Hugh this isn't the right forum to have a serious discussion about monotheism or atheism. I do not castigate anyone for being of a religious bent. One of my closest pals is a vicar. But you are wrong in your attestation:
"a good relationship founded on the loyalty of love is truly a gift from The Almighty".
I did have a choice and I chose well.
Comment is about A poet at prayer (blog)
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Hi Helen, I'm pleased that you picked up on 'melancholy'. Tommy
Comment is about the paint and the puddles (blog)
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Hi Graham. I have re-wrote this piece a number of times over the last 5 years and most changes have been concerning "tears" & "pain" and countless rejigging around them. Even the use of "pain" in verse 2 was rejigged after posting half-a-dozen times.
The wind it tackles
The leaves and the litter
The leaves and the litter
The leaves and the past
The sun it dries
The paint and the puddles
The paint and the puddles
The paint and the past
I saw the land quickly approaching
the bend in the river
that soon would be passed
I saw her look
I knew she was leaving
The leaves and the puddles
The paint and the past.
The original posting.
Quod pleno non compleuit sed abandomed
Comment is about the paint and the puddles (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Can't agree Hugh, sorry. As a confirmed atheist married for 44 years now I'm living proof you don't need an idol to believe in. Love exists in everyone. It's just the finding of it!
Comment is about A poet at prayer (blog)
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Good work Tommy.
I would have liked the first three (perhaps four five six) verses to have been identically repetitive before the last wonderful gathering up verse to summarize it all.
I like the style, well done.
Graham
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Original item by Tommy Carroll
The first thing that I can tell you is that I wanted to have Spinning Mule Elk Mill in the letters of the poem.
So I wrote it as an acrostic poem so that every first letter would spell that out.
Then I wanted it to sound like the mill, so I took the noise from recording of a mill with a spinning mule in.
And then I wanted it to be layers of how people would work for the weekend so they could have a drink so I put that in with words that I knew were northern slang and also mill slang.
And then I wanted it to go full circle so I put word in that would carry on so you'd get to the end and start at the beginning again.
My hope is that you can look up a lot of the words and phrases and trace them back to the mill.
Comment is about On a mat appears...(an early practice poem for a public art commission) (blog)
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Huw Thomas, I appreciate your comment. It was well observed and really on par with what I was going for.
Comment is about Left Without a Clue (blog)
Original item by Chandana
Thank you for your observation, it was on point. It is a poem about finding self.
Comment is about Out of Breath (blog)
Original item by Chandana
Really like this Tommy. It feels very lyrical and melancholy. Some nice poetic tools used with the repetition and alliteration. Good stuff!
Comment is about the paint and the puddles (blog)
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i dont know. i think everyone is looking for something different. but most people want to escape something! i remember going to a festival several years ago called buddhafield and seeing a myriad of people, all professionals, desperate to forget who they were. they were rolling around on the floor, dancing and singing. i spoke to a few of them while i was there, and they told me it was a good form of escapism. i myself have tried several forms of escapism. the trick is to have nothing to escape from, a difficult thing to achieve.
Comment is about ouroboros (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Who knows
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brian timmis
Sat 27th Jun 2015 12:29
only if the wrong to Robert Poste is righted.
and did the goat die?
Review is about Starkadder poetry open mic on 6 Jul 2015 (event)
Ray- re Taxi "weary inevitability" spot on. I could not have put it any better. Tommy
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Summer miller
Sat 27th Jun 2015 08:02
<Deleted User> (13947)
Fri 26th Jun 2015 20:32
"Static safety" I love this. Thank you for such a beautifully sad read. This has quickly become a favorite of mine.
Comment is about brahms (blog)
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<Deleted User> (10990)
Fri 26th Jun 2015 17:47
Crispin Blunt just came on the radio.
Comment is about MAKING A POINT (blog)
Well bless my Fanny Cradock's
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i assume this begins when the sukebind comes into bud
Review is about Starkadder poetry open mic on 6 Jul 2015 (event)
I like this a lot Cynthia, it's full of fun and wit. And agree with Philipos in it looking like you had fun writing this.
Comment is about Back To Basic Bacteria (blog)
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Loved your photo dorinda on the picture gallery from Marsden on the home page.
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Come to me.
Touch me.
Stay with me.
each repeated line
tells me
the longing you feel.
Comment is about Solstice (blog)
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A sharp comment at the end making the point very blunt.
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Here here Harry. You feeling like that too! They were the days eh?
Comment is about A poet at prayer (blog)
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Lynn Hamilton
Fri 26th Jun 2015 13:11
Yes. Having spent the majority of my 20's loathing the acts that made me able to write such a poem, i have, not often, done just the same. I have never been physically abusive to my wife, although we have had some blazing rows. She has given me a good whack on occasion though! I was glaringly under prepared for adult life, as I am guessing many of us were, and the stresses it brings. I think this is the major cause of a lot of these problems.
Comment is about brahms (blog)
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I never discussed them before either. I always felt that to do so would be admitting weaknesses existed in the parents i loved so much. now i am older (and a tad wiser) i see that in reality, they were just facing the problems most of us are plagued by, and dealing with it the best they could.
Comment is about brahms (blog)
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THanks T C for liking Snails. I checked out Taxi and thought it a fine piece, with a an air of weary inevitability that I have experienced when I was young enough to take that on the chin. Ray
Comment is about taxi (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
thank you! in a sense, this experience helped shape who i am today so i am grateful for it.
Comment is about twelve eyes of evil (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Cynthia.
Thanks for reading That Shallot. Glad it made you smile. Dave
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Thanks Cynthia.
She's had it coming. Ever since she broke that mirror!
Comment is about That Shallot (blog)
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Absolutely bloody love this love this poem having been involved with religious zealots and converted into one and enduring a silent mental breakdown ... well written and thought provoking loved it ( : x
Comment is about twelve eyes of evil (blog)
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Thanks again for your comment Huw. It makes my day!
Comment is about A TALE OF SNAILS (blog)
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quite alright david, I'm all for swearing when necessary!
thanks both again for the kind comments, its a difficult period of my life but one thats ripe for poetic justice.
Comment is about twelve eyes of evil (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
What if the book had been a 'gift'?
Comment is about Answer (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
When I read this it was like watching a plate spinner and a juggler at the same time. I was more nervous than the performers, but it all seemed to come good in the end. A challenging read, very avant garde, rather clever really.
well done Alexandra.
Comment is about Writing 'proper' poetry (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
I think it depends. I think historically, yes but otherwise no. I guess I'm a bit of a stickler for facts but for me poetry is about expressing my feelings outwardly. It is therapeutic and self healing. In saying that, I don't think grammar and any other literary rules are that relevant when someone has the courage to expose and publish their souls as they do in poetry - even though I'm somewhat of a stickler for grammar as well.
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Original item by Thion D. Morriaty
morning breath y.u.k. So much so I get up an hour before rising and brush my teeth and gargle and floss and do deep thoracic exercise to freshen my breath and I am renowned for morning breath like roses. Women lineup in order that they may be allowed to sleep with me and awake to my dental charms
. Tommy
Comment is about Writing 'proper' poetry (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
I guess I'm just a little shy (believe it or not!)
The "disobedient" reference is to do with the technical style of writing, in that I do free verse mostly and I'm not a stickler for "obedient" verse as it's known in the more academic/elite circles. I believe the love of language, and the expression and entertainment of it is enough to make it poetry.
I love Moon Month BTW, it's very powerful and an original take on being "on the blob" : )
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Preeti Sinha
Wed 24th Jun 2015 19:50
Park benches, lonely and cold, can carry simple tales of simple , ordinary people. Beautiful read !
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Preeti Sinha
Wed 24th Jun 2015 19:42
I love this! Hilarious! This is super :)
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<Deleted User> (13947)
Wed 24th Jun 2015 16:50
So beautifully sad, Mr. Buck. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment is about safety net (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
David, Huw, thank you so much.
It is amazing how much time I spent as a child wishing I could hurry up and be an adult. And now, all I want to do is regress! My daughter is only two, but already showing signs of striving to be all grown up.
'Youth is wasted on the young'
Truer words were never spoken.
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Lynn Hamilton
Wed 24th Jun 2015 13:41
Enjoyed reading this Mr Buck. The lines 'I always thought who calls their kid Godfrey and then I met is mum and I thought he got away lightly' are ace, in my humble opinion. x
Comment is about safety net (blog)
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Lynn Hamilton
Wed 24th Jun 2015 13:31
Thanks Helen, much appreciated. Time is a struggle and I do feel guilty that I do not read as much I write on this site. I do intend to rectify this. With that said, I have read some of your work. I do not make comments on peoples technical ability as I have no concept of what is and isn't right.... (I've just google stanza but don't tell anyone ;)). I just write and that's it. So I am not qualified or experienced enough to make sweeping comments on anyone else's work. I either like it or I don't and I like your work very much x
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Tommy Carroll
Sun 28th Jun 2015 14:35
Hi Helen, I'm pleased that you picked up on 'melancholy'. Tommy
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