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AFTER AN EVENING AT THE POET'S CAFÉ

 

It was Friday night after 10. Only

taxis and buses prowl the Reading Streets.

On my way to the station my steps

tell me that story about a lovesick

Russian Count and the aim of his affection,

Natasha, who would shoot him in the last line

of the poem. I was passing bars and clubs

where bouncers stood like crows in black overcoats

joking about small brutalities

and the power they had over queues

and restricted areas. The young people

thought the weather belonged to another

season. Some stood in huddled groups on the damp

pavement their cigarettes trembling like beaks

of hummingbirds after the nectar of lips.

Turning into Friar Street a tramp emerges

from a doorway, approaches a girl

ahead of me and points at the thread

of material that is her skirt. She walks on

patting her hair, looking at her phone

while the tramp mutters “cunt, fucking cunt”

and fumbles in his pocket.

A boy joins the girl and they draw further

away and they walk away a Russian Count

and his lover Natasha who is pulling out a gun.


◄ TWO MINUTES

THE RED LADY OF PAVILAND ►

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winston plowes

Mon 2nd Nov 2009 22:47

Hi Rodney... Thought 'prowl' was a bit predictable. Liked the bouncers and their small brutality kicks and the hummingbird cigarettes. Loved the reference to Natasha, repeated at the end but it seems there is something wrong with the flow and the repetition af away? Taken as a whole it captured the seady sinsiter night and the journey home where you have to occassionally look over your shoulder. Great stuff. Win

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 8th Mar 2009 16:58

Hi Rodney,
nice to see another poem of yours on here.
Some great imagery in this one. Door-men like crows and the skimpy outfits worn these days provided a riot of colour.
I like the street in the night imagery. Lively.

Sorry, not gone on the Natasha and her Count but that's probably due to my lack of cultural knowledge so please excuse :-)

Janet.x

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