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Beyond the Sub-conscious

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His fingers waken running through her hair
Only pulling back when she opens her eyes
Blinkered by the yellow sunset like flowers
Dropping consciously across the windowsill
Dangling on like fingers on a balcony
Tied up in invisible chains across derelict moods
Journeying beyond invisible emotions
Streaming conscious all over the place
Like totally mis-matched kissing
Beyond the sub-conscious.

 

 

(Wrote from Linda's prompt on http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=45186)

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Gray Nicholls

Sat 22nd Nov 2014 15:39

agree with isobel here, andy. lot of good ideas running through this and you don't overdo it also.

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Isobel

Fri 21st Nov 2014 14:20

Mmm - there's nothing like running your fingers through hair. It's loving and tender or sensual and erotic, depending on the situation. Not so nice if someone with grubby hands is doing it though ;)

I like the ideas running through this.

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Andy N

Fri 21st Nov 2014 12:43

thanks nigel.

was a quickie really but i am proud of this.

thanks again

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Nigel Astell

Thu 20th Nov 2014 15:10

I like the line

Journeying beyond invisible emotions

Which in this poem those fingers certainly do.

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