These lines just popped in my mind immediately after i read your lines.
Apologies in advance, that I wrote them without your consent.
Please let me know if you like them?
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flawless like moonlight
showered by rain
miraculously no thorn
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Comment is about Garden Thoughts (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
Thank you Winston! Yes, it's true that change is necessary for everything to exist. Without change even in our lives, life would be boring and meaningless. There would be no growth. How we deal with change defines us.
Comment is about Infinity (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
Liked this one. I used to hate change but now realise that life IS about change. It's what you do with those changes. Thx for sharing
Comment is about Infinity (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
Very nice poem! Great imagery.
Comment is about The evening sun (blog)
Thank you for posting, David! Flock of Seagulls is a great poem.
Comment is about Ali Bell (poet profile)
Original item by Ali Bell
Raypool: Thank you so much! That means a lot to me.
Cynthia: Thank you! Yes, I live in California, play music, and am in high school. Your words are very encouraging.
People like you two are what helps young writers like me to continue and improve. Thanks again. :)
After studying black holes a bit, I was inspired to write this poem. Surprisingly, I found that black holes are one of the least complex objects in space. I read that "black holes are certainly less complex than the human mind" and that lead me to wonder how amazing it is that a brain so small can be more complicated and less understood than a black hole light years away in outer space. This was also part of my inspiration for "Human Thought".
Comment is about Infinity (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
so am I
it is an issue of the style I am exploring - finding a way to free the language and at the same time drawing on it's etymological basis
and trying establish a grammatical format - through spacing word choice and the natural rhythms of speech - that is not immediately experimental - or unnecessarily surreal
hence my reference to the implied end-stopped enjamb - as one of the principle areas I have been working on is the notion of lines being statements/slogans
my apologies if my reply appeared flippant - was was not intended that way
Comment is about yellow (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
Delightful. I'm totally with you. Your interests should include all aspects of the innately wonderful, physical human body.
And never lose sight of 'silly':
'Just a squishy mass that is a brain'.
Great conclusion.
Comment is about Human Thought (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
The heart, depth and searching mind of a poet are yours, Ali.
The California girl, right? Still a student? And musical?
Comment is about Infinity (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
I don't know how I missed this before; but glad I've caught up. I really like the lyrical sense and the style of imagery of the Early Nineteenth Century Romantics (clinical term), nothing old-fashioned about it. Beauty is Beauty.
Comment is about The Wake of Dawning (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
just realised I wrote all that and didnt recommend any of their music...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yY2aHxWV1xE
this song will sum them up a lot better than i ever could.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Hello Ray,
Half man Half biscuit are a band from the wirral. They have been around for ages now, and were a massive part of my musical journey. The music is fairly basic, post-punk style but the lyrics are something else. They perfectly detail the monotony of living, the ridiculousness of celebrity culture and are very english! here's some of my favourite lines so you can see what you think;
You never hear of folk getting knocked on the bonce
Although there was a drive-by shouting once
I’m gonna feed our children non-organic food
And with the money saved, take them to the zoo
Did you play in the Garden of Eden?
Were the goalkeeper’s gloves to you tossed?
‘Cos it seems to me you’re the reason
You’re the reason why Paradise lost
although the line i instantly thought of when i read your piece was, somewhat bizarrely...
I want to perch myself halfway up a metal staircase with the Polydor girls and talk about meerkats
I dont do them much justice, but they really are fab!
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Stu for your assessment of K K .Perhaps you could give me an example of Half man half biscuit if possible , there's such a lot to learn in this poetry game. I'll take it as a compliment. Cheers, Ray
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
You old goat!
(Whatever works for us old uns, eh?)
Comment is about Whats in a Name (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Thank you, as ever Cynthia.
Romance as ever......how are you ? ...hope all is well.
Thank you once again.
Gus xx
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you, as ever Cynthia.
Romance as ever......how are you ? ...hope all is well.
Thank you once again.
Gus xx
Comment is about Whats in a Name (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
this runs very much like a half man half biscuit lyric, which is a huge compliment.
Comment is about I DREAMED OF KIM KARDASHIAN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
very powerful in its simplicity as Graham says. To me I can envisage a sort of frontier mind , in the almost casual inevitability of it.
Comment is about Vineyards (blog)
Original item by Alex Smith
HI : I am an old fella, but you appear young and I must say this is a very mature poem and so perceptive. There is more to it than meets the eye.... Super lines, enjoyed it.
Comment is about Infinity (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell
I see what you mean - the problems of the implied end-stopped enjamb....
*seeks metaphysical explanation for an inherent problem of style*
Comment is about yellow (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
A criticism of my case, Tommy, might be that goals were easier to come by in the 60's. I'd agree with that so I think the acid test would be the percentage of goals scored by Greaves, Rooney et al of all the goals scored in the games in which they played. I'd still wager that Greavsie would top the list.
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Warmly romantic, and sincere. The 'name' is personified in many ways, but very relate-able as the image compounds.
It's great to see you back on-line in Poetry Blogs.
Comment is about Whats in a Name (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
I want to read all your work, but not today. Duty calls. I've been too long at the keyboard already.
What do you teach?
You have a fine face; a man of the sun with a great smile. Presuming the photo is of yourself, but who knows? Regardless, it's a good image to accompany your work.
Comment is about Alex Smith (poet profile)
Original item by Alex Smith
A virulent sense of sarcasm, highly effective. There is nothing simple about this poem; more like milk and vinegar in a mixer (which result has many good uses in everyday life.)
I presume an 'ancestry' of pillage and rape, like almost anywhere in the wide world of war. It sure doesn't pin you down.
Comment is about Erotica (blog)
Original item by Alex Smith
This is a whole philosophy of life in a few lines, perhaps as the major undercurrent of a beloved religion. Very telling and influential.
Aren't you the gentleman from the western U.S., the chap who has a new farm? I'm going to check.
And, yes, you are.
Comment is about Vineyards (blog)
Original item by Alex Smith
Preeti Sinha
Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:10
I inspired you to write this! Wow, this is stunning! I wish I could understand poetry :o
You write so eloquently. There's no confusion in your head.
Comment is about A Poet's View (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Your ideas are captivating, and then your evocative images do them full justice.
Are you 'dripping rain within the bounds of your pulled-in coat?' Or do you actually mean something different? It's the 'when' that is puzzling. Or maybe a hyphen again after 'rain' - maybe that's it.
Comment is about yellow (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
You must be having a good laugh. Super job on the spelling and grammar errors.
Comment is about dont post a poem (blog)
Original item by Corr Lens
The last I heard JC was that it was going to be a long recovery. Never a good sign, could mean anything. Wasn't he about to invested into the THFC Hall of Fame. Can't believe he isn't in it already. I saw his one man show a few years ago in Northampton. Brilliant whit. Let's hope for the best.
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Alex Swarbrick
Tue 21st Jul 2015 05:00
I'm not sure John, but I think Rooney's record (so far) includes far more friendlies. If taken into account Greaves feat is even more impressive.
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Although he's out, Graham, I don't see any reports indicating much of a recovery.
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I'm hoping to perform it live soon. A bit angrier than my usual stuff but I'm just drawing off what I'm seeing around me in the city. Thanks for the kind words.
Comment is about Bleed (blog)
Original item by Joe-Conor Williams (Saboteur)
Alex Swarbrick
Mon 20th Jul 2015 14:48
Thank you. Kind of you.My day a bit hectic, making lots of fresh starts and tying up ends.
Will read some of your poetry soon :)
Comment is about Michelle (poet profile)
Original item by Michelle
excellent stuff, lynn. has a good beat to this piece. top stuff..
Comment is about EMOTION (blog)
looking forward to reading this guys. thank you
Comment is about Poetry School ebook (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
I have altered it
thanks
Just a bit tied up at the moment doing another called - - -
Enter the Forbidden Zone
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Alex the simplicity of this is endearing and the matter of fact albeit caring way you have dealt with death, quickly adds to its authenticity. One suggestion, vineyards.
Comment is about Vineyards (blog)
Original item by Alex Smith
Hi Cynthia, thank you for your kind comments. They lead me to share your own writing which I found passionate and exotic sitting here in Lancashire's cold July drizzle:)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Indeed, Harry. Thanks
Comment is about THE BALLAD OF THE FRIGHTENED EAGLE (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
In line 19..is it "bondage" rather than "bonage".
Please excuse my salacious curiosity...:-))
Comment is about Camp At Butch Farm (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
I'm not sure what this aaabb form is called, Harry. I first encountered it in an Alfred Noyes poem, "When Daddy Fell Into The Pond". It is a great comedic vehicle with its faux cliffhangers, especially the 4th lines.
Comment is about BARN DANCE (PROGRESSIVE) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Lynn Hamilton
Sat 18th Jul 2015 20:27
Thank you Stu for reading Emotion and your comments. My take on this was that just occasionally you have to pull the shutter of emotion down so that you can deal with a situation that needs to be dealt with or alternatively adopt a Paddington Bear hard stare!
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
ali bell
Thu 23rd Jul 2015 06:23
No need to apologize! Those lines are beautiful.
"Flawless like moonlight" could mean the purity of the color of the rose. "Showered by rain" also describes the process of a flower growing (how a rose is born). Is this what you were thinking? I'm very happy my poem inspired another work!
Comment is about Garden Thoughts (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell