Candle

Flicker dripping wick

gently basking in amber:

solidified wisp.

 

Haiku by Petrova and Elaine

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Laura Taylor

Mon 18th Apr 2011 15:49

Now then - I love this. flicker dripping wick - sooo sensual and reminds me of that huge candledrip extravaganza in the back room of Little 15 :D

Each line is gorgeous - basking in amber, again, massively sensual

Great haiku :)

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chris yates

Fri 18th Mar 2011 14:41

atmospheric and lush I want to be in that room xx

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Jon

Tue 1st Mar 2011 20:52

Hi Elaine,
Nice to hear this again.This haiku has a cosy atmospheric feel to it. The words sound fascinating when said slowly. Thanks for your comments also on "It's So Touching".

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Francine

Wed 16th Feb 2011 16:16

I love candles and the aura they reflect.
Your words create such a lovely feeling and image.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 16th Feb 2011 13:16

Two great talents collaborating - what's not to like! Your haiku is expertly crafted with word-sounds, reading like music. 'flames' and 'gentle' never quite connect for me; but that is a personal angst, to find 'fire' penetrating, even with candles. The soft light so created is another matter.

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 16th Feb 2011 11:57

This is really nicely put together. The first line particularly is cracking, but so is the last.

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winston plowes

Wed 16th Feb 2011 10:45

very nice, never quite solid (if you know what I mean) good for that, Win x

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Andy N

Wed 16th Feb 2011 08:01

well done girls - co-writing if you are writing with the right person is often top fun.. i do have a very rude limmerick that i wrote with quite a famous irish writer a bit back - they can really break up your normal pattern of writing, and i love this! xx

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Isobel

Wed 16th Feb 2011 06:59

Well done you! It is fun doing a collaborative poem. I once did one with Francine. Ours was a rude one comparing different wine stoppers. We had such a laugh writing it. It was funny seeing the different styles assert themselves in the different verses.

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Tue 15th Feb 2011 22:25

And what fun it was too ;) x

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Elaine Booth

Tue 15th Feb 2011 21:56

A poem written together at The Secret Writer's group - tonight in Wigan!

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