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The chalice of life

I have drunk from the chalice of life

Look into my eyes

A portal of lies

Dare you walk through?

Innocence is bliss

Ignorance’s kiss is what we need without it!

 

The blind lead the blind but you say you don’t mind

I have seen eternity

Balls of fire burning bright

In the sky of never ending darkness and chaos

You say God created this

What I say this is God and we are his or her children

Depending on the perspective you have.

We are the maintance the workers the guardians of this earth

and the body of the universe.

But as we try to understand ourselves we can only understand that we are

creation or destruction at one time or another

from brothers to woman lovers

we are guilty of love and its opposites.

We are light and love but we are also destruction and dark corruption

we give our lives but what part of us survives?

Genetic heritage or concepts and ideas?

For concepts never die but are endlessly recycled, praised and then reviled

While all the while we become no wiser we stay like children

Endlessly searching for the portal to become the immortal.

◄ We could be one!

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Jeff Dawson

Sat 13th Jun 2009 14:02

Excellent Dan, very well written

While all the while we become no wiser we stay like children
Endlessly searching for the portal to become the immortal

fantastic and intrgueing, think its one of your best works yet mate, cheers Jeff

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Steve Regan

Mon 1st Jun 2009 12:58

It's good to go for the big themes, sometimes, so well done.

It's a neat trick in a mystic poem to avoid sounding too naively New Age, and I think you've managed it (though what do I know; I'm very conservative and not at all democratic in my religious views!)

There's an obvious typo near the start of these lines, Daniel ....

"We are the maintance the workers the guardians of this earth

and the body of the universe."

And personally, I feel poetry of this sort (eg the lines above) needs punctuation, to help it flow, to aid comprehension etc.

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winston plowes

Sun 31st May 2009 22:14

Hi Daniel. The middle section of this reminds me of one of my favourite poems/poets.What do you think?

I have seen eternity
Balls of fire burning bright
In the sky of never ending darkness and chaos
You say God created this


Henry Vaughan (The World)

I saw Eternity the other night
Like a great Ring of pure and endless light
All calm as it was bright.
... Driven by the spheres,
Like a vast shadow moved, in which the world
And all her train were hurled

enjoyed your poem keep posting

Win

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