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La vita e la morte

Life has drawn to a grinding, meandering pace

Where there once was happiness, pleasure and joy

Now only a void and darkness in its place

And the man I am is no longer the boy

As the smoke gracefully laps my pale face

Reaching gently my soul; a soothing decoy

From the pain and anger, with each fleeting breathe

As I sit and wait, contemplating death.

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Thion D. Morriaty

Thu 25th Jun 2015 08:12

I think it depends. I think historically, yes but otherwise no. I guess I'm a bit of a stickler for facts but for me poetry is about expressing my feelings outwardly. It is therapeutic and self healing. In saying that, I don't think grammar and any other literary rules are that relevant when someone has the courage to expose and publish their souls as they do in poetry - even though I'm somewhat of a stickler for grammar as well.

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Thion D. Morriaty

Wed 24th Jun 2015 05:14

The title is italian actually for 'life and death'. In respect to the kind of poem it is (Ottava Rima - of italian origin).

Thanks for the critique.

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