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raypool

Thu 19th Nov 2015 21:14

Fill your boots Daniel. I wholly agree with this , we don't need propaganda to spread like the proverbial ordure. Ray

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Patricio LG

Thu 19th Nov 2015 21:05

We all have strong values that are surprisingly weakened by the idea of a cup of tea and a cigarette lol

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Patricio LG

Thu 19th Nov 2015 20:04

I really would have liked to fit more in, however it would have had to have been a lot larger but then if it was larger it would not have worked, thanks anyway David. Enjoy if it's bearable

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Nov 2015 19:40

Thanks David, Laura and Patricio. I spent a lot of time on this one trying to get it right.
Your comments are much appreciated.

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Nov 2015 19:33

sounds great. I love the sparseness in the way it is set out as much as the use of words.

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Nov 2015 19:29

A powerful piece Ray. I particularly like the line 'with a hatred of light'

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Nov 2015 19:15

Beautifully put Graham. I love your description.

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Nov 2015 19:11

This is great Stu. I particularly love ....'fuelled by dollar and decay and the cancerous open wound'...
I like the way the whole piece flows as David says the tumbling sense of this. I agree this would make a fabulous piece to perform. Are you coming over to the North west again any time soon.
Fantastic

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John Coopey

Thu 19th Nov 2015 17:50

Thanks, Ken. He had excellent wordplay. I thought "In My Garden of Love" was magic.
("Gus the Gardener's gone now and you went with him too
The fungus here reminds me of the fun Gus is having with you"). Incomparable.

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 19th Nov 2015 17:19

What comeback Cynthia?

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 19th Nov 2015 17:08

Cyn the foto is of Roisin and myself :-)

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Michelle

Thu 19th Nov 2015 16:57

Thank you very much. Much appreciated x

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Laura Taylor

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:56

Fabulous! Practice x a million and the best of luck for it :) I'd love to see film of it if you can get it too.

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raypool

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:40

Thanks PLG.

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raypool

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:33

Such a pleasure to have real authentic detail and to see the variety accessible in a walk . A hint of David Bellamy as I recall - grubbing down in the undergrowth.

very enjoyable Graham.

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raypool

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:26

I think what you and others are going through is a disillusionment of established religious orthodoxy, leading to a cul de sac of pointlessness. Me too; I've always sought loopholes - can't see the point of pomp and holier than thousand thees and thys or their foreign equivalents.

The death throes are in place -just a matter of time.

very nicely expressed. Ray

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raypool

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:18

Cynthia, it almost feels like the old and new testament messages, obviously religion applies to both, but the inflexibility comes in with the old. I say, out with the old and in with the new. It's a shame churches only have one door in -there should be other ways of surprising the establishment . An endless topic!
Ray

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Patricio LG

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:00

It tells a tale that can be read while leaving ones imagination open to divulge as deep as it needs to unravel a perfect picture... Wonderful

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Patricio LG

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:47

Surreal Ray, very heavy, almost as if one could touch them.

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:42

im going to perform this and 'once upon a sea of blissful awareness' next month in wrexham. im already taking a very deep breath...

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Laura Taylor

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:42

Oh this is excellent. Hugely evocative, and very exciting. Well done!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:40

Oooo! Biffed me in the nose this. This would make an amazing performance piece. It builds beautifully. I would be ranting my fucking head off by the end of this. Do it do it do it.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:38

Mmm yes I like this lots too.

there are letters in the black of flying birds
and flowers chatter in a woodland breeze

quality that ^

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Patricio LG

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:36

Kind of balance, such as yin and yan, scales. Karma, what goes in must come out, the reason I never watch horror films

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Nov 2015 13:45

this is excellent and reminds me (in theme not tone) of one of my favourite passages from 'a scattering' by christopher reid. i'll paste it below.

twists of griddled succulence
tweaked from their shells with a slack
twang of reluctance, chewed,
then chased down with a wine
described on the menu as black.

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Nov 2015 13:40

excellent. will read more of your stuff.

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Tim Ellis

Thu 19th Nov 2015 13:07

Another one from my new pamphlet. This poem refers to the application being considered by North Yorkshire County Council from Third Energy to frack for gas at Kirby Misperson in Ryedale. You can get the pamphlet from my website http://www.birdbard.co.uk/bookshop.html
and it's also on Amazon and Kindle http://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/1519178085/ref=r_soa_w_d

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ken eaton-dykes

Thu 19th Nov 2015 12:59

Hi JC Great rib tickling stuff

I over dosed on white noise indulgence one day, and was so depressed decided to finish myself off with aspirin
But thank God I felt better after the first two.

(Old Benny Hill joke)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 19th Nov 2015 12:25

I must find time to catch up with your work. This is delightful.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 19th Nov 2015 11:42

Your comeback is totally brilliant, utterly confusing, very cathartic. I shall treasure it.

The child in your photo is very beautiful, like the portraits of many mediaeval 'Mary's', all big, clear eyes and rosy lips in a pale face. It could be a boy, but same comment - no difference. And you don't look so bad yourself, of course.

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Lynn Hamilton

Wed 18th Nov 2015 22:43

And a marker pen!

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John Coopey

Wed 18th Nov 2015 22:39

ThanksMC. I did this in the great British tradition of saucy postcards and as a sort of homage to Benny Hill. (And as an antidote to some of the self-indulgent, self-important white noise you get on this site).

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 18th Nov 2015 22:23

Tommy is thinking:

why do posters

refer to themselves in the third person.

I have tried to,

so has himself.

When both are speaking
in the third person,

he himself, finds,
that they are himself,

asking themself why?

Can two people converse
in the third person?

Tommy finds it difficult

to quote directly from

a third person's point of view

while speaking to the third-person

themselves.

We wonder if one's first-person

obligates the second-person's

directly attributed pro-noun.

I myself think that we should

-Tommy is speaking directly
here-

avoid all confusion
in such matters

by using the first-person

when writing or speaking
to the reader,

as one will find that
he or she wonders

if they themselves
are also confused.

Yours (or is it ones)


Tommy Carroll (himself).

words foto and himself

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 18th Nov 2015 21:57

Cheers Cynth

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Lynn Hamilton

Wed 18th Nov 2015 20:39

Thanks for reading, commenting and seeing the picture, I saw (he looked quite content - his loved ones, understandably, were not). xxxx

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 18th Nov 2015 19:50

Cheers Ray, well encapsulated.

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 18th Nov 2015 19:48

Cheers Ray, well encapsulated.

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raypool

Wed 18th Nov 2015 19:21

Thanks chaps. It was quite scary just the wind, but then the cut as well! then the candlelight - how could I go wrong? I tried to convey a mix of gothic and modern, a challenge!
thanks for reading.

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Katy Megan Hughes

Wed 18th Nov 2015 18:25

Thank you Paul!

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 18th Nov 2015 17:24

Uplifting within the content of the grief - life MUST go on.
I'm reminded of the Kern/Hammerstein song of WW2 -
"The Last Time I saw Paris"..when that great city had
fallen under the Nazi jackboot.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 18th Nov 2015 17:15

Nice, gentle love song with a satisfying pay-off, that could be rewarded with a tune to match.
In verse 2 I would have been tempted to use something
like -
"You're the rhythm to my rhyme" - for the last line.
But that's me being subjective...nothing more.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 18th Nov 2015 17:07

Fun to see this sort of post - not always the easiest to
try yet alone complete.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 18th Nov 2015 17:03

Animal crackers!
Always great to see you bang on form - or banging on
about form!

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 18th Nov 2015 15:50


Neat, Ray, and Byronically apt.

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Bob Hill

Wed 18th Nov 2015 15:20

Thanks to all who came along to Readaround. ACE funding permitting please watch this space for news of our return in 2016.

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Wed 18th Nov 2015 14:10

A beautiful poem Lynn, wonderful.

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Patricio LG

Wed 18th Nov 2015 13:34

too true it gives one time to think though. :-), this damn wind has broken my shed. How small we are

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Patricio LG

Wed 18th Nov 2015 11:58

yes you certainly do write with feeling, so do I, there's an honesty in that. Well done

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Wed 18th Nov 2015 11:50

Hi Cynthia,
Thanks for popping by and leaving your comments on Leisure. The original by W.H.Davies is one of my all time favourites too-many a time those are the words which spring to my lips when stood in a wild and windy place. And his first book,Diary of a Supertramp has been an influence on how I've led my life since first reading it forty odd years ago. But 'massacre'? That was not the intention and I believe that Davies would've approved.

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Stu Buck

Wed 18th Nov 2015 08:52

actually, the longer i stay away from professional kitchens the more i fall back in love with food in general. i think the same can be said for most careers. they sap the joy from whatever it was you once loved (usually the reason you entered the career in the first place). glad you liked the poem! the worst thing about the wife being pregnant is that i promised i wouldn't eat a steak until she could!

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