Harry I see you're still troubling over one of my older efforts "Sis".
Having read through it one thing that comes back to me upon further reading is that it suggests my father was a violent man (nothing could be further from the truth).
Things changed that night, for my sister, parents and myself. It took the eventual death of both my parents before my sister and I could come to terms with each others feelings.
I'm humbled that you still read it and comment.
best regards,
Graham
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Did I feel the shadow of Betjeman with this Jim?
When the Cotswolds have a litter problem, people must die.
Thanks, Ray.
Comment is about COTSWOLD STONE VILLAGES (blog)
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Vividly expressed and upsetting...x
Comment is about THE TREE (blog)
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Beautifully expressed yet horrific and gut wrenching x
Comment is about EMPTY (blog)
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Thanks for recent comments o sister! xx
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Cheers for recent comment Jim...v. kind
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Thanks Greg for recent comment :)
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Cheers for your recent comment Ray
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Thanks for your comment Sister...this memory always makes me cry xx
Comment is about The Day Of Her Leaving (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
This theme suits the villanelle.
Comment is about They Are Not Gone (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Space grist to the mill of romantic poetry!
Mind, It`s not helpful the way space seems to be getting more dense at the same time that the particles of the down under (or within) have gone vanishingly minute.
I wish I could understand intellectual reliability of the maths equations they use to test this stuff.
Every time you see some of these scientists on the tele these days they seem to confess to being more and more puzzled.
This one is good with the aptness of the science bits to the attractional theme. (but a bit `difficult`)
It would read better without the large bold.
Comment is about Event Horizon (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13947)
Sun 7th Feb 2016 19:36
It's good to see it all together. The progression of life. The little bits that stand out of all the days we live. What we remember. In part 3 I really enjoyed the lines "Dream Knew It Was Time Start Counting Breaths" It actually made me stop and think. Made me question at what point in our lives do we start doing that? Counting breaths? Counting days? When do we become so concerned with how many we will have left? I very much enjoyed part 3 and reading it all as a whole. Thank you for sharing xx
Comment is about GOT LIFE? (blog)
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Sun 7th Feb 2016 18:11
definitely have to walk in someone elses shoes to understand this kind of terrible kind of life.Not meaning to brag but I donate monthly food parcels to the Maundy relief charity in Accrington.They do a fantastic job.One of the founders Sister Dorothy McGregor (who passed away not long ago) was truly a living saint. Good luck to you Tina,God bless.Keep the faith and keep this subject alive on write out loud.Thank you. Jemima.x
Comment is about Being Homeless (blog)
Original item by Tina Rooney
Sun 7th Feb 2016 17:57
so so true Trevor.I like your 'farewell to ziggy' poem.I am working on one called 'the man who fell to space' an 'adaptation' if you like of the film(title) he starred in called 'he man who fell to earth' His supposed last words being 'hey look up I'm in heaven' so I've taken from those words and the film title the idea for my poem.So surprised he (Bowie) didn't have his ashes sent into space like Gene Rodenberry (I think his name was) the or one of the creators of Star Trek. Very surprised indeed! would have been soooo cool!
Comment is about They Are Not Gone (blog)
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Sun 7th Feb 2016 17:47
very nice optimistic poem.
Comment is about NOTHING IS IMPOSSIBLE (blog)
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Lynn Hamilton
Sun 7th Feb 2016 16:49
Colin
Thanks for the inspiration. I jotted down a few lines called 'Format' X
Comment is about EQUILIBRIUM (blog)
Lynn Hamilton
Sun 7th Feb 2016 16:47
Hello Wolfie
It's amazing what you can do with a control button! Colin and yourself need to watch out for my next trick.
If I've understood you correctly, you are reading this as equality in a relationship between two people? If so, I totally get that as when I finished and read over and felt that too.
I wrote this from a purely economical perspective about supply, demand, the equilibrium price and how some suppliers will go to any lengths, with complete disregard for human life, to make money. Often out of harrowing situations.
Thanks for reading
Lynn X
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The come-down after the adrenalin rush.
I've often thought how awful it must be when a musician moves from playing for fun, to it becoming a job. Not sure I could ever have handled that, personally.
Nicely written. Thought-provoking.
Comment is about MUSICIANS ON THE MOVE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Ray
I really like the 'old Englishness' of this, and I smiled at the "sniffiness" of Broadway.
Comment is about COTSWOLD STONE VILLAGES (blog)
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Yes thank you .But unlike other languages the English word 'you' works for both genders.
In my poems I am not expressing my feelings only. I try to express the feelings of others.
The message I want to convey reading psychology is
<<Before rushing to conjugal felicity lovers have to do ego massaging work or they have to sweet talk their lovers to bed.>>
#sweet #talking #wooing #impotence
Yes unless it is a descriptive poem the shorter a poem the better.I have 2 lines poem as well as 40 line long ones to.
Comment is about Ego-rocking words (blog)
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Thanks Yvonne.
I'm persevering, as you do :)
Comment is about First Walk with Hearing Aids (blog)
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Sad yes - but better off without I think!
Comment is about Your Words (Haiku) (blog)
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Greatly appreciate your sharing this, Greg and Stu.
I have numerous tales to recall - I could muster up some more musical bile in that direction, I'm sure!
I remember a line from Bill Withers' a Lovely Day "bears heavy on my mind." The problem with the bigger bands is the lack of personal expression - just being a jigsaw piece when the picture was all too familiar.
ps mortgages have to be paid.
Comment is about MUSICIANS ON THE MOVE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Sat 6th Feb 2016 21:24
Hi Steven.Reading this poem gave me such a lovely warm feeling.So easy to 'sink into'
Comment is about Coffee for Two (blog)
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Lynn Hamilton
Sat 6th Feb 2016 19:27
Hi Colin. I'm breathing in and out slowly and counting backwards from one hundred. X
Comment is about EQUILIBRIUM (blog)
Sat 6th Feb 2016 18:59
is this to do with a bad choice in women Alem? Reads that way.I love poems that aren't too long winded.
Comment is about Ego-rocking words (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 6th Feb 2016 17:59
can't say I took much notice of the words Lynn - just gazed in wonder at the format - how does it feel?
I'll read again later. That's a promise. x
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"Differences make themselves" Tommy x
Comment is about Just in Time (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Thank you for getting the gist!
Comment is about Must Your Gratitude Be A Knife? (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
lovely ray. you paint a picture of someone who fell in love with music but then realised the worst place to love music was in a band. gentle recollections but tinged with sadness i feel.
Comment is about MUSICIANS ON THE MOVE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Your tales of life on the road, Ray ... I see the beginnings of a collection here
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thanks michelle! i actually went to school with michelle, and she did have an awful compulsion to turn off switches. However, I am happy to report she lives with a husband and two kids in Berlin now. I agree, kids are extremely cruel!
Comment is about switch (for michelle) (blog)
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Just came across this. Love your writing Stu. This should be a compulsory read when you arrive at Secondary School. M:)
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Thank you for your ongoing feedback Cynthia, it is really appreciated. I enjoyed writing that one and it still makes me smile when I read it : )
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Thank you Nigel, your comments and feedback always drive me on too
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
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yes a second to that from Stu Buck.
the last two that i posted here are meant to be written with an epic scale :) i m trying to push the boundaries i do love a big poem. in scale in theme :) these excerpts are also interesting in themselves.
I have never got all the way through Milton's Lost. these days its all about the netflix series haha.
good stuffs
Comment is about the muslim's tale xii (blog)
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I've commented on the next part..
It is very similar to the 'lady of Shallot' in ways like that of which they are locked away and waiting for a man to come.The style is similar.
The verse concerning the broken horses is a particular wow..i wrote a poem with these lines
'...at the glacious stare of the long dead, long suffering, lacerated mare. Mating flies and festering there...gruesome horses indeed.
i think this is great writing.
Comment is about the muslim's tale xiii (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
wow this is great.
i love the form and the telling of the tale.
some great imagery.
'they knew enough of bees and flowers
and the stamen touched in midnight hours'
its reminiscent of Tennyson.
brava
Comment is about the muslim's tale xiv (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13947)
Sat 6th Feb 2016 01:39
I look forward to it Gee :) No apologies. Use all the words you want xx
Comment is about THOSE DAMN DUCKS (blog)
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thanks stu.
i have written much for this site for a while. a few years ago i was writing all the time here...anyway with my degree and actual life i don't have as much time for poetry. But it has been nice to be welcomed with your comments on the 'miracle' and nice to remember how much fun there is in feed backing others stuff.
you're poems are cool.
(congrats on baby) please don't write loads of gooey poetry about it tho hahah only joke xxx
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
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I understand why you are annoyed Laura but I am confused by your declaration of clarity
you appear to believe that there is some version of islam is just like the quakers - and in doing so you disrespect the bravery of mr fayadh, in writing what he did - and the other poets imprisoned for writing in a similar candid fashion
Comment is about Poet reprieved from execution but still faces 800 lashes and long jail term (article)
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RM I have GOt Life complete will load up after weekend.. and thanks for your words.. means much.. i apologize for taking excerpts of your work.. it was soooo good... peace..
Comment is about THOSE DAMN DUCKS (blog)
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What would any bloke have in his fridge, Stoopid!
Comment is about 70m DASH (blog)
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You are right, Stu. But you will have to use your imagination as to what he did on his stag night that attracted the attention of the police.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 8th Feb 2016 07:36
very good
Lynn -
very
clever
my
inspiration
perhaps
your
imagination
no less
but I
sense
your
old
format
has won
you back?
whatever
next -
we
wait
and
see
x
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