Your Words (Haiku)
I've never written a Haiku before.... your feedback is most welcome (& probably necessary!!) thanks ;) xx
Your words used to thrill
Your words once held me tight, but
Now your words scream lies
Comments
Sadly expressed. :-(
Thank you Stu! I shall keep trying - I like the challenge of the new!!
Hi Vicki
The crux of the haiku form is there, the correct syllabic content and you have even put the 'pivot' line in the middle. A fine first attempt!
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Vicki Ayers
Sun 7th Feb 2016 01:35
Sad yes - but better off without I think!