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Ann Foxglove

Sat 29th Nov 2014 12:38

A beautiful poem Judi xx

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 29th Nov 2014 12:36

Great to see you on here Judi - with some lovely stuff! xx

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Sat 29th Nov 2014 01:00

Hi. In response to your invitation to help re your work, I would avoid stock phrases such as "beating heart" and "soar with the wings etc". Avoid at all costs (joke) and you will find a truer voice. Tommy

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David Subacchi

Fri 28th Nov 2014 21:45

Thanks for the positive comments Cynthia. I try to post a poem on here roughly once a month but don't always succeed. :)

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 28th Nov 2014 19:40

Having seen the TV clips of the shop mobs - I go
along with the sentiment in the targeted sense.
Humanity in crowds can be uplifting but the beast
is often in the anonymity provided by numbers
when tempers fray.

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<Deleted User> (9882)

Fri 28th Nov 2014 19:28

oh! those news clips!...UGH!UGH!UGH!

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<Deleted User> (9882)

Fri 28th Nov 2014 19:25

Beautiful.Comforting.x

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 28th Nov 2014 19:18

Bang on Tina. I watched footage of the black Friday sales on the news tonight; it was horrifying to see people (women especially) brawling over TV sets. Anyone with a conscience and sense of reality ought to be well and truly ashamed - but I guess they don't and they're not. Consumerism at its greedy and selfish brainwashed worst. Well said.

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A.E.

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Nigel Astell

Fri 28th Nov 2014 17:33

Pollution Strikes Butt Tips Shower from the Sky

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:43

This is splendid. I'm so glad you have shared it. We haven't seen much of you lately; and, yes, that is a complaint.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:39

And it is really funny. But only'to five'!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:35

Living with you must be very interesting, never being sure of what your observations are, or where they will take you. I do like the implication of 'Silver or Tin'; (although tin is really far more intrinsically valuable than silver has ever been.) Perhaps I misinterpret the intent- no relationship to 'all that glitters...' at all.

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Preeti Sinha

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:27

Thank u Cynthia ! I feel much encouragement by your reading. You are so kind and helpfull.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:25

Just plain delightful, edgy and fun. I almost had to draw a map, to sort the 'scheme' out. Very enjoyable.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:19

Dave, Harry has said it all, eloquently. It is a privilege to read a good villanelle. And it is never too late for such a sentiment.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:12

Oh, Preeti, brains AND a scathing sense of humour. How glorious!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:05

I'm really glad you have brought it back. Concluding a long but flowing poem in metaphor, the final stanza is arresting in its personification of the 'physical world beyond out own selves.

Tuck an apostrophe into 'the mind's limbs', just a typo, I'm sure.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 28th Nov 2014 16:02

Dave,
In the midst of struggling with this bloody Windows 8.1 what a refresher to come upon this lovely villanelle!

It is a very true poem, which (humbly) lays bare the aftermath of our human propensity to often decide things by lethal means. It speaks about the personal (which of course is never -and cannot be - considered in times of crisis)

I particularly liked that:

`Each pallid, ghoulish face without a name`

and the sad rhythm of

`Shuffling along my street of shame`

I very fine poem indeed!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 28th Nov 2014 15:52

The 'conscious act' of death - now there's a humdinger of a thought. May you be so blessed.

I totally echo M.C.'s sentiments. Rhyme and meter are refreshing.

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Travis Brow

Fri 28th Nov 2014 14:59

That's a very nice comment M.C, thank you. I wish the topic wasn't so grim but there you go...human decline is rarely joyful.

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Tina Ford

Fri 28th Nov 2014 14:33

Thank you for your comment M.C, I just got angry at the way people where ripping items out of each others hands, and pushing others to the floor. It made my heart heavy x

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 28th Nov 2014 14:26

I surprised myself by enjoying the "hip-hop"
style of the sentiments expressed - and the
content will always carry weight. However, there
is no country with as comprehensive a range of
charitable organisations as can be found in the UK
- and the phrase "compassion fatigue" can come to mind on occasions when out in the real world.
Even the bible posed the question "Am I my
brother's keeper?".
Stimulating stuff!

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 28th Nov 2014 13:56

It's always a pleasure to read the contributions
from this source. Disciplined yet wide-ranging
in vocabulary, inventive and thought-provoking
...worth anyone's time.

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Tina Ford

Fri 28th Nov 2014 13:17

Hahah thank you Rose x

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Fri 28th Nov 2014 13:15

Tina-soooooo rantingly clever!And count me in with-the guilty as charged.

Every word rings true,and needs to stick in our 'grabbing claws and scoffing jaws'

x

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 28th Nov 2014 10:17

glad you liked 'arroyo' MC - I found the focus on the picture and tight form requirements lead to a very descriptive piece - there's little room for excess fat on this terza rima form - thanks once again for your continued supportive comments

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 28th Nov 2014 10:15

thanks for the kind comments on 'arroyo' Martin - the focus on the picture and the strict rhyme pattern really helps in getting a descriptive, tight set of stanzas - glad you liked it

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 28th Nov 2014 10:13

thanks for the kind comments on 'last orders' Cynthia - that poem is short but sweet - just like your good self ;-)

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 28th Nov 2014 10:12

thanks for the comment on 'last orders' Dave - hopefully we can lay those ghosts to rest at the old courts - hope to see you there in a couple of weeks time for the Xmas soiree (?)

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 28th Nov 2014 10:11

thanks for the kind comments on 'last orders' Isobel - yes, we're all going to be a little sadder for the Tudor's passing :-( good luck with the panto........he's behind you!!!!!

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 28th Nov 2014 10:09

thanks for the comment on last orders Andy - I believe I'll be seeing you on the 7th for 'only obeying orders' (?) look forward to that

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Preeti Sinha

Fri 28th Nov 2014 09:55

Thank you for giving me regular feedback which will surely help to improve !
Preeti

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Karen Little

Fri 28th Nov 2014 07:58

Really well done Sarah.........brilliant idea well executed!

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 27th Nov 2014 23:04


A heavily revised re-post

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 27th Nov 2014 19:52

Hello Tom,
Read a couple of pieces on you blog, very impressive indeed. Good to have you here.

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David Cooke

Thu 27th Nov 2014 16:29

Hi Marianne Glad you liked my version of Rilke's Swan.

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Judi Strega

Thu 27th Nov 2014 15:54

Thank you, Cynthia. I find it quite difficult, even daring, to delete a word or even a line or two. It is something I remembered from painting that however much I might like a particular passage, if it doesn't fit, I have to let it go.

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Preeti Sinha

Thu 27th Nov 2014 13:18

Change is needed i think. You are using good quotations !

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Preeti Sinha

Thu 27th Nov 2014 13:16

And it still keeps happening and girls also want it ! It is a total shame that people cannot kill this social evil of our country but a change is coming slowly slowly :) Thank you for taking interest in my work and offering valuable input's

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 27th Nov 2014 13:11

beautiful :)

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 27th Nov 2014 13:10

Hello Martin

Thank you for reading and your kind comments :)

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Tina Ford

Thu 27th Nov 2014 13:08

Thank you for your words x

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:55

Haha...un bloody believable.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:52

The idea of "We are the beautiful creatures"
reminds me of "We are the music makers...we are
the dreamers of dreams" and is ideal for
portraying the place of poets and poetry in the
scheme of things...while the final line leaves
us with a question to ponder.

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Gareth Glyn Roberts

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:50

Thank you MC

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:45

Love the title! This will surely resonate with
anyone who has experienced the likelihood of unsought/unwanted encounter while out and about.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:38

Praiseworthy for its skilful depiction of the
ordinary in poetic terms. I agree with ME about
the last lines...and take particular pleasure
from "Cobbled streets the colour of an old bruise".

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:03

"The more things change, the more they stay the same". Jean-Baptiste Alphonse Karr

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Preeti Sinha

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:02

Thank u for reading !

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Preeti Sinha

Thu 27th Nov 2014 12:00

I understood the concept of your poem but I don't know who robbie burns is.....But it is very lovely, your poem

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