Funny, funny, funny - with a razor edge to cut to pieces. Great conclusion. This writing must help hugely to keep you laughing instead of screeching. Whatever does the job, yes?
Comment is about Packed Lunch (blog)
After talking to Doug Broadhurst about a painting called Celebration I put together a poem called Poetic Shades.
This acrylic on wood stands out from a superb collection of Art and he is joined by five other artists who have put all their work on view for this exhibition.
Comment is about Write Out Loud open mic sessions linked to exhibition at Stockport art gallery (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
thanks graham,
having a wife who is currently studying greek mythology, I was edging closer to Gaia the primordial deity here, but I do find Gaia theory fascinating and it could almost (almost) be applied to this I feel.
I'm glad its provoked some feelings, thats what I had hoped.
Comment is about running running (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
The Gaia hypothesis, also known as Gaia theory or Gaia principle, proposes that organisms interact with their inorganic surroundings on Earth to form a synergistic self-regulating, complex system that helps to maintain and perpetuate the conditions for life on the planet.
Having seen how urban desolation is quickly reclaimed by nature (Gaia) this dystopian scene you paint so vividly would be a bit like foot-shooting Stu.
Shit, blood, rape and ejaculation are all simple organics and will eat themselves two-headed snake fashion.
A great canvas this one.
Comment is about running running (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
thanks both.
ray - someone mentioned the word earlier on something i was watching and i re-fell in love with it. it just rolls of the tongue!
harry - yes, i have a bit of a thing for taking mankinds treatment of the world and warping it into surreal/hallucinogenic scenes. i am always interested in other views on the current state of affairs and im glad i have provoked one.its global warming and everything really. im currently reading naked lunch so im in quite a negative mindset!
Comment is about running running (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I love this too, especially 'painting colours inside my eyes'.
Comment is about Fusion (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Stu,
This reads a bit homunculii causing global warming to me.
The gaia hypothesis is suspected by some scientists as
a way of trying to get back to metaphysics via physics.
(the idea that there is some sort of huge teleological plan
to the world...or that it is somehow self-regulating.)
Man (your homunculus?) is certainly the problem.
It is a fascinating theory, but as a Christian, convinced that we were all bunged out of some gaia-like garden of Eden
aeons ago, I don`t really regard our present domicile as
permanent anyway.
Mind - for someone who might - you have conjured up
a suitably horrific poetic kind of secular hell.
Comment is about running running (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I’m always blowing the candles out,
Grinning through the psalms,
Laughing through the prayers,
I can’t walk into church with you
But I can meet you by the graveyard,
Inspired lines.
I particularly like the doves, the grace etc
Comment is about Fruit In My Fist (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
Thanks Stu for your comment on Mother Nature the flower seller. I was quite surprised at the plethora of response. I was thinking of the lady in a Christmas Carol with the little waifs - it does seem be an enduring image.
Hope you're keeping up with all your responsibilities and getting lots of joy. !
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
The word homunculus is just fantastic and keeps on coming. A very powerful event throughout Stu. Hardly any descriptive stone is left unturned. A rip roarer if I may say!
Comment is about running running (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
thanks for the comment harry and yes a lot of soul searching will have to go on
Comment is about Don’t Take Me to the airport (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
very good ray. reminds me of a line from a book i just finished by louis-ferdinand celine;
'outside the kiosk the soda-water lady seemed to be slowly gathering the evening shadows around her skirt'
not sure why but its a great book by a great author so its a compliment!
lots of beauty and wisdom here
Comment is about MOTHER NATURE THE FLOWER SELLER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
thanks for your comment patricia and stefan , and well put
Comment is about Don’t Take Me to the airport (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Thanks Harry and Alexandra. Very nice to be appreciated in one's efforts. Makes it all worth while.
I always sweat over my poems these days to get the best I can.
Comment is about MOTHER NATURE THE FLOWER SELLER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
The officer's quoted words have the ring of irresistible
rhythm to them. My imagination takes me further.
"Step back onto the sidewalk sir"
Was accompanied by the bump
Of a baton designed to deter
As I looked for Donald Trump.
The press pack watching were impressed
As far as I could see
And made a note when I confessed
To my role in poetry.
Three thousand miles to spread the word
And undermine the sword
That waves with virtuous wrath incurred
Where most don't go abroad
On my every word they hung
Where English seems a foreign tongue.
As I left their voices followed me:
"There goes a man of poetry.
Whatever your political fence
He'll bring you words that make fine sense."
:-)
Comment is about 'Step back onto the sidewalk, sir': searching for the poetic side of Donald Trump (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (5011)
Wed 23rd Mar 2016 19:00
I would love to hear from writers out loud who used to be involved in the old poem of the month and see if we can get their support for this.
Comment is about Coming soon ... picking a Poem of the Week on Write Out Loud (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
...and another thing, Harry. You're not offered gas and air or pethidine or an epidural in expectation of a tollchock to the yarbles.
Comment is about ALWAYS THINKING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
To Oldly go where no competition has gone before!
About time too.
Comment is about Martin Figura to judge new award for older poets (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Well-wrought - with considered construction that has a
powerful message.
There is unease insofar that these lines could be
adopted to suit any viewpoint - the mention of "drones"
adds to this wider context.
Comment is about No Matter Where (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
This would be a good one for open mic!
Comment is about Irish and Proud (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
I love the imagery. The interjected speech really adds voice, the rhyming also works very well
Comment is about MOTHER NATURE THE FLOWER SELLER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
This flows so well & speaks a strong message
Comment is about No Matter Where (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
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Wed 23rd Mar 2016 17:41
Well, you have to laugh. I was handed a bumper sticker saying Never Trump which, for us northerners, has a rather amusing connotation.
The sticker came from a Republican group opposed to having Trump as the candidate. They have been considering urging Republicans to vote for Hillary Clinton rather than have him represent their beloved Republican party.
Incredible, and scary when you remember how Hitler was treated as a joke at first. The other parallel is the increasing violence at his rallies, which he encourages and condones, even offering to pay the perpetrators' legal fees.
He has also said, apropos of Brussels, that they should arrest all the muslims in the neighbourhood and torture them because someone knows who did it. Waterboarding, it seems, is too good for them.
Comment is about 'Step back onto the sidewalk, sir': searching for the poetic side of Donald Trump (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
very good Cynthia. I can never imagine you finding yourself in such a position. Will you be reading this next month?
Comment is about Privacy was never promised ... (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I was trying to decide why I liked this other than the fact it is your usual excellent use of words and I think it is in part the description of the history teacher at the beginning as being a bit of a relic rounded off nicely with the sunset.
Nice one Stu.
Which nights are the Shrewsbury WOL?
Comment is about 22.3.16 (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
John,
I am eternally grateful that I fathered well before all this `go in and see it born` thing (but I like it on the tele)
Nuts?..never!...but I was butted a few times :)
Comment is about ALWAYS THINKING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Simon,
Although - at this time - we read this with reference to the present troubles, the unspecificity of the (well handled) stanzas would make it usable against any kind of
terrorist group.
Comment is about No Matter Where (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
But we will all keep going nevertheless..until - as some guy on the tele said today - `we deal with the ideology`
Iran and Saudi Arabia are going to have to come together on this one.
A recent (glimmer) of example was the meeting of the Latin and Orthodox heads of Christianity in Cuba recently.
If only...?
Comment is about Don’t Take Me to the airport (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
What if you spent the first half of your life raising three kids and working jobs to finance their fashion habits?
Comment is about Martin Figura to judge new award for older poets (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Congratulations Ray,
At last! a modern poem which actually gets some (country wench) actual beauty in it and remain stubbornly modern.
(It`s a very hard thing to do)
Even the honesty of the reminder in the last four lines!
Comment is about MOTHER NATURE THE FLOWER SELLER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks for your comment Cynthia. I guess I'm a bit wedded to the pentameter in the first four lines of these stanzas. When I read it through originally, I was checking I got the syllable count right. It might indeed scan better as you suggest - I'll give it some thought.
Comment is about Of Starlings (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Simplified, astrometry is part of the discipline of astronomy that measures the movements of stars and other celestial bodies.
Comment is about The Wanderer (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Vicki - I feel I should get my paddle out and explore your rapids! Hope your not afraid of whitewater.
Rob
Comment is about Riversong (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Vicki - you really are a naughty pixie and your preferred themes give you away. THAT SAID, YOU CERTAINLY HAVE A GIFT FOR IT! This piece is terrific.
Rob
Comment is about Synaesthesia (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
'Holly and red berries' are symbols of the 'crown of thorns and the droplets of blood upon the face of Jesus' in the Passion Story of Eastertide. Considering the week, maybe your dream is not so unusual. Perhaps some memory twigged in your mind, even from childhood, especially a ghastly image. Or you're still fighting emotional ideas about the Story you can't yet confront rationally. Maybe never.
That'll be £1000, please. HAHA. I have more crust than bread. I'm part joking and part serious about the comments though. I read Freud's 'Dreams' many years ago; I thought I'd found a treasure in an old second-hand bookshop. But - after several attempts to 'understand the great thinker' I just pitched it. Some of it made some sense, and some of it seemed just like hogwash. I was totally disillusioned in its reputation. So, I'll never know whether I wasn't smart enough to understand, or smart enough to toss it out. Conundrum!
I love having you as a friend. The freedom!
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Not a bad suggestion guys. Wrote the poem at work after seeing the sad news on TV but not happy with the last few lines.
Comment is about Words instead of Bombs (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
Welcome to WOL. There must have been a lot of talent bubbling away for years just beneath the surface, a talent for acute observations, and a way with words, in whatever job you were in.
Comment is about Trevor Alexander (poet profile)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Hahaa - brilliant Cynthia! Cleverly unfurled (hmm - should that be uncurled?!) this poem, and I have to say that 'digging about' did make me wince a little. I'd say it'd be unintentional in another writer, but it's you, so it's not :p
I had a night terror the other night involving a dangerously threatening branch of a holly tree with bright red berries. That's a first. Still pondering that one. It's usually spiders.
Anyhoo - I thoroughly enjoyed this :D
ps, there's an 'i' missing from 'digging'
Comment is about Privacy was never promised ... (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Much enjoyed, a fine picture of the captivating event.
When you are developing your lines, may I suggest that you read them aloud for smooth flow. For example:
'Then rise again in dawning light
To repeat again the diurnal rite
Of starlings.'
All I have done is omit 'early', which makes a little hiccup in the rhythm without adding anything outstanding to the whole idea. Just an opinion that carries no more weight than that. I'm looking forward to going back and reading more of your work.
Comment is about Of Starlings (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
I like this very much. Science-oriented poetry rules! I like your skill of structure, which best shines when read aloud, after getting one's tongue around the vocabulary.
What exactly is 'astrometry', a measuring of the stars?
Comment is about The Wanderer (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Hahaaa - brilliant Julian! :D
I do hope we're gonna see more of these articles!
Comment is about 'Step back onto the sidewalk, sir': searching for the poetic side of Donald Trump (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Lynn, I've missed you! Thanks for commenting on the 'poo' poem.
I don't log on daily, sometimes only twice a week, and then I do try to catch-up with reading Poetry Blogs, and making comments if I wish. I must look like a comment-hog sometimes, but I have to do it when I can. So I tell myself - don't worry about it - just enjoy your couple of hours. There are some fine poems on WOL these days, and many fine poets who have not returned after a short 'relationship' with the site. It is impossible to be 'all things to all men', yes?
I like 'Teardrops in my Coffee'.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks Vicki. As I said by way of introduction, this is a story of my brother-in-law so I only stole it.
Comment is about ALWAYS THINKING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Everything is cyclical....indeed....and you make your point really well in the tone of this one, Katy
Comment is about Do not dismiss Mythology (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hahahaha! Keep thinking John!! As always love to hear to read xxx
Comment is about ALWAYS THINKING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Looking at the high standard of poetry posted here over the last few weeks, I'm looking forward to this!
Comment is about Coming soon ... picking a Poem of the Week on Write Out Loud (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 24th Mar 2016 10:46
IMO, a superb poem, the essence of what fine poetry really does - to evolve deep meaning in a few brilliant words. And the craftsmanship to express your idea.
Comment is about They lay (blog)
Original item by Ronnie Leek 1