Thanks chaps. It was quite scary just the wind, but then the cut as well! then the candlelight - how could I go wrong? I tried to convey a mix of gothic and modern, a challenge!
thanks for reading.
Comment is about POWER CUT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Uplifting within the content of the grief - life MUST go on.
I'm reminded of the Kern/Hammerstein song of WW2 -
"The Last Time I saw Paris"..when that great city had
fallen under the Nazi jackboot.
Comment is about Paris, 13 November 2015 (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell
Nice, gentle love song with a satisfying pay-off, that could be rewarded with a tune to match.
In verse 2 I would have been tempted to use something
like -
"You're the rhythm to my rhyme" - for the last line.
But that's me being subjective...nothing more.
Comment is about Answer to a Prayer (blog)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
Fun to see this sort of post - not always the easiest to
try yet alone complete.
Comment is about POWER CUT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Animal crackers!
Always great to see you bang on form - or banging on
about form!
Comment is about A TRIP TO THE ZOO (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks to all who came along to Readaround. ACE funding permitting please watch this space for news of our return in 2016.
Review is about Beatnik Boulevard presents 'Readaround' on 13 Nov 2015 (event)
<Deleted User> (8659)
Wed 18th Nov 2015 14:10
A beautiful poem Lynn, wonderful.
Comment is about Black Velvet (blog)
too true it gives one time to think though. :-), this damn wind has broken my shed. How small we are
Comment is about POWER CUT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
yes you certainly do write with feeling, so do I, there's an honesty in that. Well done
Comment is about Allen Jo Mathews (poet profile)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
<Deleted User> (8659)
Wed 18th Nov 2015 11:50
Hi Cynthia,
Thanks for popping by and leaving your comments on Leisure. The original by W.H.Davies is one of my all time favourites too-many a time those are the words which spring to my lips when stood in a wild and windy place. And his first book,Diary of a Supertramp has been an influence on how I've led my life since first reading it forty odd years ago. But 'massacre'? That was not the intention and I believe that Davies would've approved.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
actually, the longer i stay away from professional kitchens the more i fall back in love with food in general. i think the same can be said for most careers. they sap the joy from whatever it was you once loved (usually the reason you entered the career in the first place). glad you liked the poem! the worst thing about the wife being pregnant is that i promised i wouldn't eat a steak until she could!
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Wed 18th Nov 2015 02:05
Thank you very much for the feedback I'll make sure I'll make the necessary changes in the ones coming up.
Comment is about Answer to a Prayer (blog)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
Oh Lynn, in my heart I know him. Brought a tear to my eye! Beautifully put x
Anita
Comment is about Black Velvet (blog)
Nice one Stu. I can feel my taste buds stirring, are you sure you haven't returned to cooking?
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Nicely put Lynn. I like it a lot
Comment is about Black Velvet (blog)
its rare to find
a happy medium
and if you do
then well done
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I will try to catch up with your work, Julie Anne. Welcome to WOL!
Comment is about Julie Anne Sugden (poet profile)
Original item by Julie Anne Sugden
Delightful, fast, funny, full of flair, and very true. Love the disparate details.
Comment is about Tonight (blog)
Original item by Julie Anne Sugden
You are so good! IMO, - a true poet's mind exercising the innate power of diverse observations, the interweaving of all senses, of seeing the 'part in the whole' and the 'whole in the part'. I think it is a gift usually, but sometimes a burden too. I bet you HAVE to write.
Comment is about Moving From One Place to Another (with boxes) (blog)
Original item by A.M. Clarke
A really heart-touching little poem, sensitively and effectively crafted.
I'm going back to read some of your other work. Perhaps one a day or so. I'm looking forward to it.
Comment is about For Janis (blog)
Original item by A.M. Clarke
Powerful message, expressing the panic without exaggerated detail. The repetition is very effective. Perhaps readers just could not deal with this subject right away; but I think you have written a good poem about it.
Did you deliberately intend one verse to use 'life' instead of 'lives'? It seems a bit odd.
Comment is about Our Lives, Our Lives (blog)
Original item by Quiet Comet
Nice poem and imagery. Check some spellings though (sorry that's the school teacher me talking.)
Strive against all odds and thrive
Comment is about Gypno (poet profile)
Original item by Gypno
Very well developed, with all the killing details unfolding the immediate present and the past few minutes, and the past - period. I like the connotations of external sound in the personal silence of the room. And I admire your insistence that the reader contribute to the 'play' by with-holding who is the person in the photo.
IMO, it's a very good poem.
Comment is about Anonymous (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Stu, when I was twenty, in my first apartment, my dad came for dinner. I was so excited. I cooked for him an expensive steak, way beyond my meagre budget. But this occasion was SPECIAL.
I read my book/s, prepared my meat verbatim, seared it hawk-eyed, dressed it with artistic panache, served it with pride and stood respectfully back for high praise. He scored it deeply with his steak knife, and drew abruptly back with a sharp ejaculation: 'JESUS, Cynthia, I said I liked it RARE, NOT STILL ON THE HOOF!'
Ah, the richness of the best memories. I have no idea what happened next. Presumably, I cooked it some more. I envy people who can afford fine rich steaks.
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I'm pleased you like this one Cynthia. It takes your eye off the ball maybe and not really esoteric but a practical study of life in the raw(no pun intended).
cheers Ray
Comment is about THE WISDOM OF THE UPRIGHT SPINE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Have you just joined us today? Splendid. This site is excellent, with loads of different writers from all backgrounds. We try to be universally friendly. Do feel free to comment on other poets' works. Such interaction will likely stimulate comments on yours as well.
Cynthia.
Comment is about Allen Jo Mathews (poet profile)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
A delightful little piece, charming, consistently lyrical and well-rhymed.
Because it is a 'page presentation, perhaps you might eliminate your commas after the end words 'before' and 'hoping'; they seem to interrupt the flow of a thought for no reason. Running a line 'idea' from one into another is very acceptable, very adept.
Comment is about Answer to a Prayer (blog)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
Very good one, a great subject well exercised.
Comment is about THE WISDOM OF THE UPRIGHT SPINE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Just wanted to add that I often drove down the M1 at night and was enchanted by the sight of red mist and heat that was seen on the eastern side for miles around Nottingham. Probably over by the early 90s. All the best.
Comment is about Ghosts are the past (blog)
Original item by PatricioLG
Thank you Stu - yes I think ideas like your own trigger my own maybe. A good thing! I was pleased with the ludicrous antedote to standing up. However, lots of back problems ensue from that one postural question mark.
Ray .
Tim, lovely to have a new face making comments. It's been a productive day for a change.
Comment is about THE WISDOM OF THE UPRIGHT SPINE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you Graham. Yes, your intuition was correct: 26th anniversary of his death in December.
Comment is about Kieran (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
what searing humour! a rarity nowadays. etc
thanks for the comment, im glad you enjoyed the poem!
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
hello. id recommend wordpress over blogger. thats what i use. also, a larger network so more hits. i dont think your views count as views. i havent checked though.
Comment is about Making a blog and what a good site this is (blog)
Original item by David Addington
My laptop is also pissing me off by missing letters in words so can't be arsed to edit today. Shit, this writing thing was just so much easier when I just used a biro in notebooks.
PS: Do all the view counts on this site account for other people view a profile, or do majority of them account for each time you log into your own account and edit etc?
Comment is about Making a blog and what a good site this is (blog)
Original item by David Addington
Not a poem that will be a hit with vegetarians, but very appetising for the rest of us! Would it be pushing a pun too too far to say "Well done!"?
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thank you for your lovely note on Budgetary Democide :)
Comment is about PatricioLG (poet profile)
Original item by PatricioLG
A powerful poem Ray, packing a lot of truth and feeling into a few words.
Comment is about THE WISDOM OF THE UPRIGHT SPINE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you very much, Ray yes, the scent, touch, to actually feel what I am writing and sense history with it, is important to me
Thankyou David, a memory of times when black gold would end life short, but was so essential for a way of life for the men and women in towns and essential for Britain, then desolated by political change destroying people's lives leaving behind ghosts that still remain.
Comment is about Ghosts are the past (blog)
Original item by PatricioLG
He who sups with the devil must needs have a long spoon.! As we say in the music business, this poem was really cooking.
Ray
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
more blood and sex!
funny that all the things that seperate us from such 'savage' beasts should be our downfall!
enjoyed this, especially the last line which is excellent.
Comment is about THE WISDOM OF THE UPRIGHT SPINE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
thanks both! i once worked out i must have cooked over 5000 steaks in my life so far and every one that wasn't medium rare made me shiver! funny, this started out as a love affair to the steak and ended up as a love letter to cannibalism.
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
There's more than a little "I ate his liver, washed down with a nice Chianti" about this piece Stu, reinforced by the hypothetical execution at the end.
Mouthwatering and Chilling
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Absolutely love this one , it lives in a dream and has strong imagery . I was thinking of your love of all things touchable (wood and the like) and this blends in to the material sense of a place.
Nice one. Ray
Comment is about Ghosts are the past (blog)
Original item by PatricioLG
Saw your comment on Stockport W O L
You can't call me lovely Nigel till we get those glossy photos back from Rachel Andy darling x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
I'm with Stu on this Tommy. No frills I like. A kind of kitchen sink 60s feel to it for me. Unfulfilled life and desperation all very precisely represented. Sad and compelling. Ray
Comment is about Anonymous (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
My kind of poem Stu - and shows how versatile you are.
I don't eat red meat, but your description delights me nevertheless. The sexual frisson is a nice addition, and maybe there is a closeness in the psyche . I think the word barbaric has hit the spot in its rawness.
Funnily enough I'm just chiming with the meat sentiment with my latest. Read all about it!!
ray
Comment is about bite (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
tommyfazz@yahoo.com
Wed 18th Nov 2015 19:48
Cheers Ray, well encapsulated.
Comment is about Anonymous (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll