Candle
Flicker dripping wick
gently basking in amber:
solidified wisp.
Haiku by Petrova and Elaine
Comments
atmospheric and lush I want to be in that room xx
Hi Elaine,
Nice to hear this again.This haiku has a cosy atmospheric feel to it. The words sound fascinating when said slowly. Thanks for your comments also on "It's So Touching".
I love candles and the aura they reflect.
Your words create such a lovely feeling and image.
Two great talents collaborating - what's not to like! Your haiku is expertly crafted with word-sounds, reading like music. 'flames' and 'gentle' never quite connect for me; but that is a personal angst, to find 'fire' penetrating, even with candles. The soft light so created is another matter.
This is really nicely put together. The first line particularly is cracking, but so is the last.
very nice, never quite solid (if you know what I mean) good for that, Win x
well done girls - co-writing if you are writing with the right person is often top fun.. i do have a very rude limmerick that i wrote with quite a famous irish writer a bit back - they can really break up your normal pattern of writing, and i love this! xx
Well done you! It is fun doing a collaborative poem. I once did one with Francine. Ours was a rude one comparing different wine stoppers. We had such a laugh writing it. It was funny seeing the different styles assert themselves in the different verses.
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Tue 15th Feb 2011 22:25
And what fun it was too ;) x
A poem written together at The Secret Writer's group - tonight in Wigan!
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Laura Taylor
Mon 18th Apr 2011 15:49
Now then - I love this. flicker dripping wick - sooo sensual and reminds me of that huge candledrip extravaganza in the back room of Little 15 :D
Each line is gorgeous - basking in amber, again, massively sensual
Great haiku :)