do really like this, fae.

it's perhaps a bit heavy (use of language not topic) to be performed, but it doesn't mean i didn't like it. i think it's excellent.

Comment is about Textures of shame (blog)

Original item by Fae

i never went there, Ian but i can really see this poem. top stuff..

Comment is about Last Orders (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Ah! you got me there Ian. I'm not as in the know about all these forms as yourself. It's a good tribute to somewhere I never knew but read a lot about.

I hope your new home does you all justice!

regards,

Graham

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Good to se you off the mark Nathan.

I can't make out whether you've already found her and she's not ready to go, or you're still waiting for the right one to come along.
Either way a thoughtful piece of work.

Well done,

Graham

Comment is about Run With Me (blog)

Original item by Nathan Woods

thanks for the comment Graham - it's a Ballade Royal stanza form - so the rules don't allow me to add that last line rhyme you suggest as it has to be seven lines ending on a CC rhyme - sorry :-)

Comment is about Last Orders (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

I agree with your further comment on 'Philae' Cynthia - if a scientist were to argue a distant comet denies the existence of God simply because it is a remnant of some 'big bang' my question would be 'who, or what, created the big bang' ;-)
that said - I am pretty agnostic - so I would only be playing devil's (who he) advocate ;-)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is really strong but I can't help feeling on several readings it needs another line to rhyme with "night" as a penultimate line.

Well done Ian, a fine au-revoir

Comment is about Last Orders (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Quietness gathers, piles cotton batting

‘round my slow motion motives,

This line alone is worth the ticket money!

well done Tim

Comment is about Work Day's End (blog)

Original item by Tim Wright

Bloody brilliant Shirley
I would have preferred to have seen this trimmed to a more poetic style but the images are absolutely wonderful.
Oh I wish I'd had that dream.

Comment is about The Dream (blog)

Original item by Shirley Smothers

Loved the poem Naomi.The job?..stuff that!x

Comment is about Inspired (blog)

Original item by Naomi Hefter

Very good Harry, it is a grand place with all the contrasts and challenges it can provide. I rather liked the portrayal of Cilla and feel that program may have sparked a little revival of interest in all things Scouse. :)

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about welcome majesty (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

A great capture of the doggie walk atmosphere Lynn - my son is trying to convince me it is time we got another woofer which I am warming towards... :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Doggy Walk (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Isobel,
Glad that -in my old age - I got to read there (even if it was only once)

Comment is about 'Laughter and tears: there was nothing sedate or predictable about the Tudor' (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Steve,
Hope you were flying higher than that plane tonight!

That play was quite an accomplishment.

Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)

Original item by stephen smith

Joseph,
After reading this I`m so relieved about that bit in the Creed about `the resurrection of
the body`

(those vaporising spiritualists were starting to get me worried)

Comment is about Poem: Vastness of the Kingdom (blog)

Original item by Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

Joseph,
as a convinced Christian I find little to disagree with in your Biblically based poetry.

However, concerning your lines:

`God`s truth can stand on its own, not needing
To be couched within feeble human traditions`

I think the contrary...that God`s truth must be
addressed to the feeble human tradition of what
particular era we happen to find ourselves in.

Your poems and styles)are admirable as personal statements, but I feel that they often don`t speak to `the present situation` of the feeble tradition of where we are now.

I acknowledge that there is always room in poetry for the Biblical style plainness. (It minds me of Milton)

Comment is about Poem: Intellectual Postulations (blog)

Original item by Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

read and respected.xx

Comment is about Poem: Intellectual Postulations (blog)

Original item by Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

Creation and the Creationist Myth are entirely different. But the human effort in ancient times to try to understand the unknowable, using the language of poetic metaphor, is profoundly amazing in itself. I see no conflict between Science and Religion that wisdom cannot dispel.

Comment is about Philae Shakes The Hand Of God (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

while posting a thank you I just caught this piece and its sibling. I love its honesty.
She takes you in her arms
She says she is here now
She loves you
You are safe
You will always be enough
She will never ever leave you
No matter the cost What great work.

So nicely rounded off. I'm glad I didn't miss it.

Comment is about My Inner Child II (blog)

I like the line

Journeying beyond invisible emotions

Which in this poem those fingers certainly do.

Comment is about Beyond the Sub-conscious (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Thank you, again :)

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Stephen Thanks for comment on poem and glad you liked it!

Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)

Original item by stephen smith

here's my poem from linda's prompt which i did a version of last monday

http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=45506

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

a russian aristocrat before the revolution?Great atmosphere.....perhaps too cryptic.

Comment is about Before the Storm (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Comment is about Writing Prompt for Monday (blog)

Original item by Linda Cosgriff

here's my poem from this prompt, Linda which i did a version at in stockport last week

http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=45506

Comment is about Writing Prompt for Monday (blog)

Original item by Linda Cosgriff

interesting theme!
Steve Smith

Comment is about Palisade (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Thanks for coming to the play and glad you enjoyed the night -seriously impressed with your achievments!
Steve Smith
for the plane home tonight!

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

...also, CBT, in your case, the "so" is admissible as it is a conjunction, connecting two separate clauses. I needed to check lol

Comment is about So and so (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

thanks so much for your kind comments on 'Elephant's Graveyard' Andy - it was a deep topic generated by looking at Richard's amazing photo - I'm finding the exercise of looking beyond the obvious in his photo's very enlightening - would never have gone near the Ganesha myth otherwise - cheers

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

thanks once again for your kind comments on 'Elephant's Graveyard' Cynthia - it was a deep topic generated by looking at Richard's amazing photo - I'm finding the exercise of looking beyond the obvious in his photo's very enlightening - would never have gone near the Ganesha myth otherwise - I like your assessment of me - it sort of resonates with my own life view of 'soul of a poet in the body of a brickie' ;-)cheers

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

thanks so much for your kind comments on 'Elephant's Graveyard' Martin - it was a deep topic generated by looking at Richard's amazing photo - I'm finding the exercise of looking beyond the obvious in his photo's very enlightening - would never have gone near the Ganesha myth otherwise - cheers

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Hey thanks Harry! Aye, I see a lot of poems where I just can't work out the rationale behind the text positioning :D

Cheers Andy!

Comment is about Tinsmith (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for your kind, supportive and always humorous comments on 'Philae' John - that Listerine chapel line had me gargling with laughter ;-)

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks for all your feedback guys - just a few thoughts from me on the valued and insightful comments - please don't see this as a knee jerk reaction, I'm just trying to clarify why I've written what I've written:
The image and poem do compliment each other in my honest opinion, and Graham actually hits the nail on the head - a man made object - penetrates a satellite and pokes god in the eye. A blunt metaphor, but - hey-ho.
The pay-off line is exactly what the poem is about, it's not an add-on - it's an integral part of the piece.
The poem is faintly praising man's achievement - just not in the right direction/field in my opinion - why would I want to counter-balance the argument more? I'm making the point that on THIS topic I feel the balance is wrong. Graham's criticism (soft emphasis) wouldn't be applied to Wordsworth, for instance, for not extolling the virtues of a tulip in his poem about daffodils ;-).
Anyway - that's enough of my 'case for the defence' I'm just happy people read this stuff and spend their precious time in providing feedback. Thanks once again

Comment is about Philae Shakes The Hand Of God (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

thanks for your continued supportive comments MC - in particular for 'Philae' I always enjoy reading your thoughts on these topics - sometimes we even agree :-) but I do appreciate opposite viewpoints just as much

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

hey, thanks for the kind comments on 'Philae' Laura - yes, I know what you mean about the emotional mind-blowing nature of the achievement - still think I would have been more in awe of a scientist saying 'I've found a cure for ebola, AIDS and cancer, though ;-)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Haha Natalie :D :D

I too cannot stand a rising inflection though. It grates badly, and instantly makes me want to punch, I'm afraid.

Comment is about So and so (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

thanks so much for commenting on 'Philae' Cynthia - really pleased you liked it

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is fab! I can almost hear you performing it and I've never even heard your voice :D

Winkling out those little peculiarities of daily life and the weirdnesses we carry with us. Brilliant - loved it.

Comment is about 'Can I read this out to you?' 'Noooooooo, I've got stuff to do.' (blog)

Original item by CathyLCrabb

i've only ever wrote about three rhyming poems in my life, so know how hard it is from the other side of things but well done for trying out something different... this scans pretty well to me and i really enjoyed it. i would certainly keep trying to write more like this .

Comment is about Validation (blog)

Original item by Judi Strega

my favourite of yours probably so far, charlotte. enjoyed all of it, but has such a strong opening in particular. excellent stuff.. really drew me in

Comment is about Sometimes Things Just End. (blog)

Original item by Charlotte

like the use of dialogue in italics here, gives it a different feel to what i expected originally. good stuff.

Comment is about Setting (blog)

Original item by Bam

powerful stuff, ian. top stuff

Comment is about A Tree In The Elephant's Graveyard (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

i can hear bob putting a tune to this, laura. first rate piece. whether it is a poem or a song, i am unsure but i do like it

Comment is about Tinsmith (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

i know somebody who this applys to nat... excellent stuff. really enjoyed this

Comment is about My Inner Child (blog)

different and enjoyed!x

Comment is about Puppets on Strings (blog)

Original item by Sunny Chopra

"just passing through" the hub of poetry. Hi Emmy. Tommy

Comment is about lessons (blog)

Original item by emmy92

ah gotcha!and phew!thought there was some hidden reference to the binbags containing your Dads belongings,following,lets say-an 'absence'

so glad I was wrong! I don't think there are that many people who are NOT flawed in some way these days-bravo re the honesty Cathy.x

Comment is about 'Can I read this out to you?' 'Noooooooo, I've got stuff to do.' (blog)

Original item by CathyLCrabb

Hi Solar!

Don't worry, it isn't that sad. Where it is sad it is happy sad! It's an honest story of a flawed parent doing their best on a good day. Next day...hmmmm well, least there was still takeaway left! XXXXXX

Comment is about 'Can I read this out to you?' 'Noooooooo, I've got stuff to do.' (blog)

Original item by CathyLCrabb