Like this Neil, there again I am a bit of a romantic.
Bernie

Comment is about Et Vera Incessu Patuit Dea* (blog)

Original item by Neil West

Once again Togher you hit the spot.As your poetry is suited to 'the page' the word 'stationary', in this context, is incorrect. Unless... it's a deliberate use?

Otherwise it's the other spelling 'stationery' - with an 'e'. I try to remember this by thinking that the 'e' represents 'envelopes'. Notwithstanding this minor infringement - I can already see this sitting inside another great collection.

Comment is about The Waiting (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Can't say enough ... wonderful, wonderful

Gus

Comment is about The Waiting (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Wank


come...

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Good Morning AE
A tale told a thousand times... this so illustrative... liken to a ornate victorian landscape painting, superb detail and imagery... well done , superb.
Gus

Comment is about Beyond the Equinox (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

er nice one
love poems containing the word verdant

Comment is about Beyond the Equinox (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I stood by the barbed fencing of one many years ago Dave, as a teenager, the silence was eerie and disturbing.

Comment is about Reign Of Terror (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Interesting. I can't say that I like it. A little bare and stark for my own personal taste. However, that does not mean that I do not appreciate it. From a totally subjective viewpoint it epitomises the frustration and insecurities that a peron has when trying to write about themselves. For some reason we are lost for words and for some insane reason we feel that we have to get it just right. For the fear of not being liked. I can associate with that. So maybe I do like it after all.

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

all comments are welcome............

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Jane, thank you for your positive comments, it means a lot, and there is a happy outcome, I'll post it soon (I'm practising suspense!). I'll also be better equipped for the school run now thanks to you!

Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)

Original item by jane wilcock

Thanks for your support with WOLOP Jeff. The only problem will be wading our way through the very many blogs to choose a winner. I think it should be a more democratic competition though. A lot depends on how many people bother.... Look forward to seeing you at Tudor on Saturday. Izz xx

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Nicky, thanks again for your lovely comments.
I enjoy the fact that you read and see something differently to some others although their comments are no less valued. :-)

I went to see a medium once who told me there was two children for me. Then he saw my face and said ''but that can be avoided.'' :-)
At the end of the day whatever we say is only ever accurate at the moment of the reading. People make their own choices when the given scenarios come about. It's often only then it is realized that the medium was right and the reading valid. It's the outcome which matters and is often blamed on the medium when it isn't what the recipient expected by way of interpretation. Any medium can only interpret an image as they see it. Pretty much like interpreting a poem one doesn't understand or relate to in any way shape or form. Sometimes it takes a little discussion between the medium and sitter to get it absolutely spot on just as a discussion between poet and reader creates a clearer understanding of a poem.
Occasionally a medium is naturally intuitive and intuitives just know. They don't need to be told anything to know they are making a connection with the sitter and can even produce astounding messages when answering a question asked by the sitter.
Hope this explains it a little but i can't explain any more about it here because it is a poetry site so if you wish to chat more about it you can email me any time. I promise i won't try to foretell your future. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Nicky Burrows (poet profile)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

John I don't really know why I like this. I like the idea of being jealous of laughter and throwing ink at the moon too. Really good work. The last four lines are superb.

Comment is about The Waiting (blog)

Original item by John Togher

This is in no way meant to be detrimental, but am I the only one who is hearing a Hiawatha tune when reading this. It is very elegantly written piece.

Comment is about Et Vera Incessu Patuit Dea* (blog)

Original item by Neil West

Thanks Mate, practice makes perfect !!!!! lol
Bernie

Comment is about It happened one night 2 (blog)

Glad you Liked it Cynthia.
Bernie

Comment is about It happened one night 2 (blog)

Thanks Antonionioni for your comments.
Bernie

Comment is about Curtains (blog)

Thanks Cynthia for your comments.
Bernie

Comment is about Curtains (blog)

Thanks Cynthia for your comments on "curtains and it happened one night"
Bernie

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is beautiful, i have to keep re-reading it because theres so much to take in.

Jessie

Comment is about Et Vera Incessu Patuit Dea* (blog)

Original item by Neil West

Hi Neil, I was in the Brit Army for 22yrs and then worked in International Aid for ten years, so I worked in a lot of conflict/post conflict and disaster striken area's, so that is where quite a lot of the stuff I write comes from.
Cheers Mate.
Bernie

Comment is about Neil West (poet profile)

Original item by Neil West

Hi Isobel, thank you for all your comments on my poems, you made me realise i might need to try my hand at writing a happy poem! I really like your poem 'Words'

Jessie x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

this is lovely, real passion and romance, great.

Comment is about Et Vera Incessu Patuit Dea* (blog)

Original item by Neil West

Hi John. I enjoyed 'The Waiting' very much, I can tell you're a proper poet, it reminded me of when I tried to read Ulysses (a bit of it anyway).

Comment is about John Togher (poet profile)

Original item by John Togher

Hi Nicky, it was kind of you to tell me more about your interests, I think we must come from similar backgrounds and experiences (Catholic upbringing, interest in Romanticism, teaching career), even the four kids! My brain feels like it's coming back to life again after ten years of CBBC!!! I feel a poem coming on where I'll tell you what the bloody story in Balamory is so you don't need to keep asking (ha ha).

Comment is about Nicky Burrows (poet profile)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

This is beautiful. I begin to feel quite dreamy as i read it.

Comment is about Porous (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

and he never even noticed you were looking at the stars...
i agree with Steve..excellent Janet..

Comment is about No Title. (blog)

Hi Cynthia, thank you for your comment on HebDeb, I'm more suprised you thought it was poetry because it is real, I am looking for a place to stay In Hebden. I'm not yet homeless unless he indoors gets finally tired of my manychangingmoods and random ramblings and says Oi, enough, get thee gone silly woman, but until I find somewhere down here I have a lot of rail travel ahead of me. I saw a couple of nice places today..but so hilly..but that's Heb, beautiful but hilly..thanks again, debz x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Excellent - ideas strung together with brilliant imagery, and joined coherently enough to follow like heartbeats to a climax.

Comment is about The End of the Affair (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Really good, Emily. I always look for your work. You never disappoint.
One small (very small) suggestion: I would leave out the tag end 'you see'. It lengthens the line by two syllables, and the idea itself is totally understood in the concept of 'signs'. I think it jerks your flow unnecessarily. But that's me.

Comment is about you are now entering wales (blog)

Well said! ( that last comment you made that is ).

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Hi john,

Studied with you for a year and the first time I have heard the term 'toheresque' I have some comments on your poem, but need to look over it again.

Hope you are well.

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

All assumptions are not wrong; that's the great thing about reading poetry.
If the poem works for you (the reader) based on an assumption and you enjoy the poem, that's great. I don't think authorial intent is the most important element of reading poetry; it can spoil it if anything.

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Comments crossed John, thanks for your reply but i won't remove my comment. It's a common theme on here to believe what the poet writes is based on someone known to them. Yours demonstrates nicely how wrong we can be when we make assumptions.

Janet.x

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Ah Isobel but i happen to know John is a very happy man in his marriage. Realism is a necessary part of a happy relationship. Personally i think that last line says that there's so much more could be said and the sadness smudges on the blank page are that which is within and cannot be portrayed on a piece of paper. Whatever is said/written here could be assessed as being either too much or not enough. Whether it is about his wife or not, it is an eloquent write delivering something very personal in a semi detached manner. Not an easy thing to do in anyone's book. (book of life or love).
I'm with Spencer, this would be a fantastic piece to enter into a book. A book about life or a series of poems on the theme of relationships and/or marriage. Wonderful.

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

It's not about my wife, or anyone in particular.

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Nice one Isobel, I have been saying similar to you for a while - although some of the POMs are great they're often by people who have posted nothing for ages!

In my opinion POM should be POM not a poem from months ago. The next months poem is then selected by the winner obviously who in a lot of cases (not all) won't be arsed about what has been going on recently on WOL.

Count me in, whoever wins I will sleep better knowing that POM is one from the last month from an active member Jeff X

Comment is about WOLOP Award (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi enjoyed this, first line sounds like a Coldplay song ! cheers Jeff

Comment is about I never said that it was easy. (blog)

well done Jeff for spotting the mistake

Comment is about I am the fly in your ointment (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Hi Dan, is it prey or pray? Big difference, enjoyed it though and couldn't help singing the Wire song 'I am the Fly' Heard it? If not see if you can find online, similar theme! cheers Jeff

Comment is about I am the fly in your ointment (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

I enjoyed this poem for its honest fidelity to actuality.
Many years of 'art crit' taught me humility..though I never did understand why Tretchikoff's once ubiquitous 'Green Lady' was so green...

Michael

Comment is about The Peacock (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Good to see a HALF EVIL number of blogs!

Comment is about Site Stats for August 2009 (blog)

This reminds me of the well known saying, ''when you have a car crash, get back behind the wheel asap.''

Janet.x

Comment is about Lost.... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Domesday book? Read it seven lifetimes ago.
(sorry, couldn't resist it Nicky) :-)

I enjoyed the sheer honesty which shines through from the author of this write. It shows a deep thinker with a steady note of realism. Some great points made in a subject which is often argued about depending on ones faith in the world and humanity.
I too see an element of fun in this write.
Janet.x

Comment is about The Revelation of the End of Days. (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Great read. Thanks for your contribution.

Janet.x

Comment is about Edinburgh (blog)

Original item by Danni Antagonist

It's a very powerful write for me.
I agree with Nicky with regards to a few stumbles in the early part of the write but it picks up a great rhythm towards the middle and on to the end. Really enjoyed reading this. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about The Crimson King (blog)

Original item by Neil West

Now Janet - that is a bit of a risky question to ask... Were I his wife, I'm not sure I would like to be described as the 'sadness in a smudge on a blank page' - but perhaps John is aiming for a bit of realism... I like the mood you set with this poem. I've heard you perform it but think it is better on page where you can appreciate the words more.

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

I'm alongside John Darwin here. Togher at his level best.

Is this about your wife?
Particularly love the line, 'a shoulder without freckles is like a sky without stars.'

Janet.x

Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Thankyou all for your comments and thoughts about this.
There are many 'elements' to this piece. It was written while listening to a cd called 'Water Whispers.' and the writing ebbed and flowed like water does.

Nicky- i love your interpretation and not just because it is a positive comment.

Dave- i think Nicky could easily write a poem from her comment too.

Cynthia- thankyou and to be honest, i cannot understand what you mean when you say the first line doesn't balance with the sincerity and general tone. I've thought long and hard about changing that line and the only solution would be to write ' she cries a river of tears.'
I'm not sure if it actually makes any difference to the poem and either way it might be a cliched line but to change it would alter the whole theme. While i'm not averse to editing when it feels right to me, on this occasion i must stand by my inner feelings.
My 'intentions' are ALWAYS sincere. Perhaps my inexperience with writing shows through at times my intentions are misconstrued. I'm always happy to explain to anyone when that happens but in poetry there is often an exaggerated flow of words for effect.

Graham- please read my comment to Cynthia and thankyou for your input.

Isobel- Haunting. I like that. :-)

Andy- you're a gem and always so complimentary, thankyou.

Janet.x

Comment is about A Gentile Ripple (blog)

I have to comment on this again Janet.

Cynthia and Graham ( please take no offense this is only an observation ) I see what you are saying but I do not think that this takes anything away from the poem. We all are influenced and use popular culture within any form of writing and if it fits, it sticks, so to speak. If every writer gives me a pound for the amount of times a line or a phrase that has been previously wriitten has spontaneously crept or sneakily leapt out of our mass of dull grey matter into the content of our written word, ( sometimes without us even realising it ), I think I would be so rich that I could twitter on all day without a care in the world. Do we need to start putting inverted commas around phrases that may have been written by someone else and bibliographies at the end of a poem. Think this is a cause for discussion.

I loved the poem Janet, and every time I read it I see something more. Very good write.

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