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BARN DANCE (PROGRESSIVE)

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(An old post but you can't stint on class)

 

We started at seven with everything fine

The Old People’s dance would be over by nine

We were lovely and cuddly, wise and benign

It was Christmas and things were so festive

No reason for it to get restive.

 

But the signs were all there when they brought out the tea

(You all get your cuppa and biscuit for free)

But the shit hit the fan when old Mrs McGee

Who is a chocolate obsessive

Took two McVities Digestives.

 

The baking was done by two local nuns

Mr Singh was admiring their fresh Sally Lunns

When he said that he’d like to nibble their buns

We thought he was being suggestive

The atmosphere turned to oppressive.

 

And then when the Barn Dance became a Paul Jones

Reverend Tomlinson caused a few moans

Refusing to pass on that fastcat Ramone

But danced with her twice successive

Which everyone thought was excessive.

 

Then young Mrs Tomlinson she waded in

(Who never left home without a large gin)

And caught her a pearler square on the chin

They said that the dance was progressive

It turned out more like aggressive.

 

And all of us thought that it was a bit much

When Florence’s hand grazed Mr Green’s crutch

We certainly thought it a feel not a touch

His smile was very expressive

It seemed her grip was compressive.

 

Then Mrs Green leapt from her cart by the wall

And keening a war cry entered the brawl

The Barn Dance resembled a scrum or a maul

Her rucking was very impressive

But scarcely Christian or festive.

 

Well, round about eight the police would appear

So that'll be that until the next year

For a bunch of Old Gits and senile Old Dears

Far from dreary depressives

For Old Codgers you’ll find us impressive.

◄ MONOGAMOUS WORDS

THE LITTLE MASTER ►

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John Coopey

Sun 19th Jul 2015 00:16

I'm not sure what this aaabb form is called, Harry. I first encountered it in an Alfred Noyes poem, "When Daddy Fell Into The Pond". It is a great comedic vehicle with its faux cliffhangers, especially the 4th lines.

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 18th Jul 2015 15:01

John,
Liked the rhyme scheme (The humour`s not bad either)

Mind, our lot could beat this lot any time.

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John Coopey

Tue 14th Jul 2015 23:36

Thanks for your thoughts, MC.
I am merely an apprentice among these friends.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 14th Jul 2015 23:02

The content is far from depressive
And can hardly be read as regressive!
JC...
even without musical accompaniment, this is top fun!!
P.S. I'm not sure though about the company you keep.

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