, Thank you for this cameo of wisdom and advice. Keith
Comment is about Still (blog)
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Thank you Cynthia. I know you have a fondness for texture and detail and I see it in your comment! I must admit I invented the story , I just appealed to me. I do enjoy a twisted ending!
Ray
Comment is about SHE LOVED THAT CARDIGAN (blog)
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I really like this Tom, lovely idea and imagery.
Comment is about Late Summer (blog)
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Thank you Col, Tom, Cynthia, Ray and Keith for your comments, I really enjoyed reading them and so pleased you like this one.
Paul
Comment is about A Tale of Two Sandals (blog)
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Brilliant. I love the intellectual, moral and emotional honesty here Laura. Undiluted truth.
Raj
Comment is about True Colours (with apologies to Cyndi) (blog)
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Good day Keigth
Thank you for all the kind comments you always leave on my poems.
Such positive feedback always makes one want to write more.
Kind regards
Neill Barnard
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In which way
Comment is about All Poems of Shaakiera Schroeder (blog)
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patricia Hughes
Fri 18th Aug 2017 23:21
Stunning,love the line "with roses burning out your ears"
Comment is about Prove Us All Wrong (blog)
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patricia Hughes
Fri 18th Aug 2017 23:03
Your writing just gets better all the time.
A disturbing poem but such is life.
Comment is about The Brain of a Killer (blog)
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Fri 18th Aug 2017 22:04
I truly love this and " Love will suffer" I feel as if i can actually feel the hurt. Amazing.
Comment is about I Suffered (continuation of Love Will Suffer) (blog)
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Yes we are Tom...with our emotions on our sleeve.
Comment is about POETRY (blog)
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Paul, I like this series of slightly disjointed cameos of one´s formative years. I was immediately taken back to my childhood and the school summer holidays I spent with my Nan. An evocative poem cleverly using three lines a stanza. Keith
Comment is about A Tale of Two Sandals (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Hello Neill, Thank you for this latest poem. I am drawn to it as it so open with no inhibitions. Keith
Comment is about How I will know true love? (blog)
Original item by Neill Barnard
I love this poem so much. I do not know why but it is my favorite poem i have ever read. it makes me smile every time.
Comment is about My Garden (blog)
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Thank you for this beautiful composition and in particular the line, ¨ Love is quiet and considerate, subtle and reliable, present without grandeur in a most ordinary moment ¨. It shows maturity of thought and emotion. Thank you indeed. Keith
Comment is about Beyond It's Disease (blog)
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Eseosa, Thank you for your kind comment. Keith
Comment is about Trust (blog)
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David & Kevin, Thank you for your comments which are always appreciated. Keith
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Fri 18th Aug 2017 18:51
enjoy so much the poems you write me you truly are a inspiration to me...
Comment is about lynn hahn (poet profile)
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Hello Cynthia
Thankyou for you kind words - about my poem and my poetry group!
It is great fun having a monthly poetic get-together but I think I'm probably more highly valued as an organiser than as a poet - but hey, I'll take whatever appreciation I'm given in life!
Best wishes.
Richard
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MC. I like this as I am very suspicious of those who deny history or attempt to distort it. A nation should learn to live with its history whether it be good or bad and learn from it. Pulling down statues is infantile. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about PULLING DOWN STATUES (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Powerful and to the point. Keith
Comment is about The Brain of a Killer (blog)
Original item by Michaela Sheldon
Beautiful and thoughtfully composed. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about Dedication (blog)
Original item by Antoine Le'Batute De'Pucpuc Papandopolos
What a shame. He'll be sadly missed.
Thanks Kevin
Comment is about DANCING IN THE DARK (blog)
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Beautifully, honestly conceived and very provocatively rendered. A superb subject to take up in any art form, and especially poetry.
Comment is about In That Minute (blog)
Original item by Karen Ankers
I like the way your mind works, like a stone dropped into a pool, and the ripples circling outward. You ride the water. Or something like that. IMO, the final two lines are outstanding.
Comment is about Fascist Haircut (blog)
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Wow. Now you must surely feel better! An excellent 'take' and very funny as well.
Comment is about Bodies of Questions (blog)
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Terrific. Sharp thinking, knife-edge vocabulary and always on the edge of a spinning circle. Very interesting, and clever. Great ending.
if you don't follow me, don't fuss it; I'm not sure what I mean, exactly.
Comment is about Cocooning (blog)
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A delightful story, well told. It was probably real wool. And as much a part of her daily comfort as her own skin, full of her own body scent. A piece of clothing like that is a true treasure. I'm glad you cremated her in it.
Excellent ending! HA HA! With a fine shaft of double/triple meanings to consider, if inclined.
Comment is about SHE LOVED THAT CARDIGAN (blog)
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You take me back to the same thoughts and feelings
Comment is about Mona Lisa (blog)
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Thanks old chum.. The trick with thoughts is to get them wallpapered on the page with the right patterns, as you know. I chose a cardigan as a kind of comforter - it's not rocket science. I agree about fire, cathartic and final. A sort of hot mercy. Funnily enough I went to a spiritualist circle years ago and a lady said she could see me as a Viking in a previous life - how are the mighty fallen! I didn't know a license was necessary for pyres, for one who expires. That does bring it down to earth I suppose. Cardigan Bay is a great place too !
Cheers Col. Read as above!!
Thanks Paul. I practised this reading to slacken it off a bit.
Glad you enjoyed it mate.
Tom you do me justice thank you.
Thanks Michaela and Patricia too for the likes!
Love to all. Ray
Comment is about SHE LOVED THAT CARDIGAN (blog)
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Thank you so much for your comment! Yes, it should be barren thank you for picking that up! With all of these horrible events taking place lately, I feel like I want to understand why people make these horrific choices... We are all the same flesh and blood yet people are killing people who have nothing to do with their affairs. I don't think I can ever understand it
Comment is about The Brain of a Killer (blog)
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A really great spread of choices to observe and good amount of humour here Paul. I love the grandiosity of the first line as it evaporates into the real world - bathos. As an aside Ilford was graced with unique trolleybuses which went to South Africa in the sixties. So what, you say and rightly so. It's just that the poem engaged me, so there! I do like the three line technique. I am drawn to that myself. It's nice to see it working so well.
Raymondo. Ayth.......
Comment is about A Tale of Two Sandals (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
I had to read this three times, but it was worth it, as I think I have followed your thought. A very sad, poignant, little work expressing huge emotion.
Perhaps you might leave out punctuation altogether, letting the reader sort out the likely breaks.
Comment is about Her (blog)
Original item by Olivia Bentley
I just feel there is a kind of overspill of thoughts into the wonderful sense of being adrift in familiarity , and the first line may hold a key as a father sets the life in motion - and the poem is about that too. We carry so much and you have lightly presented it but with so much infusion of feeling.
Nice, Tom.
Comment is about Late Summer (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Welcome to WOL. Great to see that you are 'running' a poetry night in your area. Good luck on the enterprise; I'm sure you're highly valued.
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keith jeffries
Sat 19th Aug 2017 18:00
Thanks so much for your comment. Keith
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