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Fish in the fog!

Oh my God!  There are fish in the fog! 

As I stood there staring into the mist 

There suddenly appeared small fish.

They danced and played and chased each other 

In and out of the old shipwreck 

That I could hardly see through the fog. 

They swam around the castle 

With its tall, dark turrets

And I spotted, momentarily, a small sign..  

Just visible were the words "No FISHING "

As the fish ducked and dived 

In what was now pea soup 

I wondered to myself 

How have they all survived! 

This fog is so unnatural 

And very worrying too 

' Cos it's found inside my fish tank 

The waters just like stew! 

I inherited the tank and fish 

From Grandad Pete, who died. 

Now I know nothing about fish 

And less about tanks

But I have learned that clear water 

Can turn into this murky piss. 

There are two monster plecs 

Still alive in the fog 

But I haven't seen them in days! 

Have just heard their loud plop

As they came up for air 

And crash back in the water 

Almost in despair.

I have water filters and heaters 

Even water softeners too 

But I'm afraid I haven't solved 

The mystery of the fish in the fog! 

 

◄ The light is brighter

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 9th Nov 2015 13:48

Good grief, Anita, the final comment wasn't about your poem!

It was a general observation about how some people are addicted to finding 'symbolism' in every blooming thing or sentence, and this 'addiction' is a PITA, because they never let-up, never let something just 'be'. Patricio's take was very interesting, and highly possible. I surely thought you got my intent with the smiley face and the final comment. I spoke as though I knew you well, and that was an error. Sharing poetry does that to me, and I've got to be more careful. Please accept my apologies.

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Ged the Poet

Tue 3rd Nov 2015 15:05

Fish in the fog?... Brilliant! Nice image.
This fog is so unnatural
And very worrying too
'Cos it's found inside my fish tank
The waters just like stew!

Write and share... non-stop is good or we would not have express trains and long-haul flights!
Great title and content. Loved this.

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Patricio LG

Mon 2nd Nov 2015 19:05

most of the time I'm on the edge of a sword so to speak that's why I write, to me it's nice if it's appreciated, it's also good if someone can see my interpretation or not!. The main thing is that you write and enjoy it, even if it is a simple tale of a Wednesday morning watching a butterfly flittering around the garden, even if their is nothing to interpret. so keep doing it, keep writing and keep sane. Well done.

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Anita Connor

Mon 2nd Nov 2015 15:01

Well thank you cynthia. My poem was just a jotting of a memory! Sorry you see non stop as a pain in the arse but I can only write as I know how. If I stopped to look at my work to analyse how others might interpret it then I would lose my courage to share it! I used to write in the form of short stories so please forgive my ignorance and lack of form.
Thanks
Anita

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Anita Connor

Mon 2nd Nov 2015 14:53

Thanks for your comment patricio. I'm afraid I'm not that clever! It was a real memory, of a moment in time. When in a dilemma I have to be flippant! I do find it interesting how others can see more. You may have given me inspiration for something else to write!
Many thanks
Anita

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 2nd Nov 2015 12:38

I like Patricio's 'take' on the possible metaphor, intended by the poet or not. Poems often really do take on a life of their own with expanding circles of ideas. You have a deft poetic hand.

But, in fairness, I have often found that non-stop symbolic interpretation can become a real PITA. Unless, of course, we exist only in metaphor anyway. ;0)

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Patricio LG

Mon 2nd Nov 2015 03:59

continual water changes lol, funny but also a warning one thinks to all of us. In the bigger scale of the planet. Are we living in a fog?

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