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Answer to a Prayer

I was kind of hoping,
That you would come along,
Like the answer to a prayer,
And the music to a song.

Like the kind of thing that happens,
At a special place and time,
That will change our lives forever,
Like a fantasy of mine.

The fantasy was there before,
I ever knew your name,
And now that I have found you,
We will never be the same.

So, pardon, if I look at you,
Forgive me if I stare,
At the fantasy I knew before,
I saw you standing there.

For I was always hoping,
That you would come along,
Like the answer to a prayer,
And the music to a song


◄ A Dream Come True


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M.C. Newberry

Wed 18th Nov 2015 17:15

Nice, gentle love song with a satisfying pay-off, that could be rewarded with a tune to match.
In verse 2 I would have been tempted to use something
like -
"You're the rhythm to my rhyme" - for the last line.
But that's me being subjective...nothing more.

Allen Jo Mathews

Wed 18th Nov 2015 02:05

Thank you very much for the feedback I'll make sure I'll make the necessary changes in the ones coming up.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 17th Nov 2015 20:00

A delightful little piece, charming, consistently lyrical and well-rhymed.

Because it is a 'page presentation, perhaps you might eliminate your commas after the end words 'before' and 'hoping'; they seem to interrupt the flow of a thought for no reason. Running a line 'idea' from one into another is very acceptable, very adept.

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