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Tue 17th Nov 2015 12:51

Cheers Patricio. Interesting take P, interesting. Tommy

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Tue 17th Nov 2015 12:49

Cheers Patricio. Interesting take P, interesting. Tommy

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Tue 17th Nov 2015 12:26

Cheers Stu. From where? to where? Indeed. Tommy

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Stu Buck

Tue 17th Nov 2015 12:20

i like this tommy. its a really well told snapshot and poses far more questions than it answers (a good thing in my book)

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raypool

Tue 17th Nov 2015 12:04

Thanks Stu. Poetry gives a certain freedom to condemn life in the raw, but one has to earn a living. Music is not always about groupies and adulation, although that obviously would help!!
A good larruping is I guess a slang word, but one of the threatened species which I think should be drawn out on its creaking plinth as a reminder that the world is more than only what our "protectors" want us to hear.
Mr Grumpy.

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Gypno

Tue 17th Nov 2015 10:10

sir,you see i was always witout friends,i was always picked last for everything. i walked alone constantly and i still do but i just had to wait for the right people to come along. it is worth the wait.you'll see. your friends will be wonderful and u will never stop smiling. you can never aprreciate the good without dealing with the bad :)

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Katy Megan Hughes

Tue 17th Nov 2015 08:47

Thank you Nigel!

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Preeti Sinha

Tue 17th Nov 2015 04:31

Hello Jade
First off, good to see you back. And secondly, thank you for reading, commenting and relating to what I wrote. I go into strangers' worlds, imagining their lives, and getting vicarious thrills tiptoeing around in their stilletoes, watching the world through their eyes.
Preeti

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Preeti Sinha

Tue 17th Nov 2015 04:27

Hi Pat,
Thank you for your kind comments on Nobody Cane. It was very very hard for me to post it. I felt I was exposing my inner most self so had to take it down.
I am so sorry to hear about your step father. Not easy dealing with things like that, is it!
Cheers,
Preeti

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Tue 17th Nov 2015 04:01

Humph!

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Patricio LG

Tue 17th Nov 2015 03:55

A masterpiece for the world to wake from apathy... Or not!

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Patricio LG

Tue 17th Nov 2015 03:52

I work with some of these people ha ha

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Patricio LG

Tue 17th Nov 2015 03:51

Maybe that's where I go wrong!

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Patricio LG

Tue 17th Nov 2015 03:47

I don't know if I'm even close, however I felt like this as a father, when my children left home, just exactly how you describe it.

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 16th Nov 2015 23:56

Interesting stuff - my own project THE CROWS OF ALBION attempts to merge my own poetry with musical backings / soundscapes - I also released a 21 track CD last year commemorating the full chronological history of WW1 - as a comparison piece here is my take on 'Anthem For Doomed Youth' from that album - which commences with my own sonnet remembering Wilfred Owen - if anyone wishes to hear more examples they can be accessed from the link. Similar idea - similar project - I will follow with interest :-)
https://soundcloud.com/the-man-at-the-back-1/death-of-a-poet-anthem-for-doomed-youth

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Amanda Van Gorder

Mon 16th Nov 2015 23:24

Happens too often. Even when least expected

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Tom Harding

Mon 16th Nov 2015 22:45

ray thanks for comments on 'cat' - a simple poem but glad it resonated!

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DavidAddington

Mon 16th Nov 2015 22:21

Reading on the poetry boat, Durham, National Poetry day 1997, which was hosted by Peter Mortimor.

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Tim Ellis

Mon 16th Nov 2015 22:09

...or see me in person at Poems, Prose & Pints in Harrogate this Wednesday, and you can have it for only £2.50

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Tim Ellis

Mon 16th Nov 2015 22:04

I've just published a new pamphlet, and this is the title poem. It's a not-for-profit pamphlet to mark the United Nations' summit on climate change in Paris next month. I've already published a couple of the poems on Write Out Loud in previous blogs, and since I want to spread the message as widely as possible I shall try to publish all the rest here over the next few weeks. But if you can't wait, you can buy the pamphlet very affordably from my website
http://www.birdbard.co.uk/bookshop.html#
or on Amazon or Kindle
http://www.amazon.co.uk/Speak-Unspeakable-words-overheating-world/dp/1519178085/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1447711385&sr=8-1&keywords=speak+the+unspeakable

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Mon 16th Nov 2015 20:52

Hi V! my smile :-)

Tommy

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steve pottinger

Mon 16th Nov 2015 20:16

It'll be a great night! I wish I could be there....

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Mon 16th Nov 2015 19:49

Cynthia thanks for the response. I sometimes write in the first, second and third person in a piece when I wish to engage then disengage the reader. I am aware of this and its limitations and of the frustration that can ensue. The third person being unannounced. An example of a form would be "Tommy Carroll (himself)" simple but twisting. However I do have some but I would have to read again with greater attention ( I have just finished rereading (skimming) all 300 ( approximately) of my pieces...
I try and flip those pebbles into the pond Cy ;-)

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Mon 16th Nov 2015 19:48

Cynthia thanks for the response. I sometimes write in the first, second and third person in a piece when I wish to engage then disengage the reader. I am aware of this and its limitations and of the frustration that can ensue. The third person being unannounced. An example of a form would be "Tommy Carroll (himself)" simple but twisting. However I do have some but I would have to read again with greater attention ( I have just finished rereading (skimming) all 300 ( approximately) of my pieces...

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 16th Nov 2015 19:19

thanks for commenting on '...the monkeys paw' Harry - hope you are keeping well and the resting up worked.
I rather liked this eerie little piece myself, but as Cynthia noted it would appear only the two of you did. I'm finding myself on Write Out Loud less and less these days - hopefully will get he time to spend a bit more time here = the plus side is I'm gigging a lot - so - hey ho :-)
Keep well mate
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Ian Whiteley

Mon 16th Nov 2015 19:15

thanks once again for your kind comments on '...the monkey's paw' Cynthia - I rather liked this one, but - as you say - it would seem not many others did. The Monkey's Paw was a chilling tale that whoever held it had 3 wishes but, of course, those wishes didn't turn out exactly as their 'wishees' thought they would. Quite a good analogy with George Osbourne's defeat in the Commons I thought - ah well
Ian

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Mon 16th Nov 2015 18:19

Terrific spoof! All great thoughts rise upon the fumes of alcohol? It may well be so.

I do wonder if this 'string' should be more aptly called 'senryu' due to its subject content.

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Stu Buck

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:45

yes, agreed. this is a corker. and you have used the word larruped in a comment. brilliant. i can smell and taste this its so descriptive. its clearly from memory and not a fictional piece. larruped though! ha! i never thought id see anyone using larrup, let alone larruped as a past participle!

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Stu Buck

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:42

i have looked back as i said i would and i still like it a lot. i agree about the hammer blows, it is repetitive in its lilt and timing and overall i do think ive got a point across while keeping it dense and nightmarish. more importantly my wife likes it and she never likes anything. so whatever the outcome i have won!

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Stu Buck

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:39

fear controls i suppose. i wonder if in 2300 years time people will still be here to learn from our mistakes (not that we have learnt). i think not.

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Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:30

I am so struck by the 'sameness' of experience upon our current world 'stage' and that of the ancient 'civilizations'. People living in fear is a terrible common denominator.

This is a repost; I happened to come across the poem while sorting out some other work. And my husband commented on its timely observations.

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Stu Buck

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:28

wonderful - in that it is both very clever and makes me feel learned for understanding it. especially like catharsis, a beneficial expulsion indeed.

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raypool

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:10

Just to comment once more, Stu. It does have a persistent hammer blow effect for me and this gives the whole thing credibility. That insistence reminds me of Dylan Thomas in full flow, leaving little gaps for pondering - I think you have hit on a winner in that case.!!

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raypool

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:07

Nice point David. What I was aiming at was a metaphor for all that's British and looked up too here being perhaps ludicrous when transplanted into a different culture with its own mindset. Although things may have entirely changed in the desert lands now. I dunno.

You might hopefully put me right on this! ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Nov 2015 16:57

Michelle, I would stop making comments completely if I considered them to be 'reviews'. Where would I get the crust? I like the idea of talking together, informally, and often helpfully. Anyone can take my own work apart totally, which has happened frequently, to my delight and improvement. I always consider the points or options suggested and do make relevant changes.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Nov 2015 16:45

A beautiful expression of a universal experience. First the thought and then the electric words. Really good poem.

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John F Keane

Mon 16th Nov 2015 16:44

The Staleybridge poems look great - my personal favourite is 'Somewhere Else'.

As for the Paris massacre, the real question is 'why doesn't it happen more often?' Many urban districts in Europe (the UK included) are full of hate-filled, disenfranchised and alienated young men with nothing to lose. Little wonder they seek out 'causes' to fight and die for - indeed, I suspect we will witness more of these atrocities in the months ahead.

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Greg Freeman

Mon 16th Nov 2015 16:42

I've written this as a news story, rather than as a review, but I do have a copy of the CD and it's excellent, Graham. If you've never encountered Little Machine before, you should certainly give them a go. It's more than a cut above your average Christmas musical output, particularly the tracks mentioned. I have an earlier CD of theirs that I play a lot, which includes a very moving version of Wilfred Owen's 'Anthem for Doomed Youth', and a joyful punk version of Larkin's "They fuck you up ..." If however, just mentioning the poet laureate's name makes you choke on your sprouts, they did also release a CD of six poems with a world war one setting earlier this year, called A Blackbird Sang http://www.little-machine.com/news/cd-a-blackbird-sang-ww1-poems/

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Mon 16th Nov 2015 16:38

btw Jade, thanks again for commenting on my poem. I've been reading a few of yours today and enjoying although I haven't left any comments. Just wanted to say.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Nov 2015 16:36

This idea itself is completely captivating, Tommy, but it's the switch in tense, and voice, that I'm struggling with. Like - how can you make an observation if you don't know it happened? Do you follow my point, or am I way off base myself? What if, after you 'blinked'. you made the final 'episode' a question? A hope? A longing?

I have continued commenting only because I like the work so much. I really miss hobnobbing with poetry-minded friends over chips and coffee.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 16th Nov 2015 14:16

The Angel of Grief

Each tear of grief
an Angel will rise.

Sending love and understanding
to families suffering pain.

Faith will bring strength
for those that fall.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 16th Nov 2015 14:16

The Angel of Grief

Each tear of grief
an Angel will rise.

Sending love and understanding
to families suffering pain.

Faith will bring strength
for those that fall.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 16th Nov 2015 13:58

Excellent Katy

on each line
of this poem
holds so much
hurt and pain
in so few words.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 16th Nov 2015 12:50

I'm in two minds about this. Half of me thinks what a good idea, a recognized poet's words set to music. Then the other half frowns and thinks it's just a Christmas gimmick and yet another, more commercial vehicle for CAD!
Hard to judge?

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dorinda macdowell

Mon 16th Nov 2015 09:56

Paris, 13 November 2015

I weep for you, Paris,
Every beautiful boulevard,
Every humble street
Whose pavements so often have welcomed my feet –

Every drop of blood shed;
Every beating heart dead;
Every au revoir said –

Your heart-beat is mine, too:
Paris, I weep for you –

And WE say to hate: you will never destroy
Good. And we SHALL sing for joy –

This, I will ever recall –
But, for now, my tears fall…

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Patricio LG

Mon 16th Nov 2015 01:22

I do write with honesty and obviousness lol, thanks

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 15th Nov 2015 23:20

Many on WOL often make the mistake of assuming poems are autobiographical when they are not. This however does sound so. If so it is a brave effort John. The essence of futility is accurately portrayed here.

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 15th Nov 2015 21:34

Thank you so much Cynthia! Really appreciate your ongoing support. : ) x

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:18

thanks zach, how interesting that we posted similar poems at the same time. well, similar in some ways. i enjoyed your piece very much.

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:18

looking at it now, i think its one of the best things i've written. tomorrow, who knows!
its dense, partly recalling psychedelic experiences, partly expressing (as best i could) a conversation i had with god once. perhaps in a dream. i like the imagery, im happy with the flow and overall story and i think it stands up as a poem of some intent and regard. however, it may just be bollocks. thats the beauty of poetry. one mans trash etc! i could never scorn anyone for not liking a poem. poetry is so subjective that it wouldnt be right. thanks for reading and taking the time to comment. i will update you tomorrow as to whether i still feel its any good or not!

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