elPintor

Wed 28th Mar 2018 23:24

Some are loners and some aren't--it seems to me that it may be a trait that is inextricable from the self.

The last two lines really do create both an atmosphere and anima that seem quite innate to the piece as a whole, as solemn and sparse as it is.

Rachel

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Margret

Wed 28th Mar 2018 22:15

Omg!!! I love your sample! You are so talented. I can’t tell you how much this speaks to me ?
Xoxo- Lilly love

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racha chafik

Wed 28th Mar 2018 22:04

i can see that you love your mom so much , its a beautiful thing , im certain she will come back and be there for you ,

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racha chafik

Wed 28th Mar 2018 22:00

its very beautiful and im happy you found someone you feel that way arround him ?

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racha chafik

Wed 28th Mar 2018 21:53

no its okey , i should hav explained , i was in a cafee with my friends and we started talking about horrible things that happened to people we know , and reallly some stories i couldnt get them out of my mind , its horrible when you can't do anything

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Wed 28th Mar 2018 21:50

sorry I read this wrong..but still thanks for sharing

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racha chafik

Wed 28th Mar 2018 21:47

no this time im not sharing my pain , im sharing stories ive heard about other girls , the stories were devestating but anyway thank you for readin

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Stu Buck

Wed 28th Mar 2018 18:43

lovely to see you back! and nice poetry as ever

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Stu Buck

Wed 28th Mar 2018 18:39

cracking last two lines ray!

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Stu Buck

Wed 28th Mar 2018 18:39

very nice tom, i especially like the lines;

who's heart I do not know,

but who I spend more time with

than anyone I've ever loved,

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Mike Bartram

Wed 28th Mar 2018 15:27

Thank you...just been to Doddy's service at The Cathederal

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Wed 28th Mar 2018 15:04

how I wish I could write like him so well and deliciously..

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<Deleted User> (18980)

Wed 28th Mar 2018 15:01

Are they one and the same person Ray?

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raypool

Wed 28th Mar 2018 13:56

Thanks Brian, duly noted. It's always worth stretching one's boundaries (ooh missus!!).

Anya, I'll take that as a compliment. You're welcome to frame it and have it mounted; show it to friends. Thanks so much!

David, Funny I have my suspicions: the Hog's Back has some wonderful views. I do keep the C word (crap) or -unt
if your prefer for special occasions, which this poem wasn't.

Appreciated ratings Alex! I suspect that poem of Larkin's was a sort of tear up the rulebook moment. It worked so well!!

Additionally thank you both for likes Col and Sobski!


Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Mar 2018 11:05

IMO, totally fabulous. It's the 'take' on the subject, 'off the cuff' so to speak, with tons of thought behind it.

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racha chafik

Wed 28th Mar 2018 01:01

very beautiful enjoyed reading it

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racha chafik

Wed 28th Mar 2018 00:56

its amazinglly wrriten marianne very beautiful

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Marianne May

Wed 28th Mar 2018 00:02

Thank you for liking my entry, "A Game". ?

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racha chafik

Tue 27th Mar 2018 22:38

its amazingly written , well described very sad i don't know what to say i like it

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Big Sal

Tue 27th Mar 2018 20:03

Nice title, very unique poem, and easy flowing so it was a good read.

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racha chafik

Tue 27th Mar 2018 18:01

thank you Margaret for your beautiful comment on my profil , i love your work btw i love how your honest and straight forward
you're like the sun bold and beautiful full of passion i can feel your energy from here

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Margret

Tue 27th Mar 2018 13:15

Love what you’re doing girl!
Xoxo -Lilly love

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Margret

Tue 27th Mar 2018 12:44

Ask me anything! I’m an open book.
-Lilly love ?

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racha chafik

Tue 27th Mar 2018 10:16

thank you big sal

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Big Sal

Tue 27th Mar 2018 01:18

Damn. That flowed really nicely. Well done on the perfect encapsulation of a very complicated series of emotions ending on a note that leaves the reader wanting more instead of simply being content with the content.

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Big Sal

Tue 27th Mar 2018 01:11

Loved the rhythm of this piece, it resonated soundly and hit like a bass.

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 22:58

I'm thinking this is about the passing on of knowledge, and that knowledge is nothing unless it is shared.

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racha chafik

Mon 26th Mar 2018 22:39

its very beautiful thank you for sharing

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Mahika

Mon 26th Mar 2018 22:12

No, I'm happy with where it ended, even if it is abrupt.

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 22:06

Surprised you managed to get this past the censor Ray. Love it!

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raypool

Mon 26th Mar 2018 19:29

boom boom Brian. He is a bit long in the tooth.

Ray

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<Deleted User> (16099)

Mon 26th Mar 2018 18:22

this a ten...

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 18:16

of course it was impossible for this person to say 'no' right?

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racha chafik

Mon 26th Mar 2018 18:13

Thank you for reading it David. Yeah it's awful . I'm better thank you

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 17:08

Ouch run far from this place never go back again

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 17:07

This is a very different side of you and I have so many questions as to why

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 16:54

You deserve a series of poems your open your honest you taste of passion and the fact that you love dick so much is inspiring LOL I really should write you

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suki spangles

Mon 26th Mar 2018 16:18

Thanks so.much Col.

This was actually a little bit of a creative writing exercise. A few years back I wrote a poem called Ephydriad Descending - Thames Ganges which was a full-octane magical realist comedy number about life around a small area of the river at night. Here, the poem looks at the same place during weekend sunrise.

You got it in one!

Cheers!
Suki

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Margret

Mon 26th Mar 2018 15:49

Thank you for writing. I appreciate your art.

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<Deleted User> (18980)

Mon 26th Mar 2018 15:29

No...but I bet he looked down in the mouth.

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 15:08

Well done Ian. I'm pleased about this as it was one I liked a lot.

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raypool

Mon 26th Mar 2018 14:49

Thanks Hugh for finding this one of mine. I actually gave a copy to my dentist! I'm pleased to say he didn't get the needle.

Ray

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Hugh

Mon 26th Mar 2018 12:57

Great poem,lets get to the root of the problem and solve dental decay and bring the bite back into our lives.

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raypool

Mon 26th Mar 2018 12:46

Thanks for reading Pat !

You don't scare easily Col. That doll persona has been overdone really; I wanted to bring out the softer side - Hollywood hijacking . My grandson was always scared of clowns though (apart from me of course). Thanks mate.

Spot on Suki. We all need our comforters - my first was a cloth rabbit from Bognor, I called him Boggy. Good thing about dolls, they never die...

Thanks for the likes, and Patricio, it's been a while!

Ray.

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Mon 26th Mar 2018 12:14

Takes me back...my youngest daughter was always bringing them home. Nit comb and hair conditioner were our weapons.

Hugh - well done for covering a topical subject, and for not basing it around a jokey ending.

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Rich

Mon 26th Mar 2018 12:11

Thanks Hazel!

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Big Sal

Mon 26th Mar 2018 02:02

Lonely as a road, nostalgic as a rose.

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Chris Bainbridge

Sun 25th Mar 2018 11:13

Thanks so much for your lovely comments.

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Chris Bainbridge

Sun 25th Mar 2018 11:11

Thanks very much Brian, I did not know that! I shall spread the postings out a bit more in future. Thanks again.

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Sun 25th Mar 2018 09:14

Chris, I like this but by posting it now did you realise that your excellent Fargate is now not on show to readers, which is a shame.

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