Patricio, many thanks for your comments on Cur. You may have been on the right track there, but then again? Regards, Graham.
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Martin thanks for reading and commenting on Cur.
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Ray, thanks for your comments on Cur. Suffice to say "you won't".
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Stu many thanks for commenting on Cur. It's a real bugger getting the ink to stick to the screen and quills are getting really expensive ✒️
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so much wonderful, evocative descriptive work abounds here, but the killer lines are the last, and most simple. theres a lot of heat and melting going on here giving the whole thing a really nice, subtle metaphor.
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What a great songwriter, loved his stuff. Also check out Alone again naturally . quite poignant. Ray
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Thank you for your very kind comments on 'The Place Where Only Dead Men Sleep' and 'Truncheon for Luncheon'. Very much appreciated Pat.
I like your biography, the world is for you, and you have a
great body of work.
"It is not important to the wicked seed It's always the bloody same
for the Devils need to feed on a tattered remain, the Devils need to feed is what keeps them all sane"
So very true.
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Glad you are both enjoyed and liked this piece. For those involved in the carnage of trench warfare their daily grind must have been the worlds greatest laxative.
Thank you for your kind comments. 'Lest we Forget'.
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"Mods in Parkas... riding Vespas"... that was the 'hook' for me Martin. (Went to WOL at the Brooklyn on my Vespa.. wearing a Parka to perform my first poems last year)..
Great visions of when summers were always hot, happy and went so fast and tragedy was only an overtake away.
'Colonel Bogey air-horn'... can hear it as I read it.
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Fish in the fog?... Brilliant! Nice image.
This fog is so unnatural
And very worrying too
'Cos it's found inside my fish tank
The waters just like stew!
Write and share... non-stop is good or we would not have express trains and long-haul flights!
Great title and content. Loved this.
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Thank you very much for you comments on 'The Place Where Only Dead Men Sleep'. It is difficult to imagine the savagery,fear and horrors of trench warfare so to write it in the first person was a piece of escapism.
Glad you liked it and I look forward to reading the one you penned after your visit to Northern France Anna.
Kind regards
Daniel.
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Tue 3rd Nov 2015 14:36
Wonderfully evocative Martin, not a word out of place to distract.
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Tue 3rd Nov 2015 14:33
I can only agree with Ray Lynn, these lines keep drawing me back to read over again.
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a satisfying play on words, Lynn and great in its simplicity - your trademark. A pleasure to see such concise use of thoughts.
Lovely. Ray
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I like this a lot Patricio. It resonates with the mysterious part of the self that should keep an open mind even if this may be a bargain with the devil - who - if this exists in some form may know a lot more about us than we might admit. (For the devil substitute God as an option).
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sex on the edge of sleep for a start is a wild and wonderful thing. I remember it vaguely. But the idea of separation for the day is a reminder that the night can be wonderful as well and life is a preparation for dark forces.
horny bastard. Regards, Ray
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Will keep that in mind. Thank you!
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Just read you profile Marianne. My advice for someone starting out in poetry would be this.
Make every word mean something. There are lots of words that fill in gaps but don't actually say much themselves. Make every word count.
Graham
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Lost at sea...and the fear of surviving? Welcome Marianne. Tommy
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Interesting first piece Marianne, look forward to seeing more of your work.
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Thanks to everyone who came out on a foggy, miserable Monday night in Leeds. Your generosity meant we raised £90 for Real Junk Food, which will go towards helping them continue their work. Special thanks to Mark Connors and all the open-mic poets. Brilliant.
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Desert island poems- is that when you only get to read one third of the verses? Tommy
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Liked this! Sometimes less is so much more!!
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infected suture indeed! Pithy to the point of pithiness!
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most of the time I'm on the edge of a sword so to speak that's why I write, to me it's nice if it's appreciated, it's also good if someone can see my interpretation or not!. The main thing is that you write and enjoy it, even if it is a simple tale of a Wednesday morning watching a butterfly flittering around the garden, even if their is nothing to interpret. so keep doing it, keep writing and keep sane. Well done.
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Good point.
"A sign...a sign!" - to borrow from a well-known source.
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Thanks Cynthia for liking On the Northern Line!
I noticed your profile picture is by Picasso, and I was reading an article about Sylvette David, his last muse in a magazine called The Oldie. Well worth a read. She has a current exhibition of her own paintings in Devon. Regards Ray
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Well thank you cynthia. My poem was just a jotting of a memory! Sorry you see non stop as a pain in the arse but I can only write as I know how. If I stopped to look at my work to analyse how others might interpret it then I would lose my courage to share it! I used to write in the form of short stories so please forgive my ignorance and lack of form.
Thanks
Anita
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Lol serious undertone mind you..you are a very good poet
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Thanks for your comment patricio. I'm afraid I'm not that clever! It was a real memory, of a moment in time. When in a dilemma I have to be flippant! I do find it interesting how others can see more. You may have given me inspiration for something else to write!
Many thanks
Anita
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i think so. i just wanted it to start out as a simple breakup and become something huge. i feel like the house is attacking me when emma leaves. i miss her! but sometimes when im having a bad day i think to myself 'god, if i wasnt here and now i could be doing so much more'. i wanted to illustrate that through the protagonist changing and becoming light and energy when his girlfriend left him. the fountain of youth part at the end was purely to illustrate that he has now become weightless and infinite. does that make sense?
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Thanks Cynthia.
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Some thoughts to keep.
I often think that use of the seasons as metaphors is a risky business, as it assumes all readers come from the same global climate belt, not to mention terrain. A bit like 'Christmas must have snow' or it isn't truly Christmas, an immature 'European' take on a magnificent concept that crossed the oceans imperialistically, and has been very selfishly distorted from a world viewpoint.
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Very atmospheric and a good story well-told. I really enjoyed the diction skills.
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Hilarious! I burst out laughing.
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Very timely, and clever.
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Thanks all for your appreciation. I can't comment individually, though I would like to. Don't know why I chose that line, I hardly used it myself, but as the terrain gets higher it obviously goes deeper, and therefore more mysterious! The idea of being trapped I think makes it work and the mayhem of noise echoing . Patricio and Stu, you have the benefit of being involved close - up, so that makes it especially piquant. Cheers all, and a happy post- Halloween!
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Are we to reduce all this cauldron of animated thoughts to Prester John?
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I like Patricio's 'take' on the possible metaphor, intended by the poet or not. Poems often really do take on a life of their own with expanding circles of ideas. You have a deft poetic hand.
But, in fairness, I have often found that non-stop symbolic interpretation can become a real PITA. Unless, of course, we exist only in metaphor anyway. ;0)
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Oh! You saw him too?! ;)
Great poem Ray. I love a good yarn.
Anna
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This subject gives writers so much to feel. We are compelled to pen creative lines about these events despite never having been there as witnesses ourselves. The closest I got was on a holiday to northern France two years ago when I took my young children to the fields where the front lines of WW1 would have been and to pay our respects in a cemetery where I was so moved thinking about those young boys beneath our feet, that I wrote a piece too.
I enjoyed the way your poem was written in the first person Daniel, and that it was all from 'your' point of view. I liked "A para-flare lights up all our sorrow" - here I can almost see their faces.
I'll post the poem I wrote after my visit to northern France up here on my blog page when I can find it.
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Thank you for your kind feedback Ray. Most appreciated - it really made my day :)
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Brilliant story telling Ray-love it!
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a very sad time for communities losing livelihoods, no the mines were not comfortable, nice places to work but at least it was work and when closed they were viable still, towns became deserted and desecrated. thatcher had a lot to answer for, I don't think the nation has ever really recovered fully from the uninspiring treatment the Tories bashed it with, now with Cameron it never will. The unions played their part too, however weren't they fighting for safe healthy working mines against greedy profit? Nice poem, I'm sure will open up many conversations.
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I used to run Mornington Crescent station as a young station foreman, eerie tail yet somehow seems surreal and a very good Halloween story ray.
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raypool
Tue 3rd Nov 2015 20:30
A whole in one David. Plus the "correctness" of pointing out the acceptability of death to a child when she already knows the basics perhaps- Who knows? or as I've said before "who cares?" We'll see if anybody else picks up the scent . I have my doubts, but I'm as cynical as I am imaginative.
yours til the brain implodes.
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