Thank you! :) Ya i fixed the errors for the copy in my journal. haha. Appreciate the feedback Graham.
Comment is about Our World. (blog)
Original item by Amelia
Paris silent
You require a Paris street,
With the roaring silence chest
While Paris is cold, hostile ..
As a silent funeral, unknown ...
Require fever, anxious, in panic ...
Looking at Hotel "Duplex"
Require road "Emil Zola"
Looking at Hotel "Mirabeau"
Require road "Sever" "Cambronne"
But you're not! There you are!
Looking at "First Hotel" ...
Require rue "Pondishery"
"Motte Piquett" "Piero" coffe "
Looking at "Bonne Nouvelle"
"Petit Duke" There at the Arch of Ludovigut ...
"Aboukir" "Bastije" ... ??
If you are not! Where are you?
A hand with sweet Stroke hair.
As once streets of Tirane
When I was a child, at come in hand with you
It was the most beautiful time of my life
Respire! I understand where are you,,
You feel very close me..I feel
As once ....My Mother...
Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)
Original item by Leon Qafzezi
You can find more of my work on line including some performance videos simply by searching for SUBACCHI POET.
Comment is about LOVE (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Reads nicely, especially v3 and v6.
A couple of typo's in v1 and v5
Well paired down this one Amelia
Comment is about Our World. (blog)
Original item by Amelia
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Thu 25th Dec 2014 11:12
Thanks M.C.
Have a nice day
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I bet Marie Lloyd and those of a famous time in
the music hall would have done something with
this. Cheeky and consistently enjoyable in a
great tradition.
Comment is about Song - Me Baby ... (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Some honest pain can be understood but some
proof-reading to correct errors might be
appropriate.
Check your words and in the main
You'll be welcome back again.
:-))
Comment is about Fuck You (blog)
Original item by Spoken_Thoughts
Not at all....
On the other side, your thoughts are much more clear about the mysteries that life has for us.
Thanks for sharing
:)
Comment is about Undead (poet profile)
Original item by Undead
Thank you, Graham and Laura for taking the time to help me with your comments and yes, Laura, I had missed the 'to', thanks. I hope to get time to look at it, consciously, and see what might be needed. As a performance piece, it is written on my heart and all changes will take some chiselling!
Nothing daunted, I'm about to stuff a turkey, serve Christmas lunch a day early and go present distributing amongst 3 of my 6 so Shipwreck must wait. Hope you all have a wonderful Christmas!
Comment is about Shipwreck (blog)
Original item by Judi Strega
Oh Annie! I enjoyed this so much when you performed it, especially with that ugly little 'baby' in your arms... what a hoot! You constantly surprise me and I like that!
Comment is about Song - Me Baby ... (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Merry Christmas Natalie!
Comment is about This Christmas (blog)
Hello Jack - thank you for the lovely comment you made about my gannet song.
Comment is about Jack purvis (poet profile)
Original item by Jack purvis
Amusing definitely
Comment is about “Darling! Are you in the bath?” (blog)
Original item by Mikhail Smith
Having just taken up poeting I cannot speak learnedly about content or rhythm. But it created pictures for me
Comment is about Song for a dead gannet (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Merry Christmas John.
Level pegging with the Arse at Christmas ain't soooo bad!
I wonder what 2015 will hold.
I just hope we can keep hold of Harry Kane and not lose him.
Best wishes for a good Christmas to you and yours.
Come on you Spurs!!
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
like the structure to this natalie.
excellent as always from your stuff.
have a great xmas and thanks for your support
Comment is about This Christmas (blog)
It dines with hours, it sleeps with time.
It joins a poem that I is in control
I like this line so much I see no reason for I to stay alone.
Comment is about Amelia (poet profile)
Original item by Amelia
This was a naughty one for Christmas, Laura. Glad you liked it. Merry Christmas to you and your loved ones too. Xxx
Comment is about LE PERE FOUETTARD (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks 'Write Out Loud' for your support and kind words, if you'd like to hear our setting of Sassoon's 'The Dug-Out' (read by Siegfried Sassoon himself) and Owen's 'Anthem', here is the YouTube link http://youtu.be/G3KhDx9fjdU Merry Christmas all
Walter Wray (LiTTLe MACHiNe)
Comment is about A happy new year to all - and here's a look back at the poetry of 2014 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 23rd Dec 2014 10:10
ohhh! pained poetry!and about the profane language-that really fucking annoys us! We can't stand bastard people who bleedin' swear!
xx
Comment is about Fuck You (blog)
Original item by Spoken_Thoughts
Sorry, about the language. I was really mad.
Comment is about Fuck You (blog)
Original item by Spoken_Thoughts
Hope you don't mind, I liked the idea of your topic...So I added on a little more of what popped in mine. :)
So then what is life?
Is it an example to lift from earth to moon?
An imaginary tale of a storyteller from that moon?
Shall be a gift of a noon chirping on a clock.
But what sense does it dot if the I was never to be written.
What is life?
A secret addition of a joke hidden.
A curse, none the less, but of wise man's words bitten.
What is life?
A feeling emerging from one tale to the next.
War being fed to the hungry of powerless heads.
Comment is about Undead (poet profile)
Original item by Undead
Word of advice, it's not all about sounding sophisticated. It's not really about the big words with the big deep meanings. You can have a simple basis of the English words, just gotta twist them around to make it a little more tricky. I don't have a high vocabulary myself. But sometimes just understanding how to mix the words will help a great deal. Good luck with Blue.
Comment is about Mark Cacho (poet profile)
Original item by Mark Cacho
David Strong
Mon 22nd Dec 2014 21:44
thanks for your lovely comment , the bit you mention is about loss at sea and how we feel open in the presence of nature
Comment is about WHILST THE SEA SINGS PRAYERS (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
A Muslim Calvinist... whatever next.
Comment is about 'Muslim Calvinist' Imtiaz Dharker wins Queen's Gold Medal for Poetry (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (9882)
Mon 22nd Dec 2014 20:06
(last four couplets)
....and all the same to you chuck!x
Comment is about This Christmas (blog)
<Deleted User> (5592)
Mon 22nd Dec 2014 19:17
Steve,
Thanks.
As background, this was written end of celebrated big freeze of winter 1962/63 - I'm really that old.
The other protagonist could be pretty cold-hearted, also.
Comment is about Delirium in winter: the destination of snow (blog)
Original item by David Andrew
As for me I always enjoy listening to your poems, to your voice, John. Thank you very much and ...
Merry Christmas!
Comment is about LE PERE FOUETTARD (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
You are so good, M.C.Newberry! Thank you very much for all the wishes. But ... it looks that ... sometimes not everything depends on us.
Merry Christmas!
Comment is about The 22nd of December (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
It's not so easy to make the right choice.And who will tell me if it is good or bad? For me it doesn't really matter if you are Christian or Muslim. There is no a supreme religion or nation.They say that man is God's creation. But...to my oppinion today every person creates himself without waiting for the kind Elf.
Anyway, good poem, I like it.
Comment is about CONSIDER THIS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks for the reminder about the time of darkest
winter and the slow lengthening of the days to come.
Now - a long-distance note of greeting at
Christmas time -
"May hope and joy return to Ukraine
May its people be free from hardship and pain
May its future burn bright with an unquenchable
flame
And may its children stand proud and rejoice in
its name."
Merry Christmas!
Comment is about The 22nd of December (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
A most unusual production with the sad cruel inevitability of a wild thing meeting death
given a haunting interpretation.
I remember during a hike across the highlands
of Scotland finding the body of a large crow (I
think) that had been caught in a trap (that had
not been inspected as it should have been) and
had died a lonely and protracted death. I
would have kicked the person responsible for that trap and for his neglect! This post brought it back to mind.
Comment is about Song for a dead gannet (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
It's a hard life for us poor men - especially
when women wish it was harder! :-)
One man's mate is another man's poison - if you'll
forgive the misquote.
Comment is about A Fool (blog)
Original item by Spoken_Thoughts
Hi Anthony! Thanks for kind comments on my gannet song.Hope you have a great Christmas!
http://youtu.be/n0D48VeegOg
;)
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Hi Laura - thanks for the lovely comments on my gannet poem. I managed to record it myself using a programme called Garage Band on a friends computer. It's the first time I've recorded effects and stuff myself - loved doing the echoes! The only instrument I used was a little child's xylophone, just tapping two or three notes. Setting up all the echoes you get lots of accidental rhythms going on. Hope you have a great Christmas! xx
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 21st Dec 2014 18:21
And Amen to those lovely sentiments Noris!
Same greetings to you and yours-ENJOY!xx
Comment is about Christmas... (blog)
Original item by Noris Roberts
thanks for the kind comments on 'a wee dram' Gray - pleased that you liked it - cheers mate ;-)
Comment is about Gray Nicholls (poet profile)
Original item by Gray Nicholls
thanks for the kind comments on 'a wee dram' mate - here's a toast to you and yours for the festive season - hic ;-)
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
thanks for the kind comments on 'a wee dram' MC - I will raise a glass and cheer you this very evening - hic ;-)
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
thanks for the comments on 'wee dram' Laura - yes, I reduced the swearing at the Old Courts as I knew it would offend your delicate ears ;-)
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 20th Dec 2014 11:09
soooo cooool! my previous reference to 'lukewarmly'was due to early morning 'head fuzz'..got my Preeti's mixed up with my Natalies!
It was a word Preeti had used (now changed) in one of her poems.'Fool me' I think it was,that she has rewritten.
Off to join the stampede now-see yer later chuck!
x
Comment is about Being Real (blog)
Preeti Sinha
Sat 20th Dec 2014 10:47
I agree ! No one can guide you better than yourself if you learn to listen and trust your inner voice or hunches. Or gut instincts. Love your work for being honest,and, unpretentious !
Comment is about Guiding Star (blog)
Although the fear is that the Grey Horse will eventually become just another 'gastropub' - we passed just such an establishment, completely deserted, on our way to R&M on Thursday night - the owners, Young and Co, have held out the possibility that poetry could return to the pub at some point in the future.
In an email reply to Write Out Loud, Young's business development manager, Jeff Bygraves, said: "We have been actively trying to recruit new tenants for the pub since Richard & June, who have been our tenants for 14 years, gave us notice in May on the grounds of Richard reaching retirement age. Although we have had numerous interested parties, no one has as yet come forward with a suitable proposal for the pub.
"Richard & June are due to leave in the first week of January. As we have no new tenants, we are taking this opportunity to close the pub and carry out some essential remedial works to the building, including some roof repairs, which may require scaffolding to be erected. During the time of the works, we are hopeful that a suitable new tenant will come forward.
"Regarding the Rhythm & Muse nights, or indeed any other forms of live entertainment, these will depend on the business plan of the new tenant, and whether they see it as part of their overall plan. I would suggest that, once we have a new tenant in place, the organisers of Rhythm & Muse introduce themselves to the new tenants."
Comment is about 'Hot spot' Rhythm & Muse goes out with stylish finale of poetry and music at the Ram Jam (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Awesome start, but how about the A2345 straight living people. you know, the ones in inbetween.
Or the cheeky jacks who get lucky flirting with a tenner.
Yous should build on it dude.
Comment is about On the Cards (blog)
Original item by J F Keane
Tommy Carroll
Sat 27th Dec 2014 00:07
I have difficulty getting the gist of this piece Amelia. A confusion of ideas (no bad thing) I'm grabbing at thorny vines here...but then again...Tommy
Comment is about Our World. (blog)
Original item by Amelia