Very funny.
Cx

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Original item by Isobel

seen more fat on a chip...
Nice to hear from you again
Great read
GusX

Comment is about Back Fat (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

Ha Mia, this is great! Dont even try and exercise to get rif of back fat, nothing NOTHING works. Trust me I tried. Love the poem, so true and real! Real life can be very funny!

Comment is about Back Fat (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

This is really funny!
You sometimes accept a lot of quirky things in relationships... and love is blind ; )

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Original item by Mia Darlone

A very poignant poem and so much truth in it. With my ex I was always Izz until things went sour and then I became Isobel and I just hated the thin raspy way he used to say it. I always used his Christian name (which was short enough) until things soured and then I just called him bastard...

Comment is about Pet Name Friends (blog)

The KaRma Sutra, though... wouldn't that be something? I like the book for box. Was it a box room you recall? What about the devil's picture book? And what is your fascination with evil? You make it sound (con)sumptuous. Just wondering.... Strange how a room from childhood ends up relocated in the mind. Still unsure about the lunging timelines/tenses. How did you manage to signal these in the original book? You didn't do an Orlando or a Wasp Factory? And how different is the idea in poetry? I'm fascinated by ideas that seem to flit from medium to medium, each time altered or undermined. And why did you use the word 'liken'? Excuse interrogation. Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition.

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

I had another sample of this just now, this time in audio! so much more powerful. Slowed things down and it was easy to imagine the wait for news from the sea almost (unending)

Winstop

Comment is about lifelines (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Awash with wonderful momentum -- how beautiful an analogy for an affair that's now water under the bridge. Exotic mixer tap almost sounds like one of those ads that run at the back of The Stage for dancers for middle east show contracts. And thank you for your overwhelmingly generous comment. I write unborn cartoons.

Comment is about Mixer Tap Madness (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thanx Winston
For your comments re Pandora's Box... you look well on the narrow boat... see you soon.
Gus

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Time stands still in parts of this...I liked the respect of a traditional relationship with the elements and the sea and the sense of destiny you have managed to get accross

Win

Comment is about lifelines (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Loretta

Great stuff, concise... great combinations of images which fit together nicely

Win

Comment is about private hive (blog)

Hi Alan, This is great! Its the same way here.They lie and get elected, then do all they can to line their own pockets. Here they give themselves pay raises, they get better health care, they get security for life, pay for life, even if just in office for one term.They make laws that help them, and not us.They change the form of government, from a republic to a democracy and make it seem like to the average dork that its been that way all along. Love it, they are pirates ! Wonder what will become of them in time?

Comment is about Deep Pocket Parliamentary Shanty (A song for modern day pirates) (blog)

Original item by Alan McKean

Hi Pete,
Liked this one muchly. Not so much political as consumerist; a shout for individuality and choice, for the voice of the citizen being heard over the roar of commercial interest. Hate KFC - the cheapeast and cruellest methods to rear the most tasteless and un-nutritious food imaginable - so much so it has to be coated in chemicals to make it even remotely palatable (and addictive.) Reads well, nice one.
Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Supersize (blog)

Hi Jeffarama,
Reading this was like the proverbial two fingers down the back of the throat - in that it brought everything back! As a sometime 80's DJ myself, I can easily recall all that you have shoehorned into this short and sweet "sepia" cameo of that particular era - and what fun it was too!
Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Manchester Ritz (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

I agree with your stance on humour!
At first I thought Andy had been messin with the plumbing!

Fun read, great for a pub read too! It will wake em up!!!

Well done

Comment is about Mixer Tap Madness (blog)

Original item by Isobel

that is a relief , when i read the first line of your comment , i thought you had written it ABOUT andy n :) yes i like this short one from you , and yes its funny ,

Comment is about Mixer Tap Madness (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thanx Jeff

Re comments on 'Jennifer'... I do write a lot of poetry with hidden meaning... But wouldn't be great to be that young again... and know what we know now... Your Manky RitzGreat ..great read.... didn't know you wore mini skirts...
Gus

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

yes yes , lovely new picture :)

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Like the new picture. I'm going to Wigan on 14th - will you be going? Hope you're well.
Cx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

This poem was inspired by Andy n (not some arse hole who wouldn't know a heart beat from a TV programme). I enjoyed reading Andy's '3xNew Short Poems' and thought I'd experiment with some minimalist poetry myself. I must say there's a lot to be said for it - I knocked this out in no time! I tried to inject some humour in there cos I find that helps in most situations. If anything ever came out of Pandora's box, it should have been humour...

Comment is about Mixer Tap Madness (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Well said, in todays world it beggars belief how such practices go on in some countries and religions, when the perpetrators do whatever they want, I don't know how they sleep at night, well written, Jeff

Comment is about In Praise Of The Glorious House Of Saud (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Sorry Isobel I am not ready for a last word on this yet.

It is true that Julian has upstaged Alex by his clever miscehievousness. However, Julian's piece does not stand alone. It needs Alex's poem to work so let us give credit to Alex for that.

Although I am an atheist I am interested in religion. I too go to churches, not to pray, but to appreciate the beauty and craftmanship displayed there.

In many cases there is ambiguity in the imagery. Although claims are made to depiction of unreal things such as human form god, virgin mother, ascendance into a heaven, etc., other things can be drawn from them than what they purport.

These two poems bring about a very strong linkage of the sacred and profane. That is the woman who belongs outside the church (profane) having attributes in common with the sacred.

Julian has changed very much my first impressions of Alex's poem. With his clever punning, use of 'figurative' to presage the introduction of his fig metaphor and at the same time take us inside the woman as well as inside the clothing and inside the church from the woman outside are all related to conversion in the Pauline sense.

Paul came from being an outside oppressor of the church to an inside creator of the fundamental elements of christianity such as the resurrection.

I am probably taking this much too far, but the use of Damask, being a silk weave of a single warp thread with a single weft, as a pun on the conversion of Paul on the road to Damascus speaks to me of a weaving of the threads of sacred and profane (inside and outside the temple or church) and the weaving of images of idealised purity with the realities of desire and gratification displayed by the spread legs and smoking.

I have changed my views on Alex's poem several times. I still think that the title sits oddly with the poem and that it handles its subject rather superficially. Julian's piece has very obviously sent me off on a whole deeper journey which begins with the Smith poem, but introduces so much more.

I feel grateful to both of them. The relationship of the church to the rest of the world has many complex layers. What Julian did was a little cheeky, but it developed so many layers which were not probed in the first piece.

Comment is about On a theme of Apollinaire (article)

Hi Seamus, great stuff this and enjoyed it the other week, powerful stuff well done, Jeff

Comment is about Dead Eyes (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Great stuff Pete and well performed, cheers Jeff

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Thanks:)

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

'still got the barb in' = the Bee sting barb is still stuck in skin even long after lover left.

Ain't that the truth!
Cx

Comment is about private hive (blog)

Not usually a great fan of special effects, but it sort of works on this one - sort of like those diembodied, tannoy voices you can imagine coming from armoured vehicles warning you to stay in your home, or some such. The only thing with special effects, I think you have to be a little more precise with your diction to counteract the distorting effect, and I'm not sure your recording levels are set absolutely right for you.
On a performance note - beware starting the first 'note' of your sentence higher and letting your voice trail away to the end of the sentence - we all do it, but it does tend to lose words like that and give a slightly 'worthy' tone to your performance - better to let the words speak for themselves, particularly with such an emotive piece as this.
Cx

Comment is about Liberation (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thank you, now I just need to be able to recite it from memory without tripping over my tongue!

Comment is about Powerful Politics (blog)

Original item by Martin Nelson

I could fine tune it, but before i do any fine tuning, just wanted to run this by you with some vocals with effects, see what you think. Im open : )

Comment is about Liberation (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Je suis en train de pleurer... beaucoup d'émotion...
beaucoup de tristesse... ça m'a beaucoup touché...

Comment is about The ingredient’s for the disturbed (blog)

Enjoyed hearing this at Wigan. Very funny, very now as well as then - you just need some silver platform boots to complete the picture.
Izz x

Comment is about Manchester Ritz (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

an emotive poem . laura you have your moments :) x

Comment is about Pet Name Friends (blog)

the twist works well, chuck at the end off it.. if i am honest i think the piece is a little bit too long.. i think it would probably have twice as much impact if you trimmed it a bit, but good stuff thou!

Comment is about The Lying Woman (blog)

Original item by Lydia

i love this piece, jeff.. i went to there a bit when i was younger.. perhaps someday i'll write a poem about my experiences there, although it'll be racey probably give some of the admin a heart attack if they checked it.. lol

Comment is about Manchester Ritz (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

short but beauitful..

Comment is about Pet Name Friends (blog)

Love this... especially first and last verses.

Comment is about (blog)

Grand eloquence: emotional punch. You pitch 'em hard, Ms de Mar, and they hit the mark.

Comment is about Pet Name Friends (blog)

Awww... so true...

Comment is about Pet Name Friends (blog)

Groovy, funny, riotous and vivid -- wishing you many more inspirational nights out!

Comment is about Manchester Ritz (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

I connect especially with these lines:

'as it all pours out
alongside
someone special
in which to share'


'we could take turns
crying
just as long as we share
something like this
tenderness
make special memories
no matter what the pain.'

Comment is about thats what tears are for (blog)

Love the words grabbing you like white noise: this piece is so exuberant it flies off the screen. Long live your freedom in poetry!

Comment is about POETRY FOUND ME..(short poem) (blog)

Something Kipling-esque and Walter De La Mare-y and even Longfellowish here in rhythm, cadence and observation. It's a piece that also echoes the agitation and energy of Soho. Very vibrant indeed!

Comment is about Memories and Dreams of Soho (blog)

Original item by Alain English

Well done.


This sparked a wave of interest in poetry again.
Lots of talk on the radio.
Once again performance poetry was missed out.

Comment is about Carol Ann Duffy - Poet Laureate (article)

lid + prized = Proud to keep some thoughts special just for someone.

OR opened the lid on secret thoughts, and found that they were shallow/empty in the light of day not that worrying after all.

'still got the barb in' = the Bee sting barb is still stuck in skin even long after lover left.


thanks Mox n Francine

Comment is about private hive (blog)

Is the answer mead, Ms de Mar? Love the 'pop.. shocked...shopped...stripped...barb' dot to dot sense and sensuousness links. And the mind being stolen like honey. Fabulosa!

Comment is about private hive (blog)

I like this... although please explain these lines:

'if the lid I prized for you'
'still got the barb in.'

Comment is about private hive (blog)

I'm a woman - so can I have the last say? I think we would all agree that this is a good, well balanced poem that has worked because it prompted enough discussion. It is probably not the poem to eclipse all others for the month of April but there you go. Being chosen poet of the month must be like being given a poisoned chalice. Who on earth would want to wade through hundreds of profiles and blogs? Much as I like poetry, one can overdose. Even when you've chosen, you'll never please all and it's probably only the malcontents who bother to comment. The ones who agree are too busy writing their own poems, or maybe they are off exploring churches, or having a fag or sitting somewhere more interesting with their legs wide open.... mmm on that note...

Comment is about On a theme of Apollinaire (article)

Moi aussi Shane...
I am still as free as can be ; )

Comment is about POETRY FOUND ME..(short poem) (blog)

This is adorably funny...
and flows well with the rhyming too : )

Comment is about Manchester Ritz (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

I disagree with myself.
I keep reading it back trying to find something I'm missing.

I think I'm lacking in literary critique.
I just don't understand the religious references as religious history bores me chronic.I do love churches and like Nabilya I will also walk in sit, pray and absorb, my own spirit is always on a different path. The girl on the bench outside, well smoking cigarettes and open legs, I see that Alex may be putting these 2 images in comparison, the girls personal religion whether atheist or not, perhaps she is sending messages deliberate in her body language...you could extrapolate all of this........the very fact that the poem has me thinking means that it has worked..is this like one of those songs that grows or?

my opinion of the poem keeps fluxing.

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