Thanks for your kind words on 'Morning Mass' Ray. Very much appreciated. DB.
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Although Disappointment was meant as a stand alone poem, it could also have been seen as a follow up to Uncertainty.
That being the case, this poem is the finale.
Just a bit of fun, as they say.
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thank you Cynthia.
I am gratified it works as a stand alone poem, which is what I intended, although it would also serve as a follow up to Uncertainty.
I think the above is probably the most likely outcome, but there is another to follow, which changes things rather.
Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment is about Disappointment (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
What a lovely poem John - and a fitting tribute to your mum. It's good to read something from the heart. Glad to see you're still writing xx
Comment is about Her star (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
I don't get this, Graham. Pubs are places for men to get together to talk man stuff. Sheds are caves for whittling wood in on your own.
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
John you'll be joining this lot then?
www.menssheds.org.uk
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
London has long been the home of dreams - and the place
of nightmares for the unprepared.
I like these lines. They have a ring of recognition for me
from my many miles of peramulation during a career that
took me on to its streets...both beside and beyond the Thames 24/7 over three decades...East End and West End.
Comment is about By the Thames (blog)
Original item by Leo
I really enjoyed the surreal and dystopian nature of this...
Comment is about They (blog)
Original item by Tramping Artisan
Very clever Trevor (sorry). I'm sure you could have gone on forever with this one. Brilliant idea!
Comment is about Twisted History (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thanks Lynn and Lea for your appreciation . Lucky for me a curved blade has a rather sinister feel to it (in the wrong hands).
Wolfie: Thanks for investing this with your imaginative perception. I feel I needed to let it breathe and invite the mind in. Space is obviously a great medium for any appreciation of contemplation .
Cheers all.
Comment is about TIMESWEEP (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Dear Harry O'Neill
You hit right on the nail.
Such feedback helps aspiring poets down the road.
I noticed there are women poets that write on this sensitive issue not yet brought to the limelight.That is why I wrote a poem on it.
For example see the poem bellow by a girl with a pen name sucidal-sunrise
Leave me Alone
The voices
They won't leave me alone,
I scream
Yet,
They won't leave me alone.
They talk inside my head,
They talk about how my virginity was stolen on my bed.
I cry myself to sleep.
Leave me alone.
Comment is about Stop Licking A Wound! (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Greatly enjoyed this fast-paced work, the subject matter itself, and the way you have handled it with skilful poetic aplomb. Well done.
Comment is about Disappointment (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Lynn Hamilton
Wed 30th Mar 2016 12:46
Thank you Ginger for reading and commenting. x
Comment is about I'll try not to listen (blog)
Some sharp whimsical thinking is always a great contribution to any 'gathering of the minds' - in any context. And you've covered so many arenas - Literature, Film, Painting, Music, War.
In answer to your question, I wasn't totally familiar with all the songs, so missed your best shot. Too bad.
Comment is about Twisted History (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Lynn Hamilton
Wed 30th Mar 2016 10:53
Morning Martin. Thanks again for reading and your generous comments. I hope you are well x
Comment is about I'll try not to listen (blog)
Hi Lynn,
Thank you for your comments. The Evil Tree is the latest one that I've done. I'm starting to get more of an idea of what I want to write, but still figuring out this whole poetry thing.
I'll look out for your new poem.
Matt
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Brilliant venue yep - have performed there a few times meself. Ace people too, AND they have proper ginger beer!
Comment is about Write Out Loud Bolton is back - at new venue tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Sorry for the delay in replying Ray - been up the bloody wall again with Dad and work stuff.
Anyhoo, cannae remember the original now (!) but this ending reads well and does not set my teeth on edge or owt, so that's a result eh? ;)
And yes, yes they do think I'm bonkers :)
Comment is about BORN AGAIN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Wed 30th Mar 2016 03:48
Hi Ray, I enjoyed this, my favourite lines are 'through its socket like a sickle', and the first sentence of the second verse, thanks x
Comment is about TIMESWEEP (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Wise words, MC. I take my breakfast out to my shed and stay outside in the garden all day until tea-time. Our Gert stays indoors doing, well, Christ knows what. If she needs me I've rigged up a fishing line from the front door to a bell in my shed. Being apart is a recipe for harmony in the home.
Ray - I don't have any railway signs in there as yet but I do have some home comforts like a coffee machine, library, CD player, Christmas tree - you know, manstuff.
And the bit about the internal bolt is entirely true.
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I like this, Ray - a restless moon that grins down steady against the galaxy. Good descriptions.
Comment is about TIMESWEEP (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Like a Monet painting with sound effects ! So much subtlety in a simple scene is a great skill and viewed from an internalised interpretation. I like the steam engine prop to flesh it all out.
Ray
Comment is about Morning Mass (blog)
Original item by David Blake
The trouble with sheds is that people are always taking the piss out of them; but for me they're reet grand (and this is from one from darn sarf!!
Highly amusing and colloquial . I hope you have a few railway signs in there too John.
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I agree, this is very deep in emotions
Comment is about I'll try not to listen (blog)
Hi Matt, thank you for your comments on my profile, regarding my poems, and I am glad you like 'Uncertainty'. I've decided to post another which could be a sequel, although hopefully, it could read as a stand alone poem too.
I like your work, especially The Evil Tree. Welcome to Write Out Loud, and please keep writing and sharing.
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Original item by Matt
Thanks for your comments and encouragement fella's. it was one of those spur of the moment pieces that captured my thinking. everything seems to happen so quickly and easily without us being aware at times. Thus the title.
Thanks for the History details M.C. it certainly helps us to be more aware and therefore be careful in how we react. The recent death of a newsagent in Scotland who was liked be all the community and sent an encouraging message to his customers serves to underline this.
Thanks again
Comment is about Just a minute (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
This is fab Lynn. The feelings that you portray here often resonate with me. Particularly that of the dog. nice one
Comment is about I'll try not to listen (blog)
My kind of sentiments exactly, Ian. And a well written poem too.
Comment is about Catechism (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Noble sentiments - well put. But I'm troubled by this
recurring thought...
"When evil attends in spiteful might
Who still make a stand and fight?"
Comment is about Catechism (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hard hitting in its almost casual telling of an ordinary day
suddenly made something entirely different.
In terms of a historical footnote, let's go back over two
hundred years when Thomas Jefferson, one of the great
US presidents, was seeking a resolution to the Barbary
Wars: Algeria, Morocco, Tunis, Tripoli all seeking
levies for American hostages taken captive. The Tripoli
ambassador was asked why attacks should be made
on a country that was giving no offence to the nations
concerned and was told "it was founded on the Laws
of the Prophet, that it was written in their Koran, that all
nations who should not have answered their authority
were sinners, that it was their right and duty to make
war upon them wherever they could be found, and to
make slaves of all they could take as prisoners."
Jefferson resolved to confront and defeat the Barbary
Pirates. The US Navy and Marine Corps were
created - and did the job.
NOTE: It has been calculated that between 1530 and
1780 as many as a million and a quarter Europeans
were kidnapped and enslaved by Muslim autocracies on
the north west coast of Africa.
Comment is about Just a minute (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
The "matter of fact" mixed appealingly with a little human
sentiment for times past and what meant much in other
days being given up to time itself.
As a lover of rhyme I would have liked a little more of that
but that's me.
As for the subject: been there, done that.
All things change - for a little change!
Comment is about I came upon a car boot sale (blog)
Original item by Tramping Artisan
Aha...my sister tells me she's gifted a new shed for hubby
- wise woman!
"Young married men may love their beds;
Their older kind give thanks for sheds!"
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
This feels like deja vue Jim. This one and mine make a great pair - yours has a religious theme running through which is excellent. Mine is just grot that time forgot !
See you I hope....
Ray
Comment is about I came upon a car boot sale (blog)
Original item by Tramping Artisan
Hi Ronnie
Many thanks for your note on Mothering Sunday :)
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Thanks for y'note on Consequence Stu :)
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Original item by Stuart Buck
A fantastic venue, and one I recommend visiting (if you haven't already!)
Comment is about Write Out Loud Bolton is back - at new venue tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
A beautifully evocative picture of those quiet moments in our lives. Wonderful.
Comment is about 'He liked to watch the old houses stir awake' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Anthony, I can reassure you that the poem will be chosen each week *only* from poems posted that week. We haven't the time or the inclination to go delving into the WOL back catalogue!
Comment is about Coming soon ... picking a Poem of the Week on Write Out Loud (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Great fun, Cynthia. And topical too with the young lady in the news popping a poo in her purse.
Comment is about Privacy was never promised ... (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
A fine poem Ian,
The sad thing is that the poor guy in Glasgow was a man of words too.
Comment is about Catechism (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
It's important to give them a hard time like this once in a while, Harry.
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Alem,
I like your word-play between fickle, fiddle, and also
Fidel (fidelity?) in what must be for you an unfamiliar idiom.
Also that `Unfold the unexpected could`
And the alliteration in stanza seven.
The moral of the thing is spot on.
Comment is about Stop Licking A Wound! (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
When they`re like that you need the sanctuary.
I used to feel a lot better if I slammed the shed door as I went in (It was at the end of the garden, so I was still pretty safe)
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Concerning the occasion that this deals with:
Tony Blair`s comments that we are in for a very long slog
seems very relevant.
This poem deals with the ordinary casualness of the entry into the terrorised situation and the numbed daze of the after-shock very well.
Comment is about Just a minute (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Jim Trott
Thu 31st Mar 2016 03:36
I enjoyed this, Lynn. I wish my aunties had been like that, ha ha!
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye