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Graham Sherwood

Sun 25th Oct 2015 09:26

This piece raises an interesting subject about just how much one can find out about people (on the Internet) without really knowing them.

Interestingly, I think reading people's poetry can give enormous insight into different lives (a little like thumbing through someone's music collection).

The stalking, watching, watching, watching in a Zen like state can also mimic the passivity of staring at a computer screen, trance-like.

But do you really care? or are you really saying you don't.

This is truly ambiguous.

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brandon sproule

Sun 25th Oct 2015 05:18

Your piece was great. Respect for the honesty in your rhymes.

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Amanda Van Gorder

Sun 25th Oct 2015 02:35

I love it

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 24th Oct 2015 23:00

A timely and rewarding journey through the seasons
of a lifetime, with autumn the period of harvest plenty
before the threadbare trials of winter - in nature as in our
brief lives in its keeping.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 24th Oct 2015 22:53

I enjoyed this narrative - and could imagine Pete Seeger
or maybe Woody Guthrie singing it to a haunting country/
railroad lament.

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raypool

Sat 24th Oct 2015 21:58

a very persuasive poem and finely put Lynn. Simplicity is always powerful and the fact that it is in question form says it all. Ray

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Sat 24th Oct 2015 19:59

very good Lynn

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Stu Buck

Sat 24th Oct 2015 18:50

thanks guys! i like this one too. your positivity keeps me writing!

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Lynn Hamilton

Sat 24th Oct 2015 17:40

This poem should be preserved Stu, really lovely x

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Martin Elder

Sat 24th Oct 2015 17:22

Thank you so much . It was a good evening. so nice to see some more new faces. You were of course in good form as always. Hope to see you next month

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 24th Oct 2015 12:46

Martin, I really enjoyed your readings at Sale last Tuesday.

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Preeti Sinha

Sat 24th Oct 2015 11:17

Wow! Just wow. Thanks for NOT being a pretentious fucking idiot ;)

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Preeti Sinha

Sat 24th Oct 2015 11:16

I'm spent. You?

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Corr Lens

Sat 24th Oct 2015 09:24

thanks for the comments, always very helpful.

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Dara Smith

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 22:17

Thank you, I appreciate that Martin Elder.

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John Coopey

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 19:47

A pleasure to find one of your posts again. So refreshing in its rhythmic simplicity and contrast to much of the "worthy" and self-indulgent stuff that gets posted on this site.

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Martin Elder

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 19:39

This hits me like a brick, reminding me that I have listened to the same thing before from many people who do not feel like they are being heard. A brillant poem .

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Carolyn O'Connell

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 19:36

This will be a great read, Alison has worked to. bring these women's experience to life in poetry . Looking forward to getting my copy.

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Martin Elder

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 19:35

This is a great poem , I particularly like the line
'But the past hugs me like a ghost'

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Martin Elder

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 19:28

A heady brew . This one Stu. You seem to be getting more and more into your stride. cracking!

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Fri 23rd Oct 2015 19:08

Hi Ian-many thanks for your feedback on Bobby The Bonehead Bouncer. Ledger

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David R Mellor

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 18:44

thanks Patrico, thanks for taking the time to comment and heartwarming you like it

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David R Mellor

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 18:41

very true Adam , i always find those moments of pleasant chats with strangers very life affirming , thanks for the comment

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Fri 23rd Oct 2015 18:08

Bloody good!

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Nigel Astell

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 15:56

The Cave

Down on Brighton beach
a place so dark
the grey rock hides
what goes on inside.

But if out fishing
and your net empty
sandy bodies will invite
eager for a catch.

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Nigel Astell

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 15:36

The Morning Train

Catching the right one is what I have to do
but if everyone I ask frowns then keeps shaking head
must be on the train that has the mystery trip!

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Stu Buck

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 15:26

thanks anna! i took ages deciding wether to use the c word but for me it works. im glad it oozes a heady mix! i was trying to stimulate the senses. that feeling of discovery, the smell of spices and the start of a relationship.

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Anna Ghislena

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 15:14

Love the sensuous feel of this poem. It oozes a heady mix for the senses. Really good.

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Dara Smith

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 12:14

Interesting.... It could also be seen as it being a conversation with someone whom the author has an interest in, and wants to make sure that the other individual would be able to handle what's being said without acts or thoughts that are based solely on physical contact, but instead a deep mental stimulation.

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Dara Smith

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 11:11

Thank you! You are correct on so many levels and always seem to get the authors words or shall I say my words.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 10:52

Cheers Ray, re 'I stood and stared'. It was during one of my moments of contemplation, and, catching my reflection as I stared out of the window. I do have the original mirror on the original wall and the original foto too. ;-) Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 10:51

Cheers Ray, re 'I stood and stared'. It was during one of my moments of contemplation, and, catching my reflection as I stared out of the window. I do have the original mirror on the original wall and the original foto too. ;-) Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 10:40

A flaming good rant Patricio. One could envisage this on a stage in a club. :-) Tommy

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Martin Elder

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 09:01

Thanks for your comments Stu and Huw. yes Stu I have performed this live and it seemed to go down well. I have to say at that time of my life I had little success with chatting up girls due to own social ineptitude. But this is based on Saturday summer nights in Brighton.

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Fri 23rd Oct 2015 08:17

Hi Ray, thanks for your comments on Bobby The Bonehead Bouncer-a poem written in anger but given that comic book approach as a piss take of that breed. As a working musician I've no doubt you've seen more than your fair share of their thuggery!

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Anna Ghislena

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 07:51

Thank you, Martin, for your comment, very much appreciated. I am glad you enjoyed reading it.

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Patricio LG

Fri 23rd Oct 2015 06:59

Very nice deep message.

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Stu Buck

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 23:16

what a nicely drawn out metaphor. this stands as a fine piece of writing and would be good live methinks. i use to go clubbing a lot and saw these types all the time. i never partook myself as i was a) socially anxious and b) full of drugs. but i can relate to what you are saying.

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Stu Buck

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 23:10

thanks ray! i guess i have plenty of reserve to pull on when it comes to my youth. but dont we all i suppose. its just something i find quite easily flows.
glad you enjoyed this one.

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Martin Elder

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 22:51

I love the surgical approach to this poem with the almost sinister overtones.

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raypool

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 22:13

I just love how this unfolds, with questions of how and why as I can only view your inner meaning with curiosity. So many choice lines that I can't name them all!

A real nightmare scenario yet with nostalgia built in. How do you do that?

Thanks by the way about Chalk Pit. Sometimes you can overdo description so I wanted to pull the eye in and leave it wanting more. cheers Ray

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raypool

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 22:07

This interesting poem reminds me of a strong silent type that may seem self contained, and the mirror keeps your secret. Would I be right, or is it not auto biographical Tommy? yours with respect.

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John Coopey

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 20:36

Hello Colin
Glad you like the Airblade. Next time you use one you'll be thinking, "Now do I need to wash my hands again?"

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Thu 22nd Oct 2015 20:24

whenever I use a Dyson Airblade I always imagine withdrawing my hands and finding just the bones have been left. Must admit your option has crossed my mind too. I'm sure you could get one installed at home and enjoy to your heart's content. Thanks for making me laugh John. For me the poem is the last three lines:

“Am I missing a trick?”

I thought that the Dyson Airblade

Was put there for drying your prick.

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Thu 22nd Oct 2015 18:22

It is me CBT

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 17:04

Some lovely lines, Katy, full of fine imagery and internal assonance, to bring to life your thoughts. And they do 'breathe'.

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dorinda macdowell

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 16:38

More tissues needed, Nigel
For a few stray tears
Because
Of your
Kind words.....

(trying to write 'Nigel-style:
Can't do it!!!
It's yours
And yours alone...!...)

D.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 16:10

A compelling observation, well-considered and constructed. Perhaps it is enough to have the poem, and not the enlarged explanation. Anything remotely 'faith-fixated' will always stir reaction, which is not a bad thing, unless it takes you by surprise. Keep posting.

The other observations here are part of an on-going process of certain persons getting to know each other through their works and diverse comments. Other writers tend to have strong opinions, as you have yours.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 15:47

A very good one, Tommy. That is you in the photo, yes? Or a close relative? Penetrating eyes - aquiline nose - saucy moustache - got to be family.

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Stu Buck

Thu 22nd Oct 2015 08:43

a wedge of fossils pressed into service

in the great death moan of watery time

damn fine.

a snapshot of mere moments enhanced by verbosity unmatched!

hurrah.

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