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Is that why (a poem by a shy friend; please be gentle)


Is that why?


I bled

for so many years with the pain reminiscent of childbirth

and cried with longing and loss

the empty hollow and the useless womb

Is that why


I ached

and found each day weighed heavier than the last

and my body dried and drained

and my world shrank to a parody

Is that why


I killed

Tiny webbed fingers a heart, hair and brain part-formed

potential possibilities promise

unfulfilled unloved unlived

Is that why


I wept

as the years and tears and fears

papered pathetic layers over your body

ripped from mine by choice

Is that why


I survived

with scars and empty spaces in my heart and head

and lost my vision and hope and faith

in myself and in love

Is that why?


This is not my work, but the writer (who has another half a dozen little gems up her sleeve), was unsure of its merit. I was not!


◄ Verbal minimalism, (effectiveness = meaning - verbosity)

Poverty is a poor excuse for a paucity of poetry, ►


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Cate Greenlees

Thu 17th Feb 2011 18:08

A very touching poem which is obviously crafted from deep emotion.
I like the simple format, and the use of repetition "Is that why" which gives impact and pathos to this line.
Cate xx

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Val Cook

Thu 17th Feb 2011 16:59

A very moving poem,I agree with Dave well crafted.

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Tue 15th Feb 2011 17:04

I echo Dave,s comments.
this poem sings I song I have also composed for myself long agao...

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Tue 15th Feb 2011 12:56

Sad poem but good.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 15th Feb 2011 12:35

Mark, I'm sure people will be gentle. And also that they will be both impressed and very moved. This is a good, well-crafted poem, but obviously far far more than just a bit of versifying. Truly heart-wrenching. Something which could be repeated by many different women and is too little told.

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