This is dark Ana, but deeply expressive. I hope you're speaking figuratively though, rather than an, "End," this would seem like a good beginning. I hope you will share more with us.
J. x
Comment is about Ending (blog)
Original item by Ana Dobrev
Thanks very much to everyone who liked this.
Comment is about Colour - Black (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 23rd Apr 2019 23:52
Like it Mark. It's gorra great rhythm and oi'll give it five.
What are the two lines at the end...are they significant?
Comment is about WITHIN LIES THE SIN (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Poetry understands
the mirror,
unanswered calls,
stumbles, falls.
Tour de force: the more animated the verse, the greater the impact.
Well-penned!
J
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is 'Poetry Understands' by Vautaw (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Beautiful, Mae. Every word, but especially:
"...may my love be your iron-wrought, silver-gilded impenetrable shield!"
Comment is about Starchild (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Pop the cork ! Pop the cork !
Comment is about And the Mouse Said... (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Hi Ian, thanks for your permission to share - it's up on my blog now.
https://francesmacaulayforde.wordpress.com/2019/04/23/monday-morning-9am/
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Comment is about Monday Morning - 9AM (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thank you Heart and Carbon Quill! I'm glad you both like it!?
Mae
Comment is about Bleak Era (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Thank you Heart! Your support is priceless?
Mae
Comment is about In a Dream (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Highly effective Jon. I like that you havn't strayed into good and evil, the usual suspects, but stayed into defined limits.
Ray
Comment is about Colour - Black (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
If this refers to stand up comedy then probably about the same as the walk to the scaffold. If it refers to poetry - I can only speak from experience. First time aged 70 for me, hiding behind an impression of Alan Bennett which helped, and I think that covers your line about disguise! There's a lot to discuss and you have covered it so well in such a short poem. You might come off thinking "there's nothing like a good audience, and this is nothing like a good audience." I am a pianist and have worked for decades with comics and singers- but it's so different when your out front!
Nice one Trevor.
Comment is about POETRY NIGHT (blog)
Original item by trevor homer
A drip feed of wisdom and understanding of how poetry can encompass so much of life Vautaw. Common ground for us all who attempt this crazy art and recognize simple truths when we see them. Congratulations for a top slot!
Ray
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is 'Poetry Understands' by Vautaw (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Hi Rachel. I appreciate your feedback as always. The TV aerials has had a thumbs up from others too - just an idea I had. The mercy of strangeness was something I was pleased with especially. Thank you.
Keith, the experience you describe and highlighted in the poem are common enough, but nevertheless are poignant. A story by George Orwell illustrates it better than I can: "Keep the Aspidistra Flying." Rather depressing really. In that stanza I was trying to depict smugness. Thanks a lot.
Thanks for stopping by Martin and adding your as ever appreciative thoughts.
Hi David, funny you mentioning the cormorant. I sought out the most appropriate image with the idea of making the theme bird watching but lost that plot quickly on account of lack of knowledge. Sometimes I change tack completely. Regarding the wider issue, there has been a correlation between upheaval from an area into an alien environment and high rates of heart disease, due to trying to adapt. Your point is obviously highly significant on an emotion level. The nearest equivalent I can envisage here is the erosion of cliffs and the consequent destruction of buildings. Or sinkholes of course! Thanks mate.
Thanks all for the additional likes -Steve, Philip, Des and Marie.
Stu, you imp you! Ironically I just bought online The Meaning of LIfe and was struck by the mention of the school cormorant. Wonderfully metaphorical in that world of crow like cloaks and stagnant teaching policies. A great film - though some of the sketches I found this time round a bit tee hee wizard prang. Still gold though.
Thanks everybody - make my day!
Comment is about FORGOTTEN DREAMS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Really like this Jon, a real pleasure to read out loud.
J.
Comment is about Colour - Black (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
You'll end up a Lion's scoff/
some ruddy leopard tries to eat her/
getting chewed on every day”
actually laughing out loud here - great comic lines ?
Comment is about Nature's Banquet (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thanks for your note on The Ties That Bind, Keith. Wrote itself really quickly, funnily enough ?
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks for your note on The Ties That Bind, Greg. Wrote itself really quickly, funnily enough ?
Deffo going in the next collection! And in the set, soon as I get it learned!
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks for your note on The Ties That Bind, Martin. Wrote itself really quickly, funnily enough ?
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
I couldn't do it so well done you. I did have a stinking hangover mind you, and it was too hot to stay in!
Comment is about In Tune (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Halfway up the ducks ? Great line.
Comment is about Floodplain (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Hehe ? Made me chuckle this one ?
Comment is about Rain In Spain (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Indeed it does; indeed it does. Nice one, Trevor
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is 'Poetry Understands' by Vautaw (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Powerful if not prophetic language which gives the reader a glimpse of the end times.
" I walked in a desolate gallery of unknown art".such a fabulous expression of where the world might find itself.
This poem has an almost unique quality and I salute your writing of it.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about End of the World (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
Sorry for the delay in replying - I blame a glorious weekend! ?
Thanks so much everyone, and Greg - for sure. It's going into the set soon as I can learn it too.
Bang on Trev!
Comment is about The Ties That Bind (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
elPintor
Tue 23rd Apr 2019 08:46
I am a stranger in one of the most densely populated cities in the world. But, maybe everyone is a stranger here.
Sometimes I'm not sure how much the language barrier interferes with perspective. As far as I can tell, it's just like I've heard--people are all the same. And, besides, how far inside can words really get us anyhow?
I appreciate all your kind comments.
Rachel
Comment is about transitions (blog)
Original item by nunya
As you have clearly stated poetry serves so many different people in some many different ways and that is the beauty and the nature of this art form.
wonderfully said and congratulations for POTW
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is 'Poetry Understands' by Vautaw (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
A 50p for Brexit ! Things are looking up
Comment is about The Royal Mint rides again! (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
Tue 23rd Apr 2019 07:00
Hi Peter, thanks for your comments very much appreciate. I would like to thank everyone that liked my poem, much appreciated.
All the best des
Comment is about Mind (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Keith,
Beautifully written and such serenity reflected in the lines.. Really liked this..
Comment is about A Journey Forward (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Very beautiful expression and poignant imagery... Excellent.
Mona
Comment is about End of the World (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
You really have outdone yourself here. So beautiful. I'm enthralled.
Comment is about Starchild (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
This is incredibly woven and so deep. I do love the melancholy.
Comment is about In a Dream (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
I like this very very much. Desolate landscape imagery but personal. Very beautiful.
Comment is about Bleak Era (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
<Deleted User> (19708)
Tue 23rd Apr 2019 01:36
Mae,
This is good poetry. Well done!
CQ
Comment is about Bleak Era (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
aye up Stu - thanks for commenting on 'Monday Morning - 9AM' glad to say I've left all that corporate crap behind - so writing that from a safe distanmce. Don't miss those early morning meetings at all - or the folk depicted in this poem ?
Cheers
Ian
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
thanks for the kind comments on 'Monday Morning -9AM' Jason - glad you liked it Mate
Ian
Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thank you very much, CQ. I confess, all comes from reading Russian apocalypse literature.
Comment is about End of the World (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
<Deleted User> (19708)
Mon 22nd Apr 2019 23:19
The visual is concrete, the emotion is overwhelming. Well done!
CQ
Comment is about End of the World (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
such fond memories so well summed up here Stu. I can remember doing such a thing myself at a certain idiot young age.
Nice one
Comment is about think back/pink black (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
So incredibly beautiful. I treasure your words and cherish the mood. You have the ability to invoke so much. Truly incredible.
Comment is about Where Twilight Sleeps (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Beautiful, truly stunning analogy of life. Something truly exquisite about the door symbolism that takes a unique and heartfelt perspective. Grounding and yet powerfully whimsical.
Comment is about The Door Of Naked Souls (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
thanks for all your kind words
i'm glad this resonated with you
its all i could ever ask!
(thats what i drink brian and i assumed i was the only one!)
Comment is about think back/pink black (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Great poem and great choice for PoTW.
Poetry is always there for us no matter what trying places we might find ourselves traveling though.
Thanks for sharing. Tx
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is 'Poetry Understands' by Vautaw (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Mae Foreman
Wed 24th Apr 2019 09:50
Thank you Frances! Actually that last line was the quintessential of the piece. I had that phrase in my mind and I wove the poem around it!
Thank you for getting my message?
Mae
Comment is about Starchild (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman