Fabulous gem , subtle and meaningful Rachel. I won't try to be clever in the analysis, as you have revealed such s personal comment.
Ray
Comment is about answer (blog)
Original item by nunya
"Why don't you sing, little bird, the way you used to, once?
"How can I sing? They clipped my little wings...
They clipped my little wings, they took away my voice...
They took our Constantinople.
They took our Constantinople and our Hagia Sophia.
Bitterly Mother Mary cries."
That's what it says.
For what it's worth I believe in peace and humanity above all, even though I am very much familiar with everything you so vividly painted in your poignant strong, poem dear John!
Thank you?
Mae
Comment is about Janissary (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
The word heart bears repetition as its so universal in its appeal Jennifer. This works well, and reveals the power of sympathy.
Homelessness is akin to statelessness, and they often combine forces. There are some who shrug off this tragedy citing social care as a palliative. It is certainly an embarrassment to all of us, as we might feel threatened by the gulf it presents us with.
Ray
Comment is about Hopeless (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
I feel that your work is becoming quietly and confidently better, showing us some real wisdom in simple things and events.
I think I'm falling....
From Ray to D. K.
Comment is about The Boy In Him (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Listen to the music Vautlaw, it is a beautiful Greek lament for the fall of Konstantinopoulos in 1453.The taking of Constantinople is still celebrated by the Turks on the 29th May every year. Memory is long. Thanks for reading and commenting. John
Comment is about Janissary (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Wow! Heartbreaking details. Next level storytelling in just a few words. Feels like it should be a best selling book or movie. Perhaps then justice would prevail and suffering not be in vain. Thanks for sharing John. ?
Comment is about Janissary (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Thanks Mae. My gran used to say: "don't run yourself down John, the rest of the world will do that for you!"
Comment is about FIELD THEORY (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Do I detect some questions of creation existence and cosmogony dear John?
Lovely piece, thank you for it ?
Mae
Comment is about SHADOWLAND (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Complex and I have to say out of my league, understanding-wise but I loved it ?
You're a brilliant man John E Mark's!
Sincerely?
Mae
Comment is about FIELD THEORY (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
What Rachel said. Raw and stripped of embellishments. True.
I have enjoyed your work, so original.
Thank you Mila?
Mae
Comment is about orchids (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
"I have not felt any pain, yet continously i burn at the stake." Powerful stuff! Heart is right in everything she so eloquently said.
Thank you?
Mae
Comment is about maybe i bloomed (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
Thanks so much Adam. I appreciate the comments. I know that the ending is not as epic as it could be. I wrote it for a young man who once said that he would sell his soul to make it in the music business.
I like to think that the story is not complete as he still has some growing up to do. I will definitely revisit this one.
Comment is about Don't Sell your Soul (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
And you are heard dear Mila.?I Love your writing!
Thank you ?
Mae
Comment is about fearless (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
Outstanding, Mila!
Thank you for this ?
Mae
Comment is about women contain multitudes (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
Thank you Steve! ?Appreciate it!
Mae
Comment is about To Forgive Oneself (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
love is deeply painful and yet like gravity, there is little escape. always love your words, always.
and guilt... we carry it with us, on one shoulder and shame on the other.
Comment is about fearless (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
a true piece of raw poetry... it's all i want. rawness. thank you Rachel.
Comment is about orchids (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
Mona, thank you very much for your kind words
Comment is about Remember (blog)
Original item by Jeannot
Beautifully rendered and heart tugging one..
Comment is about Remember (blog)
Original item by Jeannot
Hi Graham. Know the feeling, I agree and sincerely sympathize. Aside from that, truly beautiful poem!
Thank you?
Mae
Comment is about Most Maligned (blog)
Original item by Graham Parker and his musings
Yes that sounds about right! First you pass the Adriatic then the Ionian then the Aegean! I sound like a GPS! Haha!
Sounds like a nice trip anyway?
Mae
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
A devastating truth. I think "heartstrings" is a very real notion, and hence a word. And your poem does touch them.
Thank you ?
Mae
Comment is about Hopeless (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
haha i'm getting it - it was from France to Italy to Greece to Turkey. All seas are beautiful. Tommy
Comment is about Mae Foreman (poet profile)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Hi Jason
Thanks for your lovely note on 'Helicoid' - appreciate that ?
Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Brutal deeds invariably come from brutish minds, with an inability to
understand how they can cause a "coming together" of others to
oppose the nihilism their deeds represent. Well captured in these
lines. Hope springs eternal - as the saying goes.
Comment is about Divided City, Divided Land? (blog)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Interesting stuff, to be sure. I have a copy of "Usage And Abusage - A Guide To Good English" by Eric Fowler which first appeared in
the United States in 1942. In his Forward, the author mentions -
"To be fit for American publication, Professor W. Cabell Green
extensively annotated the work". On a purely personal level, I was
privileged to know the late William Benzie, author of a biography
about the founder of the Oxford English Dictionary. It intrigued me
that an Aberdonian living and teaching In Canada should write such
a work. I suppose that such a flexible language as English will
always be a subject for discussion - and long may it be so.
Comment is about On Perusing a Dictionary of Modern English Usage as It Pertains to Suffering (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
D.knape..that's very cryptic ???
Comment is about Phils Words (poet profile)
Original item by Phils Words
Hey Tommy. Thanks for stopping by at my profile! If it was the Adriatic Sea you crossed then you passed from Italy to Greece and it wasn't the Aegean but The Ionian Sea. The South Mediterranean is my home and I find it ravishing! But I don't think it's just I that feels this way. I guess it's no wonder it took you breath!
Thanks Tommy ?
Mae
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Eh? Broke down or just broke?
More like sometimes dazed...often confused! ?
Comment is about d.knape (poet profile)
Original item by d.knape
I once sailed across the Adriatic from Greece to Turkey (or was it from Italy to Greece?)
at dawn - The sun inches above the Islands in the mist and a glass-like sea. It was the most transforming vision that I have...shh I do go on
ps I grind my own beans.
tc
pps or was it the Aegean?
Comment is about Mae Foreman (poet profile)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Cheers Stu for your post re 'Knock-Knock' I agree! (chuckle) ? Tommy ...(have I already responded to you to my post earlier or...hang on I'm going to lie ((or is it lye?)) down...)
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thank you Jason for reading and taking the time to comment
Comment is about Remember (blog)
Original item by Jeannot
Missed this one earlier - unfortunately too true. Like the two social workers who came across a brutally murdered corpse, and said -'the person who did this really needs help'! Here most of the judges are leftwing, and people who shot and injured or unintentionally killed violent robbers, usually from Eastern Europe, who broke into their homes or premises risked having to pay damages to the robbers' families, and being accused of murder. I don't want Europe to become like the US, where it seems to be normal to keep an arsenal at home, but one has a right to defend oneself and family, and in an emergency situation one doesn't stop to think.Now they have changed the law.
Jennifer
Comment is about A knife changing experience (blog)
Original item by hugh
Thanks Jason and Martin! The homeless really touch my heartstrings (if that word exists!), especially in the winter. You feel guilty about having a warm comfortable home to return to.
Jennifer
Comment is about Hopeless (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
elPintor
Thu 25th Apr 2019 10:50
Hi Jason,
I was writing this and was reminded of a song I used sing to my son when he was an infant...
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=m8kQs91fj-w
He used to look up at me with darling sleepy eyes--so peaceful and sweet.
I knew without a doubt from the day I set eyes on him that love shows its truest forms in ways Hallmark will never be deep enough to express
Thanks-- glad it moved you to respond )
Rachel
Comment is about answer (blog)
Original item by nunya
Thanks, Steve.
I can’t remember why I made the link between NF and Fanlight Fanny. (It was 2014, I think). Though I’ve always thought it is a cracking tune.
Although I remain a convinced Remainer, you might be aware that I snipe in any direction, Left, Right, Leave, Remain. I have to say that this seems to gall my chums on the Left disproportionately who seem to feel that somehow their icons should be immune.
“Respect” as da yoof, say.
Comment is about NIGEL FARAGE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
The tune existed, Steve.. I pinched it..So it was words onto tune.
It is George Formby’s “Fanlight Fanny”, which contains one of the greatest lines of poetry ever written,
“She’s a peach but understand
She’s called a peach because she’s always canned;”.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=5d4mY5W-FcE
I’m delighted I was wrong too although I was part-right about needing the away goal (3, in fact). In truth, the two games at the Etihad showed they were always one goal better than us.
Comment is about NIGEL FARAGE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Really, very touching. Beautifully put.
J.
Comment is about Remember (blog)
Original item by Jeannot
Thanks for the comment. Of course, it's a little more complicated than that. ? http://www.bbc.com/culture/story/20180207-how-americans-preserved-british-english
Comment is about On Perusing a Dictionary of Modern English Usage as It Pertains to Suffering (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
Thu 25th Apr 2019 00:41
are you broke down
or
just Broke?
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thu 25th Apr 2019 00:09
pest control eh?
a good career for any budding poet.
all poets need backup
because there is no money in Poetry
it's not a true job
more like an Obsession..
Comment is about Phils Words (poet profile)
Original item by Phils Words
Pontins in Prestatyn in the 70's was my first holiday camp experience. Still not sure if the barbed wire on the perimeter fence was to keep unwanted visitors out or to keep the paying guests in?
Comment is about Butlins Filey 1960 something. (blog)
Original item by mentalelf. Philk.
We need more humour in poetry. Thanks for sharing John?
Comment is about ME FIRSTEST POEMS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
It was Football for me
jumpers for goal posts
We were are own referee
There was no offside
Goal celebrations where a joyish fist pump nothing fancy
And when we lost
It was time for tea
Taking the ball
Which of course belonged to me
Comment is about Sunday Afternoon (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thanks for reading and the great comments on my first poem chaps ?
Comment is about A turkey in sheep's clothing (blog)
Original item by Wayne McLellan
That's why I tend to start with an ending and work backwards (if that makes sense) ?
Comment is about Broke-Down Poem (blog)
Original item by d.knape
raypool
Thu 25th Apr 2019 22:42
Thanks for commenting Steve. An astute point you raise. His performance itself was often a parody of a stage acting technique , and he could certainly rely on it for effect. I hate to use the word Hammy, but today many would think it. There were many earlier exponents who went over the top . We should enjoy it the way we enjoy On the Buses and the Carry On films for being museum pieces. (with reservations).
Thank you Dorothy, you have picked up on my own florid imitation of his style, so I feel though the poem didn't garner much of a following here, your comment bolsters my aims very nicely!
Thanks for looking in, Jon.
Ray
Comment is about ON VINCENT PRICE (blog)
Original item by ray pool